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Title: Looking for a singer. Acoustic song. Lyrics are done.
Post by: Sakshin Mohan on August 28, 2016, 13:04:39
Hello.

My song's link:
https://soundcloud.com/sakshin-mohan/dreams-instrumental
Title: Re: Looking for a singer. Acoustic song. Lyrics are done.
Post by: Mark Luto on August 28, 2016, 13:36:28
Hey @Sakshin Mohan

These are very nice chords. I especially like the "bridge" part beginning at 2:20.
If you've got some lyrics already why don't you share them? Please? ;)

Cheers,
Mark
Title: Re: Looking for a singer. Acoustic song. Lyrics are done.
Post by: Sakshin Mohan on August 28, 2016, 14:21:31
Haha. The lyrics were in my phone. I was just too lazy to plug it in and copy them :D

Anyway, I don't mind if someone can come up with their own lyrics and vocal tune, since my lyrics limit the scope of the vocals to an extent

Lyrics:

Dreams

You tell me now, that you feel low
Don't worry, cause I'm always here
Remember that you'll be all right
Life has a way of going on

You are
You feel
You know
That I am here

Here I am, looking at the sun
I remember us, stopping on that bridge
I still picture that smile on your face
Shades of pink and orange blue

(Bridge)

A dream I had, of hills and the sea
I see us walk, just you and me
Hand in hand, along the shore sand
Don't you see, that I'm in love with thee

A kiss that
brought me
back to
reality
Title: Re: Looking for a singer. Acoustic song. Lyrics are done.
Post by: Dutchbeat on August 28, 2016, 20:41:54
@Sakshin Mohan cool this, music track and lyrics  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::

great!!!!  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::

go for it!





Title: Re: Looking for a singer. Acoustic song. Lyrics are done.
Post by: Jim on August 29, 2016, 11:27:33
Hi @Sakshin Mohan, I actually quite like the lyrics as they are, there's a sense of nostalgia and wistfulness about them.  :D ;)

(That sound...?  That'll be a couple of Kitchenauts falling off their chairs  :o ...I'm always interfering with people's lyrics.  :P)

The guitar playing is good too, and the chords work OK...there's something a bit Led Zeppelin about them, especially the bridge.  ;D

My only question is this...how did you imagine the lyrics should be delivered?  By which I mean, there's quite a lot of repeated chords in each verse/chorus, but not that many words...so were you thinking of delivering the lyrics really slowly, or repeating the words?  ???
Title: Re: Looking for a singer. Acoustic song. Lyrics are done.
Post by: Sakshin Mohan on August 29, 2016, 16:53:51
@Dutchbeat Thank you!  :)

Title: Re: Looking for a singer. Acoustic song. Lyrics are done.
Post by: Sakshin Mohan on August 29, 2016, 16:58:24
@Jim

Hey Jim! Thanks for listening :)

The chords, they were inspired by this band called Porcupine Tree! They are an experimental progressive rock band. Steven Wilson is an amazing songwriter!

The delivery of the lyrics, I had a vocal tune in mind. As you thought, the tune is kind of slow. I didn't put up the version with vocals since I wanted fresh ideas from other people :D