• She's So Sweet
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She's So Sweet
on: October 25, 2018, 00:58:11
« Last Edit: October 25, 2018, 16:29:11 by irwin »
This original song I wrote after an idea came to me, so I just follow it up. I happen to complete the lyric and now would love to hear some comments and suggests as to structure, especially the chorus. any general thoughts very much welcome.


She's So Sweet
2018 Irwin Abrigo


(Chorus)
She so sweet, Her eyes are so lovely
when she speaks, Like violin her voice sounds so sweet to me
when she smiles with me, I couldn't believe that it was real
She left a picture in my memory, And I love her so, But she doesn't know

(V1)
She'd passes my way
it was a lovely day
She was looking for directions
that cause my love and affection
When she looked into my eyes
and started asking questions
she didn't know what she'd done that day
When she'd left and gone away

(Chorus)
She so sweet, Her eyes are so lovely
when she speaks, like violin her voice sounds so sweet to me
when she smiles with me, I couldn't believe that it was real
She left a picture in my memory And I love her so, But she doesn't know

(V2)
You'll say I'm insane,
for her, I'll take that blame
I don't know her name or number
So baby if you do remember
In that moment that we'd share
why don't you come and talk to me
This feeling I'm feeling inside
Is only you can bring a relief

(Chorus)
She so sweet, Her eyes are so lovely
when she speaks, like violin her voice sounds so sweet to me
when she smiles with me, I couldn't believe that it was real
She left a picture in my memory, And I love her so, But she doesn't know

(Bridge)
Now She's the only girl, in this whole wide world
that I'm thinking of
Now She's the only one, in this whole wide world
That I think I love, She's the only girl that I'm thinking of

(Chorus)
She so sweet Her eyes are so lovely
when she speaks, like violin her voice sounds so sweet to me
when she smiles with me, I couldn't believe that it was real
She left a picture in my memory, And I love her so, I want her to know


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Re: She's So Sweet
Reply #1 on: November 12, 2018, 21:06:06
@irwin  - fine text for music. I like the shift of perspective in verse 2: she becomes  you.
will you put it to music?
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


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Re: She's So Sweet
Reply #2 on: April 09, 2019, 21:23:30
@irwin  - fine text for music. I like the shift of perspective in verse 2: she becomes  you.
will you put it to music?

Hi oorlab, I am working on the music for this song, I am about 80% into finishing, then I will post it on the song review  for some feedback. Thanks for reading my song lyric.

Irwin


Re: She's So Sweet
Reply #3 on: April 10, 2019, 22:59:46
@irwin hello! I just saw this post, and noticing the dates, I was wondering if you made any changes? It sounds like a very sweet song. Im interested in hearing the lyrics put to music...let us know!  :D
Do what makes your heart sing :)



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