• A Bad Day!
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A Bad Day!
on: November 02, 2017, 01:39:03
Hi Guys,
It's been a while since I've posted a song, and this one still needs some polishing, but what the hay...all of my songs need that ;D ;D ;D
No need to set this one up, it's pretty straight forward  ::smiley::
I hope you enjoy and any feedback would be appreciated  ::Suzy::

https://soundcloud.com/crystalsuzy/a-bad-day

I woke this morning and jumped out of bed
The phone ringing and I banged my head
Someone said you’d better come quick
I think your son’s in a hell of a fix!
 
So I brushed my teeth and grabbed my purse
Ran downstairs, and ‘shit’ I cursed
The car was gone; it just wasn’t there
And honestly, I don’t usually swear!

What did I do to deserve such a bad day?
What did I do to deserve such a bad day?

I hoped on my bike, and peddled real fast
Started to sweat, I was kicking ass
People were honking and starring at me
I’d forgotten to dress you see

Turned around and headed for home
Suddenly I was in a danger zone
My wheel  fell off; I fell in a hole
Filled with oil; I was back as coal

I sank down, down, down, down into the depths of the earth
Through a highway of roots; an endless maze of twists and turns

The air was dank and tiny glowing eyes were the only bits of light,
in this dark abyss. The sound, as millions of bugs crawled through
this strange amphitheatre, was amplified to unbearable levels .
Was I in hell? What horrible deed had I done?
Suddenly I was in the hole again, gasping for air

What did I do to deserve such a bad day?
What did I do to deserve such a bad day?

I climbed right out of that sticky mess
I was slippery and back, and in distress
I swore again and it rhymed with muck
How much more could this really suck?

I stood there pondering what to do next
Black and nude, just a total wreck
I began to feel real sorry for myself
A breakdown was coming, ya, I needed help!

What did I do to deserve such a bad day?
What did I do to deserve such a bad day?

Threw myself down and began to scream
It dawned on me I was in a dream
They’re digging up the sewer across the road
Some boys fell in trying to lighten their load!

I jumped out of bed and banged my head
My heart was thumping; I was full of dread
Oh my God! Where my son?
Did he fall in the sewer shooting his gun?

What did I do to deserve such a bad day?
What did I do to deserve such a bad day?


Re: A Bad Day!
Reply #1 on: November 02, 2017, 11:19:07
What a cool piece this is!!!!! Seriously entertaining.

I really like the pace that you set right from the start.....and then the excellent change-up when you....well, I don't want to spoil it for first time listeners.  ;)

Nice plot twist at the end.

OMG....it's bagpipes!!!  ;D ;D ;D
"The main thing is to have a gutsy approach....but use your head." Julia Child

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Re: A Bad Day!
Reply #2 on: November 02, 2017, 15:01:55
Ha ha! Another gem from the crazier side of @CrystalSuzy - the Crazy Crystal side. Now you have the next single after 'Cell Phone Junkies'!  ::thumb::

This must have taken you literally ages, there is so much going on and so many quirky little surprises round every corner to keep the listener totally engrossed. I love the the 'ee-ee-ees' and heavy breathing beat, and of course the hilarious bagpipe haunting! Plus the lead vocal verse harmonies work really well, selling the chaos inside the storyteller's head. The song is almost like a miniature theatrical production all wrapped up into a few short minutes of joyous musical mayhem!

Really entertaining, with a cool, cooky storyline too. Top marks from me, well done!  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::
If you like novels with a musical theme, why not try 'Sixth Beatle - When Music Changed The World', easily found on Amazon and Google. It is amazing, although as the author I may be biased!


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Re: A Bad Day!
Reply #3 on: November 02, 2017, 16:54:29
hahaha , @CrystalSuzy what a fun track, all the soundeffects are insane!!!!!!

'oh no, it's bagpipes'  ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D hahahahaaa  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::


extra karma points from me for this track

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Re: A Bad Day!
Reply #4 on: November 03, 2017, 07:58:19
Fantastic @CrystalSuzy madness!!  ;D :D ;D :D ;D

Really good fun, cheered me up!  :D  Nice to see your muse is still at work.  :)


Re: A Bad Day!
Reply #5 on: November 04, 2017, 00:36:51
What a cool piece this is!!!!! Seriously entertaining.

I really like the pace that you set right from the start.....and then the excellent change-up when you....well, I don't want to spoil it for first time listeners.  ;)

Nice plot twist at the end.

OMG....it's bagpipes!!!  ;D ;D ;D

Thanks so much for listening Lenny]]]]]]]]]]]]] Glad you found it entertaining and got a kick out of the bagpipes  ::Suzy::


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Re: A Bad Day!
Reply #6 on: November 04, 2017, 01:10:55
OMG that one is so full of energy! What a journey! Listened a few times, and every time I caught other details on my canvas. Well captured journey/story @CrystalSuzy , you're so good at this!
And it was some time ago since you created such a journey wasn't it?
I looooved this entertaining song from your camp as always.. Your style is unique! Glad that bad day was just a dream..  ;)
Thanks for sharing and keep them coming Suzy!!
Cheers!
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I'm proud of this track, check it out! https://soundcloud.com/martimedia/dreams


Re: A Bad Day!
Reply #7 on: November 05, 2017, 12:04:44
Ha ha! Another gem from the crazier side of @CrystalSuzy - the Crazy Crystal side. Now you have the next single after 'Cell Phone Junkies'!  ::thumb::

This must have taken you literally ages, there is so much going on and so many quirky little surprises round every corner to keep the listener totally engrossed. I love the the 'ee-ee-ees' and heavy breathing beat, and of course the hilarious bagpipe haunting! Plus the lead vocal verse harmonies work really well, selling the chaos inside the storyteller's head. The song is almost like a miniature theatrical production all wrapped up into a few short minutes of joyous musical mayhem!

Really entertaining, with a cool, cooky storyline too. Top marks from me, well done!  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::
Thanks so much @MichaelA  :)  I'm glad you enjoyed all the mayhem! This song actually evolved from a dream/nightmare I had a few years ago, and even though my real life can get pretty chaotic, it's not quite as bad as this.  :whistle: It did take me a while to put it together, but it was a lot of fun! I have more than just 2 "Crystal's Crazy Side" songs! That well be the name of the EP! LOL!  ::smiley::
Thanks for the   ::thumb::  on the vocals...I'm never sure if they work  ::Suzy::


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Re: A Bad Day!
Reply #8 on: November 05, 2017, 20:10:53
Hey Suzy, your songs are always fun to listen to mate, I NEVER know what’s coming which is GREAT!! ::thumb::

Your lyrics always make me smile...”Rhymes with muck!”  :o there’s just lots of good stuff in here. Some of the timing could be tightened up in places, but I thoroughly enjoyed it all.

Keep at it mate!
Leo  ;D ::dj:: ::smiley::


Re: A Bad Day!
Reply #9 on: November 05, 2017, 21:29:42
This is totally twisted musical mayhem! :D
You're unbelievable!
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November Sound is based on the Mother, Father & Son musical trio of Melissa, Bill & Will. I'm the father so anything I post will have my wife singing and/or my son playing percussion.


Re: A Bad Day!
Reply #10 on: November 09, 2017, 11:46:46
nice and crazy!
:goatie:
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Re: A Bad Day!
Reply #11 on: November 09, 2017, 13:11:50
Hi @CrystalSuzy ,
love your dark humour and all the little sounds you put in (instrument and voice)it. The arrangement itself is great.
Roberto


Re: A Bad Day!
Reply #12 on: November 10, 2017, 13:52:41
« Last Edit: November 10, 2017, 14:02:04 by CrystalSuzy »
hahaha , @CrystalSuzy what a fun track, all the soundeffects are insane!!!!!!

'oh no, it's bagpipes'  ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D hahahahaaa  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::


extra karma points from me for this track


Thanks so much DB  ;D I'm Glad you found it entertaining and got a kick out of the bagpipes  ::Bones::  Thanks for the karma points  ::Suzy::


Re: A Bad Day!
Reply #13 on: November 10, 2017, 14:00:31
« Last Edit: November 10, 2017, 14:02:38 by CrystalSuzy »
Fantastic @CrystalSuzy madness!!  ;D :D ;D :D ;D

Really good fun, cheered me up!  :D  Nice to see your muse is still at work.  :)

"Madness"! I love it Jim. ;D ;D  Thanks for listening and I'm happy to hear my madness cheered you up! ::smiley:: My muse pops out once in a while  ::Suzy::


Re: A Bad Day!
Reply #14 on: November 12, 2017, 13:48:47
« Last Edit: November 12, 2017, 13:52:01 by CrystalSuzy »
OMG that one is so full of energy! What a journey! Listened a few times, and every time I caught other details on my canvas. Well captured journey/story @CrystalSuzy , you're so good at this!
And it was some time ago since you created such a journey wasn't it?
I looooved this entertaining song from your camp as always.. Your style is unique! Glad that bad day was just a dream..  ;)
Thanks for sharing and keep them coming Suzy!!
Cheers!
:mart:
Thanks so much for your kind comments @Mar T.  You're very supportive  ::heart:: You're right...It is a very crazy/energetic song ::Dutch:: I think I'm trying to make up for my somewhat "low energy real life situation"  ::smiley:: This was a dream, but I do have days where it's almost as bad/crazy  ::) ::) ::)
I haven't written too many songs over the last year and I've really missed it. The last track was "Cell Phone Junkie"   ::Note::   Equally crazy!
https://soundcloud.com/crystalsuzy/cell-phone-junkie    ::Suzy::



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