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I Came Out To Dance
on: January 29, 2018, 16:54:15
« Last Edit: February 04, 2018, 19:46:03 by irwin »
This song I wrote and produced and, I sung as well on the track but for feedback I am Kindly asking to make comments  on the song and lyric.




 
I Came Out To Dance

© Irwin Abrigo 2018

                             

(Verse)

I donít make no joke when Iím dancing

on the dance floor cause I can dance

If you can dance why donít you come

 And dance with me come take a chance

No joking no smoking

When Iím dancing on the dance floor

No joking no smoking

When Iím dancing on the dance floor

 

(Chorus)             

I came out to dance jump and wave my hands

So give me room let me show you my move

Dance, dance,(dance) dance, dance, (dance)

I came out to dance jump and wave my hands

So give me room let me show you my move

Dance, dance,(dance) dance, dance, (dance)

 

let me show you my move show you my move

Work your body Work your body

Work your body work

Everybody Work your body

Work your body work

Come on, Work your body Work your body

Work your body work

Everybody Work your body

Work your body work

Work your body Work your body

Work your body work

Everybody Work your body

Work your body work

 

(Repeat Chorus)


Re: I Came Out To Dance
Reply #1 on: January 29, 2018, 20:14:29
Hi @irwin   I'm more of the Genesis / Phil Collins type "I Can't Dance".  ;D  You've got a very good voice and the song has a nice beat. I'm not sure what everybody is listening to in the discos, but this is something I can exercise to.  Good job!

Vince
 


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Re: I Came Out To Dance
Reply #2 on: January 29, 2018, 22:27:31
Hey @irwin .......pretty cool little number here. The lyrics are simple and that's perfect for what this piece is about.

I could picture you dancing while you were singing, which, of course, begs the question.........can you dance like you sing?  ;)
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Re: I Came Out To Dance
Reply #3 on: January 30, 2018, 04:32:05
This is really unique.  I can see it as a soundtrack in some sort of Michael Cera, boy/girl, innocent, young romance, adventure, montage scene.  Cool vibe.

It does lose momentum in places, though, and there seems to be a few notes out of key.

It is a really charming song, though.   ::thumb::


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Re: I Came Out To Dance
Reply #4 on: January 30, 2018, 23:31:29
Interesting bare sketch. Some drums and bass could really take this to a next level. Fun chord changes.
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


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Re: I Came Out To Dance
Reply #5 on: January 31, 2018, 05:10:52
Hi @irwin   I'm more of the Genesis / Phil Collins type "I Can't Dance".  ;D  You've got a very good voice and the song has a nice beat. I'm not sure what everybody is listening to in the discos, but this is something I can exercise to.  Good job!

Vince

Hi Vince,I appreciate you saying Phil Collins here on my post because I like his music. Thanks for listening to my song. I am happy to know that you like it.
 


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Reply #6 on: January 31, 2018, 05:23:51
This is really unique.  I can see it as a soundtrack in some sort of Michael Cera, boy/girl, innocent, young romance, adventure, montage scene.  Cool vibe.

It does lose momentum in places, though, and there seems to be a few notes out of key.

It is a really charming song, though.   ::thumb::

Hi Knate, I will love to have this song in a movie soundtrack and with Michael Cera as the actor Wow!.

For this song this is the first drafts. I still have to do some more work on this song. Thanks for listening and thanks for leaving a comment.


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Re: I Came Out To Dance
Reply #7 on: January 31, 2018, 05:35:47
Hey @irwin .......pretty cool little number here. The lyrics are simple and that's perfect for what this piece is about.

I could picture you dancing while you were singing, which, of course, begs the question.........can you dance like you sing?  ;)
Hey @irwin .......pretty cool little number here. The lyrics are simple and that's perfect for what this piece is about.

I could picture you dancing while you were singing, which, of course, begs the question.........can you dance like you sing?  ;)

Hi Leonard Scaper, How are you? I have it that in the way You ask me that question "can you dance like you sing?" You are very good dancer lol. Thanks for taking the time out listen to my song and thanks for taking the time to reply.


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Re: I Came Out To Dance
Reply #8 on: January 31, 2018, 13:30:37
Hi Leonard Scaper, How are you? I have it that in the way You ask me that question "can you dance like you sing?" You are very good dancer lol. Thanks for taking the time out listen to my song and thanks for taking the time to reply.

HA!!! @irwin ........every time I try to dance I hurt myself in the process. Let's just say that I dance about as well as I sing.  ;)


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Re: I Came Out To Dance
Reply #9 on: February 03, 2018, 18:17:18
Interesting bare sketch. Some drums and bass could really take this to a next level. Fun chord changes.

Hi oorlab, This is my first draft. I will be adding bass and I have to do a better production just wanted to hear members advise first and you sure reminded me about that. I appreciate your time and effort! Thank you


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Re: I Came Out To Dance
Reply #10 on: February 05, 2018, 11:20:03
Hi there, you have a  good sketch here mate. You need to really develop it though. Dance music is all about the hook/groove and thatís what this song needs.

Cheers
Leo  ;D


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Re: I Came Out To Dance
Reply #11 on: February 08, 2018, 17:03:34
Hi LostBoy, Thanks for listening to my song and for leaving a comment,I appreciate your time and effort.

Irwin



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