• desire
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desire
on: December 28, 2020, 23:52:38
« Last Edit: December 29, 2020, 12:29:11 by cheff daniel »
made this some time ago. its not really finished because it still needs something in the instrumental break, and the middle eight seems to be a little too easy in my ears. your opinions please.

https://soundcloud.com/cheff-daniel/desire



To all the loving wives
And their children on the run
To the people in my life I say,
God help you

Gather the family around
Let them all sit in
The impossible blood bound
Release you

And no matter what you do
And who ever you may call
You just canít save them all

Canít change the tide
The boat still rocks, untill the clock
Release you
Even the reverends say the same thing
You just canít give what has been taken
God help you

Free me of this burden
Free me from this thoughts
Extinguish this its stil burning
Highly flammable
My love

Iíve made a little trip today
To the street where we once lived
A happy house with happy kids
Oh tell me

Now that theyíve killed the fire
On both ends of the wire
All there is is my
desire


gr. Dan




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Re: desire
Reply #1 on: December 29, 2020, 00:48:49
My introduction to your work @cheff daniel ; I got the dark opening verse lyrics and then found they came and went. That might be your intention, of course, but its a deeply felt personal lyric which I`d like to have heard more of. Posting them here would help and maybe bringing you vocal  ( distinctive and  with unaffected emotion coming through) forward in the mix.
I could hear a bluesy harp or slide guitar working on the instrumental break- it does set up a more intense part of the song as is.

Robert


Re: desire
Reply #2 on: December 29, 2020, 12:31:17
@robertkc thank you the  lyrics are there now.

gr. Dan


Re: desire
Reply #3 on: December 29, 2020, 15:40:06
@robertkc thank you the  lyrics are there now.

gr. Dan

I don't know what your songs have but something moves me inside and on my skin.
It has been a very interesting and emotional experience, the atmosphere you create seems to melt and turn into a shipwreck on fire.
I still don't know how to define what it has made me feel but I do know that the song is really good, fascinating.

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Re: desire
Reply #4 on: December 30, 2020, 19:23:32
I love the floating guitars and the build... It is a very hypnotic and personal theme - but better for it. There is a hint of later Bowie in this - and some of your vocal notes are supernatural. For me though the vocal needs to come up a little and be more consistent so that it sits a little better in the mix throughout the track - rather than me working hard to hear the lyric.

But very enjoyable and a great vibe nonetheless.

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Re: desire
Reply #5 on: December 31, 2020, 11:28:38
thank you all for the kind words.

gr. Dan