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Need help with this one!
on: January 25, 2019, 00:29:20
Hi!  :) I was writing a new song, the lyrics came out in italian but I feel that this one would be better with lyrics in english  :)
I'll leave here the instrumental, in hope that maybe one of you will feel inspired to write some powerful lyrics.
Feel free also to sing on it, if you want...make the song yours  ;)

Also, I don't know if this can help, but in italian the track is titled "Se tieni a me", wich means "If you care for me".

Link to the song:

https://soundcloud.com/claudiogeromino/se-tieni-a-me


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Re: Need help with this one!
Reply #1 on: January 25, 2019, 02:29:05
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A very sympathetic gesture this is.
Alas, the track is not to be found, so maybe it is listed as private or some such thing.

Is it an idea perhaps to give @gabrivux a Personal Message? Shes Italian, Im quite taken to the kind of music she makes and whats more: shes backed up (in her band) by people who know what they are doing.

I certainly am going to follow this threat!
Kind regards, Gus


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Reply #2 on: January 25, 2019, 08:33:12
Alas, the track is not to be found, so maybe it is listed as private or some such thing.

Is it an idea perhaps to give @gabrivux a Personal Message? Shes Italian, Im quite taken to the kind of music she makes and whats more: shes backed up (in her band) by people who know what they are doing.

I certainly am going to follow this threat!
Kind regards, Gus

Good morning!   :) The track was listed as private, now its public! Thanks for letting me know and for your advice  :)


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Re: Need help with this one!
Reply #3 on: January 25, 2019, 13:38:06
I like the way the music builds.....there is an ebb and flow to it and I can hear how it would work with a vocal track. There are a few places where you could tighten things up a bit by locking in the bass with the piano a bit better...that would make it flow even better and invite in the vocals even more.
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Reply #4 on: January 26, 2019, 00:13:18
@Clanik92  - nice one. I like the acoustic guitar subtleties. The piano could be tweaked a bit like @Leonard Scaper  suggests.
I could try out some vocal track, if there are any lyrics - but I have never sung in Italian.
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


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Reply #5 on: January 26, 2019, 01:37:53
@Leonard Scaper thanks for your opinion and your advices, I'll try to do what you said  :)

@oorlab Thanks! You don't have to sing in italian, I've already wrote lyrics in my language and I have also a melody for them in my mind, but I feel the music would fit better to english lyrics, and I need a little help for that  ;D The reason why I didn't leave the melody for the vocals on the track is that I don't want to limit the creativity of people who wants to write something for my song  :)