• another song!! (longer than 50 seconds this time)
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Hi everyone, how are you?

I have another song to share, this one is longer than my other ones I've shared on here (2 minutes and 30 seconds this time) and I took more time on it than usual to make it! it feels more complete than some of my others
i had lots of drafts of this one, but i like the outcome and would like some feedback to make it better! (i would still call it a rough draft)

Link:
https://soundcloud.com/amber-matelski-rose/hanging-by-a-thread
 
Lyrics:

the lights not coming in, its dark again, i was born a sin
im not innocent, im craving it, what's it mean again
what's it mean again?

i backstroke quietly, in the sea, im drowning in again
you all look at me, why cant you see?
i guess i can pretend
i guess i can pretend

dont take it off just leave it on
youll still stare out your window
your flesh and blood's not coming off
you still cry in the night though

hoping for a change thats not coming
pleading for forgiveness youre not getting
youre not getting

here we are again, same routine circling your head
dont talk back again, stay in sync, there's no way out of here
youre hanging by a thread
youre hanging by a thread

dont take it off just leave it on
youll still stare out your window
your flesh and blood's not coming off
you still cry in the night though

hoping for a change thats not coming
pleading for forgiveness you're not getting
you're not getting

Thanks :)
-Amber




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Re: another song!! (longer than 50 seconds this time)
Reply #1 on: March 28, 2019, 19:45:12
hi  @1AmberRose1 , fantastic!!!!  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::
stunning, with just a ukele backing track already
this would be a great song for a full band

awesome  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::
great vocal  ::thumb:: ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::
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Re: another song!! (longer than 50 seconds this time)
Reply #2 on: March 29, 2019, 04:56:17
Yes @1AmberRose1 this is exactly what I hoped for when I heard the first small shred.
And why lessen the intimacy/uniqueness by paying the mortgage of a whole band? A second uke or maybe a modest bass?
That's all it takes I think. Don't hug it to death, is what I think.
Love it!!!
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Re: another song!! (longer than 50 seconds this time)
Reply #3 on: March 29, 2019, 13:08:22
I absolutely LOVE what you do, Amber! You don't need more than your voice and that uke....but it would be amazing to hear you in an expanded setting.

This is an excellent song and a strong and honest performance.
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Re: another song!! (longer than 50 seconds this time)
Reply #4 on: March 30, 2019, 00:47:08
super song @1AmberRose1  - agreeing with @Dutchbeat  and @LePlongeur , the vocal carries it well.

If you were to record this with a separated track for vocals and music, I would put a wee bit compression on the vocals, so you would still have the intention on a line like "dont talk back again, stay in sync, there's no way out of here" without the sudden rise in volume. But that's pure recording technology.
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Re: another song!! (longer than 50 seconds this time)
Reply #5 on: March 30, 2019, 14:08:12


Wonderful lyrics, really and the natural spontaneity of your voice and style.

Maybe if you soften the tempo of your ukulele, your voice would fit even better, you're in good shape @1AmberRose1
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Re: another song!! (longer than 50 seconds this time)
Reply #6 on: March 31, 2019, 01:46:36
Really great melody and vocals.



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