• a song that needs lyrics.... help?
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Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #30 on: July 06, 2019, 19:39:44
« Last Edit: July 06, 2019, 19:45:55 by Dutchbeat »
"dont count me out"
....in kitchen terms  ;D ;D ;D ;D means that your are very in... for joining this challenge  ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D :shinyteeth: :shinyteeth: :shinyteeth: @1roomstudio  ;D :thumbsup: :thumbsup:

so we have the following contestants now, feel free to join...

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Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #31 on: July 06, 2019, 23:49:25
yup it’s in E maj. i only “know” that cos usually the first chord is the key, atleast with the songs i write which never change key cos i don’t know how!

ok,i have made it downloadable.
https://soundcloud.com/blackbauble/the-great-balloon-song

i might have stems somewhere if you want them... but that could take a while to find, this song was several computers ago. and it’d only be three stems, guitar, vox, vox.
“everything is simple, nothing is as straightforward as it seems”.— Me


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Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #32 on: July 06, 2019, 23:51:03
would ppl be more aware it was the new challenge if we put it in the challenge  section of the forum?


Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #33 on: July 07, 2019, 00:18:54
You`d be surprised how many lurkers are following your very interesting thread @lu77 .
Took me a few listens to find something coming through for  the melody . If I`m correct that we can write completely different lyrics then count me in @Dutchbeat .
The lyrics are good and personal- I find inspiration in them but don`t want to tinker .

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Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #34 on: July 07, 2019, 01:16:30
the only lyrics this song has is “ba ba ba ba” etc...

personally i’m pretty happy with the melody, but i think a challenge is best if people have the reigns they need to do what they do best.

“my” lyric attempt on page one was just one of my several attempts that failed yet again to match the feel of the music.


Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #35 on: July 07, 2019, 01:32:58
"I just realized today that I should actually listen to the song" says the guy who was first to enter the competition. "Well, cousin Eddy always bid four without even looking at his hand ... or so the legend states" ....  :blackgrin: .... now on listening to the song ....  :bonk:  :doublebonk:  :bonk:  :doublebonk:     :o.   
With the cover art I expected a nice floating and whimsical electric piano and synth track. I mean it's about balloons right?  :D
Okay I got this.
I have write lyrics about balloons right? :shinyteeth:
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November Sound is based on the Mother, Father & Son musical trio of Melissa, Bill & Will. I'm the father so anything I post will have my wife singing and/or my son playing percussion.


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Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #36 on: July 07, 2019, 02:16:18
THIS SONG DOES NOT HAVE TO BE ABOUT BALLOONS!
lol
it’s just the nick name you know?
but sure, you can do balloons if that floats your ... balloon.


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Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #37 on: July 07, 2019, 12:14:47
 ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D @lu77

you are right, i think i should make a separate thread for this challenge in the songwriting challenges section of this forum, i will do that….soon

but we now have the following contestants:


@Dutchbeat
@lu77
@Bill from November Sound
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@realkevm
@1roomstudio (stil contemplating)
@robertkc
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Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #38 on: July 07, 2019, 19:02:13
Okay... I’m in...

I have a first verse and the chorus.
That melody is real ear worm 👂🐛 ... catchy as hell! I had to find some lyrics just to stop the “la da da da” over and over in my head!

So what are the guide, lines? Can I post what I’ve got for now? Right here?

Don’t want to step into another faux pas in this same thread!👻


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Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #39 on: July 07, 2019, 19:38:02
« Last Edit: July 07, 2019, 19:56:33 by Dutchbeat »
i started a new thread in the songwriting challenges section about this challenge now
https://www.songwriter-forum-kitchen.com/forum/challenges/18/the-new-songwriting-challenge-isss-official-thread/5534/msg59366;topicseen#msg59366

but i think it works better....i just realize, if you start a new thread for your entry for this challenge @1roomstudio
and all contestants do that for their entries and add someting like 'Louise's song looking for Lyrics Challenge' in the heading

so @Mar T.  can select and collect  ;D ;D all the songs and discussion threads for the voting poll later on....easily and without too much effort...because our kitchen IT wizard... @Mar T.  is getting a bit....lazy... ;D ;D ;D ..   .lately.... ;D ;D ;D ;D
yes...he is..:dance: :dance:

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Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #40 on: July 07, 2019, 20:12:06
So...  since my last post I was able to come up with a 2nd verse

@Dutchbeat  much appreciation for your efforts to organize the entries.

For now... I hope it’s OK if I just post what I’ve got right here...

This song, to me, has the feel of an Anthem. Something to rally kindred spirits into action. Sort of a Punk version of “ We Are the World” or “We Are The Champions” 

I would call it “SING WTH THE BAND”

VERSE 1
E (open) A (open)
Reach out ... your hand

E (open) A (open)
Rise up ... and stand

F# B
With me .... understand
F# B
Hear me ... yes we can
Sing... with the band

CHORUS
E (open) A (open)
Hold up your hands everyone
A G# F#

E (open) A (open)
Reach for our place in the sun

A G# F# B
This world is ours

A G# F# B
Reach for the stars

A G# F#  E (Open)
“...then the whole cycle starts again.”

VERSE 2
E (open) A (open)
Be with ... us here

E (open) A (open)
Sing loud ... and clear

F# B
Soaring .... overland
F# B
Louder... yes you can
Sing... with the band


 


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Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #41 on: July 07, 2019, 20:19:35
awesome @1roomstudio 


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Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #42 on: July 08, 2019, 09:30:53
« Last Edit: July 08, 2019, 09:49:02 by Rabid Parrot »
https://soundcloud.com/rabid-parrot/the-great-balloon-song

THIS IS NOT A CONTEST ENTRY. 

This was an insanely catchy instrumental and opened up so many possibilities for little stories to tell.  I wanted to flip this quickly since I had a couple of hours to mess around tonight so here it is.  Did I tell you already how cool this instrumental is @lu77

I am posting it here as I am not entering the contest.  I am no longer a regular poster and didn't want to offend any regular contributors.  I haven't even written a song since my last contribution over a year ago.  I do however continue to receive the occasional notification in my email inbox and this one was particularly interesting because as a complete non-musician, I don't often feel comfortable chiming in on anything as I really have no musical background leg to stand on other than what I think just sounds good to me, and even then I can rarely articulate what it is I think.  But with words and stories and writing, I always have something to say.  Music and songs to me are opportunities to tell stories and communicate in images and music and I am absolutely in love with that aspect of songwriting.  The use of words and phrasings and inflections have always been of interest to me! 

So that said... this was written and recorded in less than 3 hours interspersed with work and watching some gaming stream - I didn't want to mess it up by sleeping on it, so this was all done in one take at 3am.  Hopefully I don't regret it tomorrow morning :P

What I heard in this short but incredibly power-charged instrumental was a sense of drowning guitars blocking out all but an almost playful playground background chant piercing through. Like rays of sunlight through a storm. 

It made me picture the feeling of being at a funeral of a loved one with so many unresolved emotions and grief and sympathy making you feel almost numb and unable to process your thoughts. 

My story is this moment: The service starts and it's the beginning of the formal goodbye. The deceased had tried to prepare you for this moment before their passing and wanted to provide you with the key to process your grief but in that moment you can't understand or appreciate the message - that the only thing to do is take one step at a time and find the strength to move forward. It's there you will ultimately understand your grief, accept your loss, and truly reconnect with all that was cherished.

I kept the title - "The Great Balloon Song" because in essence it is this image that I kept throughout as the resolution - lifting and rising above the world. It was a bit of a gamble to wait until 40 seconds in to introduce the vocal, but I think this instrumental creates such a solid foundation for the story that allowing it to simmer is almost like a panning opening sequence that lets your soak in what is to come.
The second challenge was to tell a complete vignette in the short total run time of 2:47 - but I think the brevity adds to the strength of the emotion as the song seeks an urgent resolution. 

The Great Balloon Song

And so it begins
And so we begin
Where are you now that you’re gone?
where are you now?

You shone like the sea – you washed over me
These words in my head, so precious, you said:
"When I am gone, I won’t be gone" (gone gone gone)
I try to feel but nothing feels real

My eyes are dry
My tears won't fall
I know you are here but why can't I feel nothing at all?
When all that we were is replaced with a scar

Emptiness can’t be filled
We aren't meant to rebuild
The only step is beyond - into the unknown, out of the fog
And here I find - I see you now
At the clearing of the sky - I feel you now


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Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #43 on: July 08, 2019, 10:01:32
Holy hell @Rabid Parrot that is magic.
I am deeply moved. I’m actually crying.


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Re: a song that needs lyrics.... help?
Reply #44 on: July 08, 2019, 15:45:30
oh and I just realised the inspirational source of this particular style of lyric:  - Arcade Fire - Wake Up
Of Monsters and Men - Dirty Paws
Jose Gonsalez - Step Out



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