• Everything Not Broken
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Everything Not Broken
on: July 03, 2018, 21:35:11
The only songs I've written in years have been for the challenges, but, as I was practicing this just came out. I think it will be called "Everything Not Broken" This just came from somewhere fast, maybe too fast? When I record it you'll hear a John Prine influence.

Was it something from a memory, or from a dream?
Things at first look arenít quite what they seem.
Why does sadness hang over you?
I guess some are born just to be blue.

I donít know much about life you see,
All of that stuff is too deep for me,
But, I looked into you, and I saw your heart,
Everything not broken soon falls apart.

(key change)
I do know trouble, because Iíve had my share,
And been through times when nobody cares,
Thereís no magic word to help get you through,
You just persevere or it will kill you.

I donít know much about life you see,
All of that stuff is too deep for me,
But, I looked into you, and I saw your heart,
Everything not broken soon falls apart.
Everything not broken soon falls apart.

Thanks,

Vince



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Re: Everything Not Broken
Reply #1 on: July 03, 2018, 21:41:23
hi @Vince
you know what they say...

all that is good, comes fast

and it looks like this is the case, in this case  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::
I lost it...ages ago


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Re: Everything Not Broken
Reply #2 on: July 05, 2018, 03:27:50
Thanks @Dutchbeat  - I'm always a little concerned that maybe the lyric imitates another song, because it comes out so fast and I have no subject in mind when I write.

It's amazing how few songs I've written since the late 60's. I think most have written in a year what I've done on over 40. I've almost got them all recorded now.

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Re: Everything Not Broken
Reply #3 on: July 05, 2018, 11:21:05
Hey @Vince ......these are good lyrics. They have a kind of classic feel to them in the way they dig deeply into the human condition. I get that John Prine thing already.

Maybe think about some sortofo bridge to break up the cadence of those verses.
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Re: Everything Not Broken
Reply #4 on: July 05, 2018, 19:21:12
@Leonard Scaper I totally agree with you about a bridge, sometimes I do wish I was more talented.

That's why I am having a different chord in the second verse - to make up for the lack of a bridge.  What I've worked out is a chord progression of  { I IV I ) {I IV I } { I vi IV } { I vi IV } In the 2nd verse though I will go to {V IV I} except for the last verse where I'll go back to { I vi IV }

I"ll probably record it in the key of A which sort of fits my "vocal" range. I'm always messing with my stuff, so probably some day I'll just be playing and blurt out the bridge.

Thank you so much for your input.

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