• Twisting the Knife
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Twisting the Knife
on: June 21, 2020, 03:03:24
Hey everyone, I haven't come here in forever because I am only writing a song every few years or so... And now is the time and I need your help!

The music is already finished, it is a soft rock genre song, with a twist of jazz/funk. verse 3 is rapped, not sang. Please let me know your thoughts!

Twisting the Knife

Verse 1
Oh when youíre seeing my sorrow
Oh donít you say itís right, no donít twist the knife
You know I long for tomorrow
I wish you understood that Iím not doing good

Chorus
Aah you got me spinning around
Aah stop teasing me itís only wearing me down

Verse 2
And as the anger invades me
Iím using all my strength to resist my instinct
But I already know the story
Itís like a hurricane thatíll blow my brains

Chorus
Aah no way Iím winning this round
Aah stop hounding me itís only wearing me down

Verse 3
Catch me on the move, Iím still thinking Ďbout you
Hara Kiriíd out my organs, deforming this brown dude
And left a vacuum, but who verbalises profound truth
Stands electrified, humming the tone of a ground loop

We vibrate, penetrated by memories we debate
How to shape a liquid metal but only in retrograde
We are elements combining and breaking up on a page
The pull of a bond stays once youíve tangled your waves

It goes...



Re: Twisting the Knife
Reply #1 on: June 21, 2020, 16:22:19
I can feel the music in these lyrics.

Looking forward to hearing it.
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Re: Twisting the Knife
Reply #2 on: June 22, 2020, 10:32:53
I agree with @Leonard Scaper , but I seem to half understand your post.
If itís ready, whatís holding you back from doing it?
Like the lady said: do it!! @Lophophora
Kind regards, Gus


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Re: Twisting the Knife
Reply #3 on: June 22, 2020, 13:03:57
I can feel the music in these lyrics.

Looking forward to hearing it.

Thanks! I will post the finished product here when it is ready.

I agree with @Leonard Scaper , but I seem to half understand your post.
If itís ready, whatís holding you back from doing it?
Like the lady said: do it!! @Lophophora
Kind regards, Gus


Well the music is written, a demo has been recorded, then some changes have been made and now I'm in the process of recording the final version. The vocals will be last, and I have doubts about a few things in the lyrics so this is why I submitted that here before recording  ;)


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Re: Twisting the Knife
Reply #4 on: July 08, 2020, 12:06:04
Hi there.
Iím really glad I read this.
Very good.
And you say the music is sort of ready? 
I love jazz tinged rock.
Bring it on.