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Offline Ehsan

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Writer's Block (explicit!)
« on: August 10, 2017, 12:11:01 »
Hi guys,

Writing from a Dutch airport (Amsterdam)!

A few weeks ago I felt I couldn't write a decent song, so I decided to try a new style and write a silly song about "not being able to write a song!" I'm curious how it sounds to you as it's a new thing for me! The lyrics are here and the music is mostly the infamous I-V-vi-IV chord progression! And I expressed my anger a little, you see!

Thanks for reading!

Writer's Block

(Verse 1)
Sometimes your brain's as barren as the Antarctic*
And there are times when ideas intertwine
Well, I've been feeling like the former for a week
I sit at my desk and can't finish a line

So I turn on the keyboard
And play these easy chords
And sing some cheesy words
To write a silly song
I say:

(Chorus)
Fuck!
I'm stuck!
Can't get myself outta this writer's block

And I
Dunno why
No matter how I try
My lyrics suck

(Verse 2)
Wish I could write the greatest song of all time
It's been my biggest dream since I was born
But nothing comes out of this empty mind
I should've read a book instead of watching porn

I just turn on the keyboard
And play these easy chords
And sing some cheesy words
To write a shitty song
I say:

(Chorus)
Fuck!
I'm stuck!
Can't get myself outta this writer's block

And I
Dunno why
No matter how I try
My lyrics suck

Fuck!
I'm stuck!
Can't get my ass outta this writer's block

And I
Dunno why
No matter how I try
My lyrics suck

(Verse 3)
They say I'm like Billy Joel, well, it's right
I never had his talent but I got his height
It takes a year to travel with the speed of light
Between his masterpieces and the shit I write

I just sit at the keyboard
And play these easy chords
And sing some cheesy words
To write a stupid song
I say:

(Chorus)
Fuck!
I'm stuck
Can't get myself outta this writer's block

And I
Don't know why
No matter how I try my lyrics suck

They say
Yuck!
It ain't no shock
To see this songwriter in a writer's block

And I
Just don't know why
My lyrics are as vulgar as a locker room talk

*Antarctic as a noun is the region and Antarctica is the continent. Am I right?!
« Last Edit: August 10, 2017, 12:25:28 by Ehsan »

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Re: Writer's Block (explicit!)
« Reply #1 on: August 10, 2017, 13:23:19 »
Antarctic is correct usage........it will be interesting to see how it sings there right at the beginning of the song. It could be a very interesting bit of phrasing to get things off and running.

I like this tune a lot.....no problem for me with the explicit nature of the lyrics as I think the way you use the word is perfect for the song. Repeating that chorus is good too........might as well stay with it if it works....and I think it does. I also like how you bring in "them" for the last one and switch to "yuck".....pretty clever there.
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Re: Writer's Block (explicit!)
« Reply #2 on: August 10, 2017, 13:36:50 »
Cool! Thanks a lot @Leonard Scaper !

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Re: Writer's Block (explicit!)
« Reply #3 on: August 11, 2017, 02:00:14 »
Hey @Ehsan , I know man, I'm non-native english as well.. It's hard..

You're telling you're suffering from a writer block.. And you decided to write some well written words about exactly that (and yes, I could feel the frustration!). There's kind of a paradox there, do you feel it? Even when you're blocked, you still write. So maybe all that's missing is a bit of ispirational input  ;) ;)

Let's cheer you up a little..

A lot of famous artists get away with a lot of repetition. In general, but in repeating hooky lines as well:
https://www.songwriter-forum-kitchen.com/forum/songwriting-ingredients/26/deconstruction-as-a-learning-exercise/3327/

For inspiration I'd encourage you to join this competition (maybe it sparks some ideas and gets you going again!):
https://www.songwriter-forum-kitchen.com/forum/competitions/18/the-2nd-inspirational-input-competition-looking-for-contestants/3361/

I hope that helps!!
Cheers,
:mart:


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Re: Writer's Block (explicit!)
« Reply #4 on: August 11, 2017, 17:08:56 »
Hey @Mar T. ! Thanks.

I saw that competition. It's really really interesting!
I'm actually 10000 Kms away from my keyboard now. :D But I'll join if I get access to one!
« Last Edit: August 12, 2017, 00:06:42 by Ehsan »

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Re: Writer's Block (explicit!)
« Reply #5 on: August 20, 2017, 19:47:21 »
Hey @Ehsan , oooh yes you were going to the States! Completely off-topic: how are you doing there? Everything ok? Must be very special to have this opportunity...

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Re: Writer's Block (explicit!)
« Reply #6 on: August 25, 2017, 22:08:08 »
@Mar T.  Thanks man! I'm in Edmonton now. I've been so busy these days.
It's awesome! Outdoor festivals/carnivals everyday! There's a Lebanese outdoor festival within walking distance of my apartment now. Might go there tonight.
It's gonna be freezing in winter though, like almost everywhere in Canada!
Good thing is there are many Iranian students at this university and I don't really feel like a stranger here!

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Re: Writer's Block (explicit!)
« Reply #7 on: August 27, 2017, 10:31:53 »
Hi @Eshan, good to hear you made your big journey and are doing well. So you are an Edmontonian now!

Good luck, and i hope you get access to a keyboard / music gear soon again....maybe a good time to experiment with a DAW (like the downloadable free trial version of Reaper)....

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I lost it...ages ago

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Re: Writer's Block (explicit!)
« Reply #8 on: August 29, 2017, 16:43:22 »
@Dutchbeat Thanks man!


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