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A spade a spade
on: December 13, 2019, 23:38:28
Hi KitchenForum,
Had the luck to work with a soundclouder I have known for a long time: Snow Man Dave.
He wrote the lyrics, I did the music - more or less, and he agreed to sing it, so I could do my favorite part of singing backing vocals.
Feedback welcome, on the maybe too sparse instrumentation, vocals, mix, mastering - whatever.

https://soundcloud.com/oorlab/a-spade-a-spade



A spade's a spade
These are my thoughts so far
Donít sell my soul.
Into a rabbit hole,
donít want to fall.

Their plans are made, and canít be swayed
so lets just call,  a spade a spade

Their protests were flawed,
Mistakes were made.
But it was a general that threw
the first hand grenade.

Heís the true renegade
whatever you say Ė a spadeís a spade.

Theres no profit in peace and calm.
The silicon moguls need
someone to harm.

Barrels of death fall from black skies
and a mother kneels by a dying child.
Education feeds a desperate mind,
wisdom, canít make a  bad man kind.

Watch out for knoberchock on your door handles
and donít go sniffing scent bottles you find in the park.
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


Re: A spade a spade
Reply #1 on: December 14, 2019, 00:01:24
@oorlab The piano at the end could be lowered a tiny bit, and Dave's vocal could be upped a bit, as it sometimes disappears into the background. It's a nice song, but I feel it could be polished a bit still. The pacing is one of the things I noticed. If they are all separate tracks, and knowing how you usually work, they are, that should not be too much of a problem.
Pleudoniem: composer; bass guitarist; guitarist; singer; drummer; tap-guitarist - o, and yes... erm- a bit of keys. Open for collabs.
SoundCloud Page: https://soundcloud.com/pleudoniem


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Re: A spade a spade
Reply #2 on: December 14, 2019, 10:01:01
@Pleudoniem  - thanks for your feedback. I changed the levels of the piano and vocals as you mentioned.
https://soundcloud.com/oorlab/a-spade-a-spade
further comments & tips much appreciated


Re: A spade a spade
Reply #3 on: December 15, 2019, 00:25:39
"knoberchock"- have to start with what sounds like a cool new word to me!
I think the vocal levels are ok @oorlab  and the bgv works especially well in that whimsical ending...which changes the mood of the song, in a good way I think.

"Theres no profit in peace and calm.
The silicon moguls need
someone to harm."

some well written dark thoughts in the lyrics  and the vocals match the feel.

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Re: A spade a spade
Reply #4 on: December 15, 2019, 11:53:05
Since the Universal Soldier and the Eve of Destruction nothing has changed. And we honestly thought we COULD change the world. It's hard now, being a father and grandfather, not to dishearten present generations. But your song is very much to the point in times of contagious door handles and bottles. Novi shock! I do like the lyrics and music of the song and think they really merit a more elaborate recording. It's all there!
If you dig it, do it. If you dig it a lot, do it twice (Jim Croce).


Re: A spade a spade
Reply #5 on: January 06, 2020, 17:29:36
Hi @oorlab

I thought I had put a comment on your song but it turns out not ... Although I do know that I had heard it.
It's beautiful .... Curiously, I think the same as @Pleudoniem  the same.
It is a very beautiful and balanced song and very nice to hear as it is but, if you do those little touches, it would be great.

I have already learned that you are now a moderator in the forum ... Congratulations and that you and yours have a great 2020

Mora
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