• A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
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A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
on: November 28, 2019, 17:03:59
« Last Edit: November 30, 2019, 02:40:48 by Bill from November Sound »
Happy Thanksgiving to the American friends and a joyous average, everyday Thursday to everyone else in the world!

I usually stay out of songs for review section but here goes .....
[Edit - this doesn't sound anything like U2! If you like U2 don't listen to this.]

https://soundcloud.com/november-love-680008043/spartan-sun

This was written for a wedding of a couple who met doing Spartan Runs. Some kind of ridiculous obstacle course races that they travel the world to compete in.  :)  These people are tough! They have tattoos and everything.  :yes:  The song was already performed as a piano and voice thing at the wedding this past summer. I was finally able to get the production about where I wanted it.

If you hear anything that needs tweaking or whatever I can probably adjust for the YouTube video version still.  Otherwise, I thought it'd be cool to show the custom song idea. They gave me some words, concepts and feelings about their relationship and how they met. They also gave us some songs that they liked ... one of them was U2 "Beautiful Day" ... so I kind of sort of based the song idea off of that. This is what I came up with:

Spartan Sun

Lyrics:

If you walk Iíll run.
If you push Iíll shove.
If you stop Iíll go on.
If you like Iíll love.

We race into each otherís arms.
Itís a beautiful night. Why walk if we can run?
We race into each otherís arms.
Itís a beautiful day beneath the Spartan sun.

If you float Iíll dive.
If you jump Iíll fall.
If you coast Iíll drive.
You give some. I give all.

We race into each otherís arms.
Itís a beautiful night. Why walk if we can run?
We race into each otherís arms.
Itís a beautiful day beneath the Spartan sun.

We race into each otherís arms.
Itís a beautiful day beneath the Spartan sun.
 
Bill
Songwriter, Keyboards, Arranger, Producer & Engineer for November Sound

November Sound is based on the Mother, Father & Son musical trio of Melissa, Bill & Will. I'm the father so anything I post will have my wife singing and/or my son playing percussion.


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Re: A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
Reply #1 on: November 28, 2019, 21:27:40
hi @Bill from November Sound , this is AWESOME

great song
and...great how you captured that U2 soungbuild and Beautiful Day especially

great songwriting

but....mixwise...just a thought....you probably can catch the U2 power of a mix like Beautiful day some more ...in the laid back pieces, so the intro and the drop back pieces of the track....the sound, mixwise,  could be more intense...more tension building

i think  :P :P :P, but i do think...that overall, the mix could be a bit more full of expectation and energy ....you know, more driving towards....

the choruses, the release of tension

if that makes any sense
perhaps @budhabuilding can give a sample of a U2-ish mix treatment

no really, he can

but don't get me wrong...I think it is a super song  :ok:
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Re: A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
Reply #2 on: November 29, 2019, 01:51:28
Thanks @Dutchbeat  !  :)
We'll never be as good as U2 and we'll never try. Oh well.  ;)


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Re: A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
Reply #3 on: November 29, 2019, 13:32:53
To me this song sounds very cool!
For my (untrained) ears absolutely professionell arranged with a lot of instrumental that compaigns this beautiful vovals. I really can hear a slightly touch of U2 but otherwise the sound stays with much power and dynamic. I just have a small idea what Spartan Runs means but in every case i think the couple will like t it for sure!


Re: A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
Reply #4 on: November 29, 2019, 20:04:25
@Bill from November Sound No, honestly, I had NO recollection of U2 when I was listening to this. U2 has more of an underlying bite to them. This song does not have it that way, and that is quite alright. I don't think you should want to copy U2, this song can stand on its own feet. I like the composition. It would be nice as the theme song for a movie.
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Re: A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
Reply #5 on: November 30, 2019, 02:36:48
I'm sorry if I somehow suggested that we sound like U2. We don't. We can't. We wouldn't want to, honestly.
The bride suggested some favorite songs such as "beautiful day", some country songs, etc that I can't remember.
The bride told us the story of how they met and how they essentially raced into each other's life.
I then took these concepts and made a song for them. I thought that songwriters in the Kitchen would be interested in this because you can make money and it is much more artistically fulfilling than playing in some lousy wedding band IMO....
So forget U2. Don't expect U2 when you listen to this. If you like U2 you'll hate this.
Imagine writing songs for people's special days. It might be a fun thing to try.   


Re: A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
Reply #6 on: November 30, 2019, 04:12:18
Super production! Great lyrics and an epic Pop Ballad feel... very uplifting.

I also liked the build in energy through the guitar solo and into the last verse.

Nice work @Bill from November Sound 😎👏👏👏


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Re: A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
Reply #7 on: November 30, 2019, 09:19:30
There's a theory, that says if your first four sentences are really strong, people stay with you and listen to the rest of the song.

And is this first verse really strong? You bet it is. I am busy polishing up my English, just because I want to write first verses like this one. And now I understand where I going to get that skill.

Nice one, @Bill from November Sound !!!
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Re: A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
Reply #8 on: December 01, 2019, 13:50:27
I like itttttttttttttt @Bill from November Sound

May be the sound of the bass backing sound could be enhanced, may be, but for the rest the song works good!!!
The voice is wonderful!!


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Re: A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
Reply #9 on: December 02, 2019, 01:09:55
Thanks @Mora Amaro La Loba  , @Mo  ,  @LePlongeur , @1roomstudio  , @Pleudoniem  ... we appreciate it very much!
.... and maybe somebody WILL want it for a movie someday ..... who knows?
I won't hold my breath.
The sing is so specialized it might do well on youtube ..... I mean if one were to look up songs for spartan runners  there can't be that many in existence.  :)


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Re: A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
Reply #10 on: December 02, 2019, 19:35:48
Really nice piece of work here @Bill from November Sound . Melissa sounds fantastic and the whole thing has a very commanding ebb and flow to it that is driven nicely by the excellent percussion.

I think you actually did capture a little U2 essence...to my ears.

The only tweak you might consider is a tiny bit of de-essing on the vocal.
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Re: A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
Reply #11 on: December 02, 2019, 22:27:14
Thanks for the useful advice @Leonard Scaper   ... I'll fix it for the youtube version.  :ok:
I actually have two de-essers on the vocal tracks the lead vox process group and the vocal buss.... three if you include the one on my mega-compressed "hiss" track.  :)
I was almost at the lisping point but I'm going to back and push it all a little bit more. 
I'm going back into the track and comping everything even more and to manually remove any long ssss's at phrase ends wherever I can find something I missed.


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Re: A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
Reply #12 on: December 02, 2019, 22:33:48
« Last Edit: December 02, 2019, 22:35:53 by Dutchbeat »
...leave the ssssss's
(sorry  ;D ;D)
because ...it clearly has U2 songwriting all over it

and accentuate it  8) 8) 8) 8) mixwise




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Re: A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
Reply #13 on: December 02, 2019, 23:03:27
Hi @Bill from November Sound

Firstly, great lyrics which to me really captures the inspiration and brief you had when writing them.

If you hadn't mentioned U2 I think I would have still got a feel for them when I listened. Not because it's trying to sound like U2 but I think mainly the bass playing and the initial opening of the song.

Everyone sounds so clear in the mix on my headphones. The vocals stand out really well as well.

Are the drums and electric kit? They sound a little compressed to me.

Who played the lead guitar? It's a great solo that really fits the song.

Looking forward to the video. This song sounds like it should be in a rom com so interesting to see what you do with a video.

cheers


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Re: A Custom Song ... written for Spartan Runners?
Reply #14 on: December 02, 2019, 23:12:21
Hi @Bill from November Sound

Firstly, great lyrics which to me really captures the inspiration and brief you had when writing them.

If you hadn't mentioned U2 I think I would have still got a feel for them when I listened. Not because it's trying to sound like U2 but I think mainly the bass playing and the initial opening of the song.

Everyone sounds so clear in the mix on my headphones. The vocals stand out really well as well.

Are the drums and electric kit? They sound a little compressed to me.

Who played the lead guitar? It's a great solo that really fits the song.

Looking forward to the video. This song sounds like it should be in a rom com so interesting to see what you do with a video.

cheers


i also look forward to the video, preferably shot in black and white
on a very cold winter day
like new Year's day....U2 style

or on an extremely hot day,..and make it completely Anton Corbijn @Bill from November Sound



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