• Delicious Grace - Desperate
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Re: Delicious Grace - Desperate
Reply #1 on: September 14, 2019, 15:21:12
Lyrics: Desperate

You donít want to talk about it
Itís getting harder to make things work out
Weíve got to find a way now!

Sometimes we lost count of all the things that matter
And we left behind
ĎCause itís true, itís true...

Donít know what to say or feel
How did we make this situation so unreal?
Letís turn the page right now!

Are you feeling lonely tonight?
What you decided?
Did make up your mind?
ĎCause itís true, itís true...

chorus:
Baby please donít walk away
Iím standing my ground, Why donít you come inside?
Hey pretty baby donít walk away
ĎCause itís true, what I say itís true!

I feel so desperate
Love and hate becomo one thing inside
What are you gonna do now?

One thing I forgot to ask
How long the pain you think is gonna last?
ĎCause itís true, itís true...

chorus:
Baby please donít walk away
Iím standing my ground, Why donít you come inside?
Hey pretty baby donít walk away
ĎCause itís true, what I say itís true!


Re: Delicious Grace - Desperate
Reply #2 on: September 14, 2019, 17:49:45
Hi @alcapone_dudu

You are right, you reached a 80's song style!!!
Love lyrics are always well accepted and you's are in that field.

I really liked this line:
"I feel so desperate
Love and hate become one thing inside"
I did not know that to live I had to die so many times
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Re: Delicious Grace - Desperate
Reply #3 on: September 17, 2019, 21:59:46
Hi @alcapone_dudu

You are right, you reached a 80's song style!!!
Love lyrics are always well accepted and you's are in that field.

I really liked this line:
"I feel so desperate
Love and hate become one thing inside"

Thank you , Mora. It means a lot.


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Re: Delicious Grace - Desperate
Reply #4 on: September 18, 2019, 01:03:25
Hi @alcapone_dudu

I like this demo - has a really good lo-fi sound to it which I always enjoy.

It's a good song as well - maybe too long as it gets repetitive towards the end. I would bring in the lead guitar a little earlier and maybe fade it out around the 4 mins mark. Anything over 4 mins is usually too long for me  :)

It's a demo so the mix doesn't need to perfect but when you do it for a real, I think the guitar needs to come up in the mix. The vocals have a lot of reverb but the guitar doesn't so they sound separate. Maybe add some reverb to the guitar as well.

btw the guitar intro is really nice and sets the song up nicely.

cheers




Re: Delicious Grace - Desperate
Reply #5 on: September 20, 2019, 16:00:34
Hi @alcapone_dudu

I like this demo - has a really good lo-fi sound to it which I always enjoy.

It's a good song as well - maybe too long as it gets repetitive towards the end. I would bring in the lead guitar a little earlier and maybe fade it out around the 4 mins mark. Anything over 4 mins is usually too long for me  :)

It's a demo so the mix doesn't need to perfect but when you do it for a real, I think the guitar needs to come up in the mix. The vocals have a lot of reverb but the guitar doesn't so they sound separate. Maybe add some reverb to the guitar as well.

btw the guitar intro is really nice and sets the song up nicely.

cheers

Hi @Junger , thanks for listening. I'm glad you liked some of it.

I tend to write long length songs. That's just the way it's for me, I guess. But anyway, I agree with you about the reverb on the vocal parts. That's something I'm still trying to figure out. How to mix and twist things around on the DAW.


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Re: Delicious Grace - Desperate
Reply #6 on: September 20, 2019, 22:09:29
I agree with @Jurgen that this is a very cool demo. I actually kind of like all the reverb on the vocals as it works for me with the lo-fi feel of the whole thing.
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Re: Delicious Grace - Desperate
Reply #7 on: September 23, 2019, 21:01:52
I agree with @Jurgen that this is a very cool demo. I actually kind of like all the reverb on the vocals as it works for me with the lo-fi feel of the whole thing.

Thank you Leonard!



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