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The Brighter Side Of Living
on: June 02, 2020, 16:43:43
Well what do you know?
Iíve got a terrible crush on a beautiful woman.
I may never get a chance to ask her out.
I will do that if I do get chance.
Until then Iíll be in a swoon, Imagination working overtime, itís hard to stop fantasizing scenarios.
Sheís incredible, but I donít really know her. Lol.
 itís exhausting.
I wrote this song in an effort to alleviate this suffering.




    The Brighter Side Of Living


I have never seen
anyone more deserving
   Iíve never felt more
      inclined to be forgiving
         If you donít have the time
           then please take mine
              to the brighter side
                  of living

you seem to vanish
just as fast as you appear
     and in this vacuum I
 can neither see nor hear
   now left behind you
      will pay me no mind
         and this is most unfair
                my dear

the night draws in a heavy curtain
      of history and doubt
I cannot sing oh, so what the hell?
         this is how

donít leave me stranded
a masterpiece unwritten
   you understand Iím 1 whole
         mess of division
   and you are too kind
     to say itís alright
        when we both know it
              really isnít

the lives Iíve dreamt as a tapestry
   of misery unfolds
 so to hell with mine, look now for   
             there she goes

to the brighter side alone
  to the brighter side of living

 the brighter side of living


_________

Rightly


Re: The Brighter Side Of Living
Reply #1 on: June 02, 2020, 22:49:33
Great set of lyrics. Having listened to a lot of your material I can already hear you singing this........can't wait to see how close my imagining came to the real thing.
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Re: The Brighter Side Of Living
Reply #2 on: June 03, 2020, 04:27:07
@Rightly   I think you should sing this song to her to ask her out!  :dance:
 ;D   
And record while it happens ... I mean, heck, multitasking is where it's at now-a-days.  :)  Get the recording done, the music video, behind the scenes footage & get your answer all in one fell swoop.  :D
@Leonard Scaper  probably agrees that this is a good idea, right?  :) 


Okay, all kidding aside, very romantic writing. You have penned some stellar lyrics with some very fine poetic imagery. Really good. I approve.

 
Bill
Songwriter, Keyboards, Arranger, Producer & Engineer for November Sound

November Sound is based on the Mother, Father & Son musical trio of Melissa, Bill & Will. I'm the father so anything I post will have my wife singing and/or my son playing percussion.


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Re: The Brighter Side Of Living
Reply #3 on: June 04, 2020, 20:30:33
@Rightly   I think you should sing this song to her to ask her out!  :dance:
 ;D   
And record while it happens ... I mean, heck, multitasking is where it's at now-a-days.  :)  Get the recording done, the music video, behind the scenes footage & get your answer all in one fell swoop.  :D
@Leonard Scaper  probably agrees that this is a good idea, right?  :) 


Okay, all kidding aside, very romantic writing. You have penned some stellar lyrics with some very fine poetic imagery. Really good. I approve.

I only see her at work and then very briefly. Sheís been so sweet to me. I knew Iíd get a terrible crush. Now not seeing her is just exhausting. If I get no closure on this Iíll be buggered.


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Re: The Brighter Side Of Living
Reply #4 on: June 04, 2020, 21:44:06
« Last Edit: June 04, 2020, 21:45:40 by Mo »
Oh man, thats really strong lyrics, great! ::thumb::


I maybe shouldn't dare.... but as a woman....probably you really should sing her a song (!).... but not this  ;)

Wonder if you styled your lyrics by purpose to appear in that step form in your post? Thats cool detail!


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Re: The Brighter Side Of Living
Reply #5 on: June 05, 2020, 18:20:22
Oh man, thats really strong lyrics, great! ::thumb::


I maybe shouldn't dare.... but as a woman....probably you really should sing her a song (!).... but not this  ;)

Wonder if you styled your lyrics by purpose to appear in that step form in your post? Thats cool detail!

Oh you should always dare!

Not this one?  Why not?

This will take some time before presentable. This one is directly inspired by her, I at least wanted to show the lyrics and then listen to a demo.

Iíve heard not all women are the same. I can imagine thereíre dos n doníts Iím oblivious to.

Please elaborate on why I shouldnít present this.

P. S. The steps, yes, sometimes I go to great effort with a song, details become important.

@Mo


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Re: The Brighter Side Of Living
Reply #6 on: June 05, 2020, 19:04:42
Yes sure, I'll write a PM @Rightly


Re: The Brighter Side Of Living
Reply #7 on: June 06, 2020, 23:37:54
Excellent lyrics @Rightly it sounds like a song in my head just reading them. The imagery is clear and concise... tight... not wordy.

The steady rhythm Is especially effective... there is one spot that felt a bit awkward...

Quote
you understand Iím 1 whole
         mess of division

I wanted to hear... ďyou understand...
                                 Iím a mess of divisionĒ

Just my two cents on a million dollar song! 😎


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Re: The Brighter Side Of Living
Reply #8 on: June 07, 2020, 12:23:04
Excellent lyrics @Rightly it sounds like a song in my head just reading them. The imagery is clear and concise... tight... not wordy.

The steady rhythm Is especially effective... there is one spot that felt a bit awkward...

Quote
you understand Iím 1 whole
         mess of division

I wanted to hear... ďyou understand...
                                 Iím a mess of divisionĒ

Just my two cents on a million dollar song! 😎

Thanks @1roomstudio
Iím still working on it.

Already made changes.
Working on the music presently.
Itís quite jazzy, a real challenge for me.

This is the latest set of lyrics.
Slight changes but details can be decisive.

 The Brighter Side Of Living


I have never seen
anyone more deserving
   Iíve never felt more
      inclined to be forgiving
         If you donít have the time
           then please take mine
              to the brighter side
                  of living

you seem to vanish just
as soon as you appear
     and in this vacuum I
 can neither see nor hear
   now left behind you
       pay me no mind
         and this is most unfair
                my dear

the night draws in a heavy curtain
      of history and doubt
I cannot sing oh, so what the hell?
         this is how, this is how

donít leave me stranded
a masterpiece unwritten
    understand Iím 1 whole
         mess of insufficient
   and you are too kind
     to say itís alright
        when we both know it
              really isnít

the lives Iíve dreamt as a tapestry
   of misery unfolds
 so to hell with mine, look now for   
   there she goes, there she goes

to the brighter side alone
  the brighter side of living

 the brighter side of living



Re: The Brighter Side Of Living
Reply #9 on: June 07, 2020, 17:52:26
Yes @Rightly ... much better. I love the rhyming of unwritten.... insufficient... isnít.

Nicely done  ::thumb::



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