• anyone better than me who can create a new instrumental track for this song?
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Hi!
I'm quite attached to this song, as it is one of the first I wrote years ago, so I was wondering if someone can create a better instrumental track for it. At the moment I can use only garageband for ipad and it's not the best way to make great arrangements 😂
Thanks in advance 😁

Here's the song:

https://soundcloud.com/claudiogeromino/claudio-geromino-homeless-original-song




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maybe you can share chords and lyrics. I listen to the song - it already sounds good. Specially the piano. The drums are a bit too much imho... if you can send separate stems, i could do a remix.
Good luck
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


Please share the lyrics. Would you like the same chord-progression or do you want it completely different? @Clanik92
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i loved your song it was awesome and well arranged, only thing i wish you would post the lyrics so i can get an understanding of the theme of the song and what you were feeling at the time when you wrote it. i loved the piano and the drums were just fine. i thought it was gonna be a rock ballad anyways you have lots of talent and keep up the great work please share your lyrics and the chords to the song, it would be awesome to add guitar and a guitar lead would be nice, you rock bro \m/ \m/ keep it up bro!!!!!! ::thumb::


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Thank you all for your answers!
Here's the lyrics, even if there's something to correct as I don't speak english as my primary language  :-\

This road is fading
I can't see the end
My blood is freezing
Can't find a place to stay.
My heart is screaming
but nobody wants to hear
my voice that dimly
is asking for a help.

I'm wandering in this world
homeless
And I can't
Express the pain I feel everyday.

Chorus:

Nobody wants to help me finding a place in which I could stay
Nobody seems to hear me crying, lost here in my loneliness.
I'm alone without a home, a hope, and people that I could love,
please God give me the strenght to live, to go far away from here.

My feet are bleeding
Rain falls all aroung
And I ask for a ceiling
that nobody wants to share.
I feel like an orphan
who wanders without any light.
And I hope that someone
comes to give me a help.

I'm wandering in this world
Homeless.
And I can't
Express the pain I feel everyday.

Chorus:

Nobody wants to help me finding a place in which I could stay
Nobody seems to hear me crying, lost here in my loneliness.
I'm alone without a home, a hope, and people that I could love,
please God give me the strenght to live, to go far away from here.

To go far away from here
To leave.
To find a place to stay

Nobody wants to help me finding a place in which I could stay
Nobody seems to hear me crying, lost here in my loneliness.
I'm alone without a home, a hope, and people that I could love,
please God give me the strenght to live, to go far away from here.


Chords are:

G# - Cm - Bb - G# (x3)
G# - Cm - Bb - G#
G# - D# - Bb - G#
G# - D# - Bb - Bb

(Chorus)

D# - Bb - G# - Bb
D# - Bb - G# - Bb
G# - D# - Bb - Cm
G# - D# - Bb - Bb






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