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As We Wait
on: April 21, 2019, 18:42:18
« Last Edit: April 21, 2019, 19:20:23 by Zedd »
Hi all!


This one newly recorded although I actually wrote it a couple of years ago. A typically upbeat number from me, written as I waited for my mother who was going through a day of tests to confirm what we already knew, that she had Alzheimerís. Things have progressed since and I found myself writing about it again and this popped in my head.


Iím all about melody and structure, and a fan of build... this has none of these things  :) ... itís got a very basic melody, chorus is not hooky and also basic and well, instrumentation is also in the basic category. I normally avoid the acoustic guitar like the plague when recording although I nearly always write on it but here it is... I was going to re-record with piano but ended up combining them - which Iím not convinced works. But sure see what you think!! I  thank you in advance if you give it a listen and comment!

https://soundcloud.com/monnodb/as-we-wait-sun


Donít be afraid
Put aside that fear
As the cloudiness comes
Iíll be right here
Iíll hold your hand
Iíll take your weight
Iíll be right here
As we wait...


The years pass
The tables turn
From a life and love
That simple were
No question marks
The lines were straight
Theyíre crooked now
As we wait.....


Like an old film reel
The images float
Past my eyes
And the lump in my throat
Makes me tighten
My hold on your hand
My cries I swallow
My tears I fan
As we wait....


Bring me back
To an airy day
Weíre paddling
In the incoming waves
Trousers rolled
To knees exposed
Laugher loud
Water cold
Hands held tight
As we jump each time
The tide pushed us
Back in line
And I close my eyes
And hold that thought
As we wait...


And I promise you
I wonít love less
Wonít loosen my hold
Through the cloudiness
My hand in yours
Your cushion my shoulder
Itís simply time
We all must get older
Donít be afraid
Iíll be right here
As we wait...


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Re: As We Wait
Reply #1 on: April 22, 2019, 00:02:02
« Last Edit: April 22, 2019, 11:02:26 by oorlab »
The piano definitely works well @Zedd - moving / hauting song. The chord change from minor to major is very cool.
I'd keep this as is - melody and structure fit like a glove.
Some minor mixing tweaks might be usefull - but I wouldn't worry about it - this is an outstanding song.
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


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Re: As We Wait
Reply #2 on: April 22, 2019, 00:06:12
PS @Zedd - listening to "Lose my mind" (brilliant!) - that has a fine bass in the mix. You might have some simple bass in "As we wait" too, in the first part too.


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Re: As We Wait
Reply #3 on: April 22, 2019, 01:44:34
« Last Edit: April 22, 2019, 01:46:58 by Mar T. »
Hey dear @Zedd , thank you so much for sharing one of your more 'raw' pieces with us. Damn you're a master in this kind of expression.
You say that you think there's NOTHING of a number of 'aspects'  (melody, build-up, chorus, hook etc) in this song. I strongly disagree. They're all there. And I'd add 'signature' and 'emotion'.
Just like @oorlab mentioned the minor/major changes while 'we wait' resonated perfectly with the insecurities at the particular moment. That was the 'hook' for me.
I also capture the 'uncertaincy' about the outcome (although I know what the outcome was). Imo the guitar, the piano and your voice (and wonderful harmonies) worked perfectly together, without you applying any rules. This is who you are, this is what you sound like. I was blown away as always.
Well done Karen!! This is one of your beauties!

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Re: As We Wait
Reply #4 on: April 22, 2019, 12:34:24
Hi @Zedd ... I just read your lyrics, haven't listened yet, but they're incredible and my eyes welled up. Wow.
Do what makes your heart sing :)


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Re: As We Wait
Reply #5 on: April 22, 2019, 13:56:49
Beautiful yet haunting song. I like how the piano comes in and then how the song builds with those excellent harmonies.

Love the spaces at the the end with those even stronger harmonies and then just the solo voice.
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Re: As We Wait
Reply #6 on: April 22, 2019, 15:13:16
Hi @Zedd
The lyrics perfectly describe a sea of emotions, moments, thoughts, fears, sadness and confidence in that hand that holds your mother's ... Perhaps the guitar could be on a closer plane, I do not know, with the same presence that it has the piano, which by the way sounds beautiful. Your song has moved me.
Wonderful lyrics!! ::thumb::
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Re: As We Wait
Reply #7 on: April 22, 2019, 17:51:34
Thanks guys :)


@Mora Amaro La Loba - thank you for your kind words.. You mean make the guitar louder in the mix? I actually brought it way down in this last mix.. thought it was dominating a bit before that... Thanks again.


@Leonard Scaper - why thank you for those lovely words..


@Kellyanneg - thank you! Tis a bit sad alright!


@Mar T. what lovely words - yes I can be a bit of a saddo alright :)! You are very kind.. Thank you!!


@oorlab thank you so much for your lovely comments on this song and Lose My Mind ... I'll have a think about that bass .. Mr Zedd is the bass player I'll see what he thinks.


Thanks so much for taking the time to listen and comment. It's much appreciated  ;D !


K


Re: As We Wait
Reply #8 on: April 22, 2019, 21:32:45
@Zedd Gave it a listen....And yes, hauntingly beautiful.   ::thumb::


Re: As We Wait
Reply #9 on: April 23, 2019, 17:05:14
The song is very beautiful
Congratulations  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::


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Re: As We Wait
Reply #10 on: April 23, 2019, 19:57:59
I've already like this on SoundCloud so just to say on here I think it's a top bit of songwriting

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Re: As We Wait
Reply #11 on: April 29, 2019, 20:04:46
@Kellyanneg Thanks so much for listening and your comments!


@Marcus Nalgaber - Gracias, sir!


@MrBouzouki - thanks so much and for your SC comments.


Every listen and comment much appreciated!







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Re: As We Wait
Reply #12 on: May 02, 2019, 09:25:11
Fantastic. Too fantastic to write you something after just one spin. @Zedd
If you and @Leonard Scaper would team up, between the two of you, you could write a song that has one note in the beginning and one at the end. And for the rest only silence.
I think i would like that too.

This one is among the best things the Kitchen has to offer.
Can hardly wait for the next.
Kind regards, Gus


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Re: As We Wait
Reply #13 on: May 04, 2019, 23:13:25
@LePlongeur Gus thanks so much as always for your lovely comments here and on SC. You are too kind, sir!


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Re: As We Wait
Reply #14 on: May 05, 2019, 07:26:47
@Zedd, this is so lovely. The simple, raw acoustic performance matches perfectly the poignant lyric. 

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