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Reflections and Refractions
on: September 10, 2020, 12:02:59
« Last Edit: September 10, 2020, 12:28:07 by MrBouzouki »
I hesitate to call this poetry but I've added a few more words to a little idea inspired by listening to a piano track by a friend on Soundcloud from a while ago now.

This is the track that inspired the words, Philip Dupuis writes some very nice music IMHO.

https://soundcloud.com/classicalglass-1/reflections-and-refractions

I'd completely forgotten about these words until just now when I rediscovered them and so I've add a bit more. I've no idea if it works but I wanted to capture a feeling if i could.

It's a bit dark I guess ;-)

Reflections and Refractions

The light is caught by sheets of glass
reflected hope as vehicles pass
But dark is night and swallows whole
my tattered, torn, unworthy soul

Scarred by life, but scared of death
I count the weight of every breath
and through dark windows sometimes find
a glimpse of hope I'd left behind

For in the dark a tiny spark
may yet renew my broken heart
fling open doors once sealed so tight
against the pain of healing light

The shuttered windows keep me sane
as sunlight beats against the pane
and as night falls I dare to peek 
outside these walls into the street

So shadow wrapped I watch and wait
with tumbling thoughts about my fate
How did I come to this impasse
As light is caught by sheets of glass
"Love and Life is all about connections"


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Re: Reflections and Refractions
Reply #1 on: September 22, 2020, 12:28:10
I must admit that it took some getting used to.
But if you still hesitate to call it poetry, let me tell you my opinion.
Yes, it is a bit darkish, but there’s still hope.
I’ve read it 4 times (two times from a print) and it ‘grew’ with each time I read it.
I think that that is the true face of a poem. It has something to say. And it tells a story.
A lovely idea to post it @MrBouzouki ! Thank you.
Kind regards, Gus


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Re: Reflections and Refractions
Reply #2 on: September 22, 2020, 21:00:08
Cheers Gus @LePlongeur , it's interesting I had some feedback from Phillip who wrote the music.

Here is a portion of his reply ...

"I can't begin to tell you just how close the sentiments, or should I say "reflections" in this poem capture my state of mind at the time of composition of that song."

So in some way I captured his mood from his music and re-interpreted it into words.

I guess that's what we do. We hear or see something and react to it :-)


Re: Reflections and Refractions
Reply #3 on: September 27, 2020, 00:27:35
Dark... yes... poetry... absolutely @MrBouzouki

Listening to the piano piece and reciting the words to my soulmate... she asked “read the part about ‘scarred by life....’ again” so I did... she nodded acknowledgingly...

And then we listened as I read the whole thing again... poignant... hard to know what else to say.


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Re: Reflections and Refractions
Reply #4 on: September 27, 2020, 10:05:31
a nice variation on Classical Gas too.
I didn't see that one on earlier visits.
Love it @MrBouzouki
Kind regards, Gus


Re: Reflections and Refractions
Reply #5 on: October 18, 2020, 20:02:10
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...such profound words. I read them while listening to the music track and they fall in place perfectly. This is the kind of poetry which I like, resonating with each word, bursting with emotion and with the right amount of rhyme and rhythm and flow. There's something special in each and every line. Thanks for sharing! :)
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