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Back of the Classroom
on: February 17, 2018, 12:30:36
hi! heres a song with a lot of words in it. something just has to be wrong or wierd in this one for a native english speaker.
also looking for some perspective. dont want to give any hints but would be great if someone actually got the meaning without me saying anything. dont know if thats possible though :/

https://soundcloud.com/tuffbranschrecords/back-of-the-classroom

>say hi to the girls in the back of the classroom
>say hi if you dare if you have any backbone   
>you better be first cos theyll never approach you         
>and you better be bad too will you ever dare to try           

>hear to the grown ups the stories within them
>mummys and dads tryin to preach for their young men
>they say we could be flying up higher if we only listened and let them
>its still what it is though pretty hard to comprehend                     

>i was way to shy
>but had somehow figured out                 

>what not a type or generation                 
>but every teenage sweetheart knew             
>growing up with love as something             
>the boys will trick you into     
>a pitfall to walk through

>still on the run only 20 years later
>with the girl in the back and the memories faded
>leaning into 1every smile as my feelings grew greater
>so when dropping the bomb did you ever plan it out                       

>youve seen it before people overreacting
>and the shockwaves are more than you are expecting           
     
>and i know  theres nothing wrong at all   
>some people want it were no kids no more     
>be it the kick or something physical
>im prabably wrong and slightly cynical

>what am i to do
>you liked it didnt you

>cos i heard you talking louder
>and your eyes began to glow
>i think you smiled behind the wineglass
>not to great at all 
>im sorry there you go 

>it was them in the coalmines others on road sides     
>him on the last hour then finally outside                     
>now its her in the linnen and him on the bedside                       
>she could be telling me everything well i guess we have the night     

>i my kitchen with a drink                       
>id like to ask a million things
                                                   
>but what is knowledge when it eats you
>what are seeds when they dont grow
>down the river of your lifetime
>youve seen many come and go                 
>im sorry heres one more


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Re: Back of the Classroom
Reply #1 on: February 17, 2018, 12:48:30
This song is just SO good. Fantastic imagery......wonderfully performed.....a topnotch piece of writing.

I love the wordiness of it. Love begins early and becomes part of the fabric of our lives.....from that girl in the back of the classroom to that sad room at the end it all adds up to a whole.

but what is knowledge when it eats you
what are seeds when they dont grow
down the river of your lifetime
youve seen many come and go 


Stellar writing!

There are two things that caught my attention. The guitar right at the beginning comes in a bit haphazardly. If you could sharpen up that edit....

...and this lyric:

hear to the grown ups the stories within them....perhaps...here's to the grown ups the stories within them.

Huge kudos to you, Jonas, for such an amazing song.
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Re: Back of the Classroom
Reply #2 on: February 17, 2018, 17:07:27
hi Jonas @tuff bransch

what a great voice you have  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::A pleasure to listen to this  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::

i don't know if i should....or dare....but here is my idea about what the lyrics are about

there was this girl in the backroom of the class the singer of the song liked a lot, but never really dared to approach because he was too shy

and he kept thinking of her for years, and in some way he goes out to tell her 20 years later how much he liked her, but one of them, i think she, at that moment has a very bad illness with not much time left...

"now its her in the linnen and him on the bedside"""                       
"she could be telling me everything well i guess we have the night" 

i don't know why, but was what i was getting from the lyrics

me, myself, and Pie


Re: Back of the Classroom
Reply #3 on: February 17, 2018, 22:05:10
Very artistically done @tuff bransch ! I mean, wow, I just have to keep listening to figure it out you know?  ;)

It seems to be about unrequited love .... that eats away at the introverted man for a life time. Well, that's how most great art is.

As a writer of more "pop" sounding stuff I have to say the rhyming scheme and form of the song makes me uneasy. That's not a bad thing really......I just keep wanting a chorus or a hook or the ends of the phrases to rhyme when I think they should.
But, like I said different is cool and I just keep listening to it over and over!
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November Sound is based on the Mother, Father & Son musical trio of Melissa, Bill & Will. I'm the father so anything I post will have my wife singing and/or my son playing percussion.


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Re: Back of the Classroom
Reply #4 on: February 18, 2018, 00:00:47
 @tuff bransch       life..write and sing about it is so cool to me, great style and delivery here. something a guy never minds listening to again, and again. [just my thought]

my thoughts on the song..school days..never got the girl, 20 yrs bumps into her...hooks up. and reminds Her who he is/or was. ok cool maybe we can work this out? its all good right?   ..."d like to ask a million things"  nothing ever stays, or can be the same.. that realization,
better to part. in between then and now? to much "water.

thats my twisted mind....lol

again really good work.   


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Re: Back of the Classroom
Reply #5 on: February 18, 2018, 04:30:56
Maybe wordy, but if ervery word fits, who cares? I don’t. I like it.
Kind regards, Gus


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Re: Back of the Classroom
Reply #6 on: February 21, 2018, 16:59:28
@Leonard Scaper thanks for listening and giving the advice there with "here´s to the" ill definately go with that !
i tried so many things there when i hit rock bottom i was googling "heil" to see if its meaning had changed since a couple years back :D
the recording is kind of sloppy. the beginning and a big ugly cut somewhere. ill have a look at it. its a demo but the thing is that some things
always is better on the spontanious recordings. i guess many here have the same experience.

good guesses @Lane and @Dutchbeat ... i have reasons to be vague because i dont want to throw anyone under the bus
but "roadsides" is a keyword and the linnen bed side too..

would "flipside" work there maby? could you say that someone is on the flipside when hes actually buying sex?

@Bill from November Sound yes its really odd the rhymescheme or what its called. good that you like it,
its pretty much unchangeable now i guess...

@LePlongeur its not too often you can say this but thanx for not caring! :)



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Re: Back of the Classroom
Reply #7 on: February 28, 2018, 00:38:31
« Last Edit: February 28, 2018, 00:44:36 by MrBouzouki »
Late to the party with this one @tuff bransch but I wanted to say it's a class piece of songwriting.
Stylistically in places it sounds a bit with how Paul Simon would deliver one of his wordy stories, so this song definitely gets my vote.

Ummmm a repost on SoundCloud seems on the cards too.

Magic work mate :-)

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Re: Back of the Classroom
Reply #8 on: March 29, 2018, 13:20:43
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