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Songs for review / Re: were to go with Zzzz?
« Last post by rightly on Today at 16:24:21 »
oh this is fun
A crazy mix of styles that work well together
guitar work is stunnin'. The acoustic and electric
A really enjoyable listen
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Songs for review / Re: please could you give me your thoughts
« Last post by rightly on Today at 16:18:26 »
loads of potential here
I really like your voice  n' I'm quite picky
I like the drive, the energy and there are some fun horn phrases in there

I haven't seen you about the forum
I hope you stick around
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Songs for review / Re: The Rain Will End (first draft)
« Last post by rightly on Today at 16:12:18 »
lovely intelligent lyrics
fine imagery there

I think it'd take quite a bit of work
to get that to music, started from just vague ideas of how it should sound
I hope you find a collaborator 
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Songs for review / by the light
« Last post by rightly on Today at 10:55:49 »
I wrote this song many years ago.

Lyrics for the first verse and  some of the refrain were taken from the poem
 "so we'll go no more a'roving",
. . . . written by Lord Byron.
The other verses are mine.

Leonard Cohen, failing to add his own lyrics, wrote a different melody for the poem some years ago.
My take is much better, still I like to think of us as one big, happy-camper fambly.

The production is  new

Feedback would be nice


Link:

https://soundcloud.com/2rightly/by-the-light-1

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By The Light


So we’ll go no more a’roving
So late into the night
Though the heart be still as loving
And the moon be still as bright
For the sword outwears its sheath
And the soul wears out the breast
And the heart must pause to breath
And love itself must rest

Though the night was made for lovers, and the day returns too soon
Yet we’ll go no more a’roving, by the light, by the light of the moon
 
We are lost lords of darkness
We are found in knowing that
And these things that fall away from us
Will not again come back
Stars still hang in the day sky
Though they cannot be seen
They really come alive
As we are lost in dreams

Though the night was made for lovers, and the day returns too soon
Yet we’ll go no more a’roving, by the light, by the light of the moon

Our clinging hands are tied
To every other weight
And we're falling down the hillside
With everything we take
Should we love's child abandon
As our Father's law is enforced
After acts once born of passion
And time has taken its course

Though the night was made for lovers, and the day returns too soon
Yet we’ll go no more a’roving, by the light of the moon

By the light, by the light of the moon
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Songs for review / Re: “I Couldn’t Sleep (Down the River)”
« Last post by LePlongeur on Today at 08:14:30 »
I don’t know if you were aware of the connection or not, but the fierce single slapback on the guitar used to be the Gordon Giltrap thing in the late 60’s.
Hardly no one does effects on acoustic guitars, so I think this is the way to grab their attention.
It did grab mine in any case.

It’s a love it or hate it thing.
I say, dare to stand out. A friend of mine has a belt full of pedals and effects for her trumpet. And she still gigs almost every night. In non corona times that is.
A courageous thing to do in short.
Kind regards, Gus
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Songs for review / Under the sun
« Last post by Ms King on Today at 00:21:41 »
Hi 🤟

Does anyone get fed up
Of singing the same song, over
☝️😜☝️ my concentration is not that great.
The mix in this song took me from 9 to 12
Then the next day I hated it, over cooked it and stsrted again.

Its called under the sun
This is its state a.t.m

Lyrics will be up tomorrow
Gn

Under The Sun by Ms King on #SoundCloud
https://soundcloud.com/mskingofficial/under-the-sun/s-BYa35tu8ubi?ref=clipboard&p=a&c=1&utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing
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Songs for review / Re: Dry Land
« Last post by GaryHynes on Yesterday at 23:29:32 »
@ChrisPrice Yeah, this is great. Old timey vibes on the forum today. Not complaining.  ::e-guitar3::
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Songs for review / Re: “I Couldn’t Sleep (Down the River)”
« Last post by GaryHynes on Yesterday at 23:17:17 »
@IronKnee I really like this sound and the song. It's got a nice classic folk/rock feel to it also.
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Songs for review / Re: Friendly For A Fascist
« Last post by GaryHynes on Yesterday at 23:12:53 »
This is absolutely fantastic...............brilliant, even.
I love this. Written in the vain of Woody Guthrie, and the likes.
A teriffic song..............it needs to get around!
                                                                                           -Tom

Thanks Tom. Woody (and Arlo) are absolute legends. It's cool to be writing songs that remind people of them.

By the way I did a redo with a video and a friend did a nice mix if anyone wants a gander.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GnPlBhfNXnU&feature=youtu.be



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Songs for review / Re: The Rain Will End (first draft)
« Last post by O.F. Hanson on Yesterday at 19:34:39 »
Hi @O.F. Hanson and welcome to the kitchen :) I think that your writing is good, I like your use of the flower as a symbol / metaphor and particularly liked your lines: 'That youthful flower that refused to settle
Will blossom to beauty as though reborn'

Given that you are still discovering your talents I suggest that you try doing a rough recording of this one (even just a rough mobile vocal recording to give an idea of the melody and rhythm you had in mind)..  personally I love writing poems and appreciate the world of words, but when it comes to lyrics I personally view words and melody as one package and it would be easier to provide feedback on the lyrics if I could listen to what you had in mind in terms of melody.
Thanks for the feedback and advice!! I’ll certainly have to look into finding a voice and a comfortable vocal range to apply to my lyrics here. I have the melody in mind but probably can’t vocalize some of the rhythm that I intend to.

For example: I can only sing like “..knowing I’m not yourrrs!”
When I’d rather sing like “..knowing I’m not youuur—OUR—ouR—OURS!” (With that flexibility in enunciation rather than it being blandly sung).

But, yes, your advice is great and I’ll do what I can to get a melody out there. For someone who has never had anyone hear my singing voice, I guess it would be good experiment. And I certainly agree that “melody+lyrics” creates the full portrait!

Thank-you @Rachel_D for the tips and encouragement!!!
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