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Alone on the bridge
on: August 27, 2018, 11:44:36
I'm quite 'appy with these here lyrics.
Still, feedback is vey welcome.           :)

It may seem contradictive in itself, but it's not.
Lots of metaphor in there.






Alone On The Bridge   

Potential was squandered
      neglect has turned it brown
      no amount of water
   did ever touch the ground

    Step away from that door
  and leave those orphaned keys
for all of your fine splendour
  you never found relief
alone on the bridge, you were floating on it
  longer than you would like to admit

  kill or be killed, if that's what gets you
       up on your heels,
        and running until…

    Away from all the noise
      deep in your empty room
       your resurected voice
    serenades a distant moon

   Dressed for a funeral
you never leave the house
 with ev'ry passing day
  another light goes out
alone on the bridge, attractions effacing
darker than the quicksand you are chasing

do what thou willt, shall be
    the whole of the law…
          for loving oneself

Back to the bridge, you are floating on it
   longer than you would care to admit
      la noche oscura del alma
      Alone on the Bridge

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Re: Alone on the bridge
Reply #1 on: August 28, 2018, 14:13:26
That first verse just drew me right in. Also this verse:

   Dressed for a funeral
you never leave the house
 with ev'ry passing day
  another light goes out


I love how you don't go for exact rhyme .

This whole piece just really engulfed me in the dark night of the soul. I'll be looking for it as a song.
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Re: Alone on the bridge
Reply #2 on: September 03, 2018, 14:08:13
That first verse just drew me right in. Also this verse:

   Dressed for a funeral
you never leave the house
 with ev'ry passing day
  another light goes out


I love how you don't go for exact rhyme .

This whole piece just really engulfed me in the dark night of the soul. I'll be looking for it as a song.

That "dressed for a funeral" verse
is quite popular. lol. I like it too.

And the song is there now  :)



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