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over the garden wall
on: July 10, 2019, 22:13:36

My first song in quite s few months.
Music is almost ready
Mainly I'm happy just to be active again

Feedback most welcome



over the garden wall


deconstruction of smaller parts
we're breaking it down once more
with shorter skirts and faster cars
we are filing for divorce
out through the window
to fly or to fall
will we land on our feet
over the garden wall...

moral compass is all askew
it's hard to tell wrong from right
pushing forward we get confused
now don't you cheat on my wife
shake off the slumber
abandon the dream
wilfully wander to
a place we've never been

the time has come to do or die
to give the devil his due
your eyes have died two thousand times
as each one has lived a thousand lives

out through the window
to fly or to fall
will we land on our feet?
over the garden wall...


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Re: over the garden wall
Reply #1 on: July 10, 2019, 22:28:11
These lyrics have great cadence and already feel musical to me. Looking forward to hearing the music now.

i really like your use of near rhymes like more/divorce and askew/confused.
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