• Lyrics for 3/4 time entry song
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Lyrics for 3/4 time entry song
on: July 23, 2020, 20:30:06
I won't have a recording ready anytime soon, but I thought I would go ahead and post the lyrics. This is the first thing I've written this year, and most of last. I'm not as prolific as most of you, so I couldn't say if I was in a slump or not.

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Weíve been round and round, up and down
But baby look at us now,
Weíve been back and forth, so far off course,
But weíll make it back somehow,

   What does it matter that the world is in tatters,
   When we just want to go home?
   Is this the last song, or does it go on
   Because itís better than being alone?

Something borrowed, something blue, we have only ourselves to blame,
A new way to walk and a new way to talk,
But the dance is always the same.

   Iíve committed no crime, except for making bad rhymes,
   So itís straight to my room I must go,
   Howíd you know it was me you saw easily
   Or was it just by my prose?

Now the music will stop, the band will pack up,
But you still want to dance with me
So we will go on with our own little song,
Because we dance so comfortably

Vince


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Re: Lyrics for 3/4 time entry song
Reply #1 on: July 23, 2020, 22:12:15
i think these lyrics look very good @Vince

good flow and interesting reflections
me, myself, and Pie


Re: Lyrics for 3/4 time entry song
Reply #2 on: July 24, 2020, 16:26:59
Good lyrics @Vince . Got a smile with this line....

 Iíve committed no crime, except for making bad rhymes,

I read about your recording limitations in MrB's thread. Hope you can get around them somehow and put some music to this one soon.
"The main thing is to have a gutsy approach....but use your head." Julia Child

 "In a world of robotic conformity, the only originality left in music is the imperfections" Eric Craptone

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Re: Lyrics for 3/4 time entry song
Reply #3 on: July 24, 2020, 17:21:14
Thanks so much @Dutchbeat  and @Leonard Scaper . It's been so long I thought I might have lost my mojo.

I was worried about the song structure since it doesn't have a chorus,  middle 8 or a bridge, but it does flow and fits the music very well. Even though  I'm up against the very best, I think it will hold up.

Best to you all or 'yall as we say around here.

Vince


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Re: Lyrics for 3/4 time entry song
Reply #4 on: July 25, 2020, 11:33:02
@Vince I like your lyrics too as @Dutchbeat already mentioned they flows very nicely! 
I look forward how you'll develop the song.
Please don't stop music or let pack up the band!!  :D


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Re: Lyrics for 3/4 time entry song
Reply #5 on: July 26, 2020, 16:58:22
Thanks @Mo  I'm still making small changes,

Vince


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Re: Lyrics for 3/4 time entry song
Reply #6 on: August 15, 2020, 19:47:35
.....but the dance is always the same

Very nicely done.

I hope you donít mind my asking?
If you are OK with your present output musically.
I say quit worrying and enjoy what you make. I wouldnít mind writing (or better perhaps) having written this one.

If you want to boost the output gently, try writing everyday at the same time. Your brain will know when to expect extra happy hormones and help you finish more work.

Donít think. Write.
Donít keep re-writing and then re-writing what youíve re-written just now. Write.
Accept that every one writes shitty songs so embrace your mistakes.
I have made mistakes that have a name and that were so gorgeous Iíd like to make that mistake again.
And the same goes for songs.

I enjoyed reading your ballroom song.
Enjoyed it a lot.
Kind regards, Gus


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Re: Lyrics for 3/4 time entry song
Reply #7 on: August 16, 2020, 17:55:03
Thanks so much @LePlongeur   Gus, that you would take the time and give me advise is very special to me and a major reason that this forum is so special.

To try to explain how I've written in the past(trying to explain the explainable) - I'm a listener, not a talker and from all the external input I get ,,,, instead of just popping, getting sad or overwhelmed..... out comes a song.

I'm going to follow your advise and also set aside some regular time to practice my scales and site reading. Maybe I'll get some control over the songwriting process instead of it controlling me,   

Thank you so much for taking the time to encourage and teach

Vince


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Re: Lyrics for 3/4 time entry song
Reply #8 on: August 16, 2020, 22:49:11
@Vince   - very good lyrics! My only tip could be to do something with the last line, to give it more of a conclusion, a _pointe_
I'd sure like to try to make some music to this, if you're interested
Cheers
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Re: Lyrics for 3/4 time entry song
Reply #9 on: August 17, 2020, 14:01:13
That would be great @oorlab  I'm always trying to work on stuff I've written to fine tune it a little.  I've already changed the last line from "dance so comfortably " to " fit so comfortably " which is probably not much better.

Let me know what you need,

Thanks,

Vince


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Re: Lyrics for 3/4 time entry song
Reply #10 on: August 18, 2020, 00:56:26
@Vince   - will try something and send it to you.
Cheers
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