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Daydreaming Again
on: June 13, 2019, 20:38:43
Hi, this one is a bit different from me, it's a bit of a rock tune called 'Daydreaming Again'.  :)

Yeah i'm limping but i'm walking along
The ships been single since you've gone
I'll pretend that things are ok
You wouldn't have it anyways

There's one thing I can't erase
Close my eyes I see your face

Here's my soul go on take it
Just know that life won't break me
I'll take my time this go around
Yeah i'm fine, i'm safe i'm sound

I'm daydreaming again
I'm not meaning to offend
I'll just say that things are ok
You wouldn't have it anyways

There's one thing I can't erase
Close my eyes I see your face

Here's my soul go on take it
Just know that life won't break me
I'll take my time this go around
Yeah i'm fine, i'm safe i'm sound



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Re: Daydreaming Again
Reply #1 on: June 14, 2019, 02:03:10
Hi @realkevm

Nice rocking song!

I would definitely mix the vocals higher - the guitar(s) are much louder on my mac speaker and also headphones than the vocals.

At the start, around the 10 seconds mark the drums and bass seem to be out of time. I've listened a few times and something doesn't seem quite in synch at that point.

I like the lines:

"There's one thing I can't erase
Close my eyes I see your face"

Nice one

cheers


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Re: Daydreaming Again
Reply #2 on: June 14, 2019, 08:45:38
I like this disguise very much.
Apart from the usual about the mix, this rockier approach seems to fit your voice very good.
Like the lyrics too.
Keep em coming.
Kind regards, Gus


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Re: Daydreaming Again
Reply #3 on: June 14, 2019, 09:50:45
Hi @realkevm ,
                             yes as @Jurgen it would be good to get the Vox higher if you can.

The chugging guitar works well for a track like this and it fits with the overall mood of sadness but also 'hey - I'm still carrying on'

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Re: Daydreaming Again
Reply #4 on: June 16, 2019, 00:45:15
Good call by other listeners @realkevm - this is a good high energy style for your voice. I`d also like to hear this with vocals boosted.
Are you using a DAW now?

Robert


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Re: Daydreaming Again
Reply #5 on: June 16, 2019, 09:46:00
Great energy in this! As already said there are a few timing issues here and there and the vocals really need to come up in the mix. Overall the mix need works but easier to fix a mix than fix a song :-)
Let man's petty nations tear themselves apart
My land's only borders lie around my heart


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Re: Daydreaming Again
Reply #6 on: June 18, 2019, 09:09:32
@Jurgen Thank you, I can hear some of it is out of time I was excited to get some drums on it. I really should be more patient and more of a perfectionist with my recordings. I'm glad you like that lyric i'm quite proud of it :)

@LePlongeur Hi Gus thank you for the kind words

@MrBouzouki Glad you enjoyed, I do think I got the mood right with the guitar sound/melody and the tone of the song.

@robertkc Hi dude, no DAW here yet lol I got someone else to put the drums on it, i'm really useless at the technical aspects of recording my music.

@Jambrains Thank you SIr :)

Thanks to everyone for taking the time to have a listen and offer me some great feedback I do appreciate it.


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Re: Daydreaming Again
Reply #7 on: June 18, 2019, 11:43:44
I've recorded a more stripped back and bare bones version if anyone would please like to have a listen and let me know their thoughts


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Re: Daydreaming Again
Reply #8 on: June 19, 2019, 01:22:11
Nice one @realkevm

I like this acoustic version, it has a real vulnerability about it which suits the song a lot.

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Re: Daydreaming Again
Reply #9 on: June 19, 2019, 22:06:38
Thanks @Jurgen , appreciated dude



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