Can I get some feedback on a piece I wrote for 2 cellos?

Link to the audio file:
https://bencrouchcomposer.weebly.com/files/theme/dunkelheiterwacht.wav
(The quality isn't that great, because I put the midi file in my DAW program.)


Dunkelheit Erwacht by Ben Crouch is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-NonCommercial-NoDerivatives 4.0 International License.

I wrote this about a year ago, and recently wrote the second part. If I could get some feedback, that'd be great!

UPDATE: I added the rest of the string parts, as well as a piano part. If you could also give that one a listen, that'd be great!
Link to audio: https://bencrouchcomposer.weebly.com/files/theme/DunkelheitErwacht13.mp3

Welcome to the forum Ben! Where are you from?

I listened to the audio file, I think the composition is great 

I would not be the one that can judge music like this, but it sounds very good to me

but I do think running the midi files through other string sounds, with less attack

and some more reverb at the tail, would make the composition even stand out more
a fuller sound??? but perhaps you don't want that

anyway...awesome!!!!! oh my....I realize now...these are probably real Cello strings??? 

karma points incoming 

I think this sounds really good. The composition seems to end too abruptly. I kind of felt, "that's it?" SO, I think I wanted more: To hear it lengthened a bit. I really liked it though. Your cello playing is top notch. I like when it ran down to the tenor parts.

I agree with DCS, it could use some more development. And maybe have an organ instead of a piano? Just a thought.