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Apart Linger
on: February 05, 2018, 21:07:03
you all are so polished here in the Kitchen, I`m a little frightened to post!
this is your last warning...I`m not pretty... I thought I`d start here..  very small  writes. free-verse.


hopeful note

Linger

Close your eyes.
Stand right here..
Yes..at the edge
where Mountains end
and Waters rise.

Draw your blade
though it be of thought"
deed, forgivness, anger, distain.
Imagine You as it`s Mother.
Feel..
Would you cast it aside.

Mountains create Meadows.
Waters wash dust from the day...
We should not linger.
Here..take my hand.. Vincent


[these are just little clips in life, I try to pretty them up.]

Apart

A notion that had lifted
heart and piece of the soul,
the crime had no beginning
held on to and end.

A meaningless breeze it was,
rush past all good
buries itself in infractions
hurried on.

It had come to words
without sorrow,
the eager peace one seeks.
It had come to a sad thing
and left me apart..


Copyright Vincent


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Re: Apart Linger
Reply #1 on: February 05, 2018, 22:50:47
These are quite good actually @Lane . I can easily hear these snippets as music and I could also easily see them morphing into songs.

Mountains create Meadows.
Waters wash dust from the day...


That is really very descriptive and it has a wonderful alliterative flow.

Post a few more.
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Reply #2 on: February 05, 2018, 23:28:55
Yeah @Lane keep 'em coming! Nice imagery there!  :)

You could also head into the "lyrics" section and post a WIP when you fit them together a bit.
@Jim and others can be really helpful!!!
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Songwriter, Keyboards, Arranger, Producer & Engineer for November Sound

November Sound is based on the Mother, Father & Son musical trio of Melissa, Bill & Will. I'm the father so anything I post will have my wife singing and/or my son playing percussion.


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Re: Apart Linger
Reply #3 on: February 06, 2018, 01:35:56
thank you for giving this a look, don`t say post more I have a bucket full of them. ::dj::
I`ll post some lyric I`m working on, and do a little snooping around the boards..
thanks Leonard, thanks Bill


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Reply #4 on: February 07, 2018, 22:19:30
Post way @Lane - even little snippets are good and the act of posting something sometimes makes it more real and you commit more of yourself to the creative process.   
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Re: Apart Linger
Reply #5 on: February 08, 2018, 00:03:35
i`ll make sure to stop and contribute here. thank you for stopping in.