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Better Places
on: August 19, 2017, 22:48:15
Ok.. For those that don't like Country my apologies.   This one is very country.    Just finished it up and bit of a departure for me.   
Hired a singer for this one as I wasn't country enough for it.    Thanks in advance for any and all criticism.

https://soundcloud.com/eric-blossman/betterplacesfullmix0814

Better Places

Verse 1
Well this town used to be a lot more fun
Had every honkey tonk under the sun
But thereís Nothing but micro brews and sushi bars around
Well  finally found a place that resembled a bar
Ordered a beer and lit up a cigar
Hey Mr. Bartender what happened to this town?

Pre chorus
I could see the anger written all over his face
 He says ďDonít bother my customers in their safe placeĒ

Chorus
Well you can throw me out of here and I wonít mind
Easy buddy I heard you the first time
But before I go I gotta get this off my chest
Iíve been kicked out of better places than this
Yeah, Iíve been kicked out of better places than this.

verse 2
Man I wish I had a time machine
travel back when life was simple and clean
I feel like Iím walking in a foreign land
Thereís yoga studios and spiritual advisors
When all I want is a cold budweiser
This situation is clearly out of hand.

Pre Chorus
Easy fellas I will just pay up and leave
No need for violence I got nothing up my sleeve

Chorus
Guitar lead
Chorus Out


Re: Better Places
Reply #1 on: August 29, 2017, 20:57:42
Not my genre but it is very good produced/played  ::Note:: ::Note:: ::Note:: ::thumb::



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Re: Better Places
Reply #2 on: August 29, 2017, 21:11:10
Yep....it's country alright. In fact it's a lot more country than what I hear on country radio these days.

I like it....good story and typically good playing and production.
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Re: Better Places
Reply #3 on: August 30, 2017, 19:28:00
Ha @eblossman ...yes that is a country as country can be  ::Hoss:: ::Hoss:: ::Hoss:: ::Hoss::


fantastic how cathy that chorus is  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: sounds awesome


that fiddle is also stunning

and the final line of the chorus is lovely, that puts a smile on my face  ;D ;D ;D 8) 8) 8) 8):

this one: "Yeah, Iíve been kicked out of better places than this".

extremely hooky, and what a great attitude..... 8) 8) 8) 8)

get kicked out somewhere is a negative thing, and usually the person that gets kicked out is the loser

but this reaction to it saying: "Iíve been kicked out of better places than this"

sort of makes the storytelles / the singer the winner of the dispute

i love that line. 

extra karma points from me for this track

great country singer too!
me, myself, and Pie


Re: Better Places
Reply #4 on: September 02, 2017, 00:18:37
Hey Eric,
I think the scansion of the lyric is a bit forced in places..
ďDonít bother my customers in their safe placeĒ is awkward for some reason.  Besides, it doesn't sound like something a bartender would say.

I might try flipping the first two lines of the chorus..

Hey easy there buddy - I heard you the first time
You can throw me out of here and I wonít mind

Sorry - ran out of time.. I'll come back and take another listen.. -Mark


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Re: Better Places
Reply #5 on: September 03, 2017, 23:25:32
Wow, I really like the production of your song
Sounds very professional, it's really commercial ready
Great job!  ::heart:: ::thumb::


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Re: Better Places
Reply #6 on: September 04, 2017, 02:32:43
@Dutchbeat  thanks for the positive feedback much appreciated.   
@Leonard Scaper  yep this is as country as I get.
@Dynofficial  Yeah.. it didn't come out exactly like I wanted in a lot of spots and still working on revisions.   Some of the words I agree seem forced but I wanted to say them even though rhythmically they were rushed.   Thanks for listening and the feedback.
@alvin   Thanks for listening!     


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Re: Better Places
Reply #7 on: September 05, 2017, 02:08:35
Great foot tapping song @eblossman 

The guitars sound great.

It is very country and not what I would normally be listening to but I did enjoy it.



Re: Better Places
Reply #8 on: September 08, 2017, 00:45:13
@eblossman Love the guitar riff after each chorus! Yee hah! And t the solo and fiddle ain't half bad either!


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Re: Better Places
Reply #9 on: September 08, 2017, 01:27:30
Well I'm no country expert but it works for me. :-)

My favourite line has to be "Thereís yoga studios and spiritual advisors When all I want is a cold budweiser"
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Re: Better Places
Reply #10 on: September 16, 2017, 06:38:01
@Olbigead  Thanks Much appreciated!
@MrBouzouki   haha!   it's the truth!
@Jurgen   Yeah this is as country as I can get! 

Thanks everyone for listening and the comments!



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