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Offline Ehsan

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Writer's Block (explicit!)
« on: August 10, 2017, 12:11:01 »
Hi guys,

Writing from a Dutch airport (Amsterdam)!

A few weeks ago I felt I couldn't write a decent song, so I decided to try a new style and write a silly song about "not being able to write a song!" I'm curious how it sounds to you as it's a new thing for me! The lyrics are here and the music is mostly the infamous I-V-vi-IV chord progression! And I expressed my anger a little, you see!

Thanks for reading!

Writer's Block

(Verse 1)
Sometimes your brain's as barren as the Antarctic*
And there are times when ideas intertwine
Well, I've been feeling like the former for a week
I sit at my desk and can't finish a line

So I turn on the keyboard
And play these easy chords
And sing some cheesy words
To write a silly song
I say:

(Chorus)
Fuck!
I'm stuck!
Can't get myself outta this writer's block

And I
Dunno why
No matter how I try
My lyrics suck

(Verse 2)
Wish I could write the greatest song of all time
It's been my biggest dream since I was born
But nothing comes out of this empty mind
I should've read a book instead of watching porn

I just turn on the keyboard
And play these easy chords
And sing some cheesy words
To write a shitty song
I say:

(Chorus)
Fuck!
I'm stuck!
Can't get myself outta this writer's block

And I
Dunno why
No matter how I try
My lyrics suck

Fuck!
I'm stuck!
Can't get my ass outta this writer's block

And I
Dunno why
No matter how I try
My lyrics suck

(Verse 3)
They say I'm like Billy Joel, well, it's right
I never had his talent but I got his height
It takes a year to travel with the speed of light
Between his masterpieces and the shit I write

I just sit at the keyboard
And play these easy chords
And sing some cheesy words
To write a stupid song
I say:

(Chorus)
Fuck!
I'm stuck
Can't get myself outta this writer's block

And I
Don't know why
No matter how I try my lyrics suck

They say
Yuck!
It ain't no shock
To see this songwriter in a writer's block

And I
Just don't know why
My lyrics are as vulgar as a locker room talk

*Antarctic as a noun is the region and Antarctica is the continent. Am I right?!
« Last Edit: August 10, 2017, 12:25:28 by Ehsan »

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Re: Writer's Block (explicit!)
« Reply #1 on: August 10, 2017, 13:23:19 »
Antarctic is correct usage........it will be interesting to see how it sings there right at the beginning of the song. It could be a very interesting bit of phrasing to get things off and running.

I like this tune a lot.....no problem for me with the explicit nature of the lyrics as I think the way you use the word is perfect for the song. Repeating that chorus is good too........might as well stay with it if it works....and I think it does. I also like how you bring in "them" for the last one and switch to "yuck".....pretty clever there.
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Re: Writer's Block (explicit!)
« Reply #2 on: August 10, 2017, 13:36:50 »
Cool! Thanks a lot @Leonard Scaper !

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Re: Writer's Block (explicit!)
« Reply #3 on: August 11, 2017, 02:00:14 »
Hey @Ehsan , I know man, I'm non-native english as well.. It's hard..

You're telling you're suffering from a writer block.. And you decided to write some well written words about exactly that (and yes, I could feel the frustration!). There's kind of a paradox there, do you feel it? Even when you're blocked, you still write. So maybe all that's missing is a bit of ispirational input  ;) ;)

Let's cheer you up a little..

A lot of famous artists get away with a lot of repetition. In general, but in repeating hooky lines as well:
https://www.songwriter-forum-kitchen.com/forum/songwriting-ingredients/26/deconstruction-as-a-learning-exercise/3327/

For inspiration I'd encourage you to join this competition (maybe it sparks some ideas and gets you going again!):
https://www.songwriter-forum-kitchen.com/forum/competitions/18/the-2nd-inspirational-input-competition-looking-for-contestants/3361/

I hope that helps!!
Cheers,
:mart:


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Re: Writer's Block (explicit!)
« Reply #4 on: August 11, 2017, 17:08:56 »
Hey @Mar T. ! Thanks.

I saw that competition. It's really really interesting!
I'm actually 10000 Kms away from my keyboard now. :D But I'll join if I get access to one!
« Last Edit: August 12, 2017, 00:06:42 by Ehsan »


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