• Don't Kiss Me
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Don't Kiss Me
on: February 20, 2019, 22:56:01
One more for feedback, at the same stage of production (reference vocals, not mixed or mastered yet).

https://soundcloud.com/jbfalken/dont-kiss-me/s-oFFbj

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Re: Don't Kiss Me
Reply #1 on: February 21, 2019, 10:57:54
I really like this one. One again, your dynamic production style really works with your vocals.

Are you considering doing some backing vocals? I'm hearing them maybe in the "bring it on back" spots.

I really like that first electric guitar break and how you do that bridge.

This is a very strong song with a great hook chorus! You have the voice for this stuff!!!  ;)
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Re: Don't Kiss Me
Reply #2 on: February 22, 2019, 17:55:09
A nice track this one @jbfalken .

A vocal idea if you will indulge me is that you sing relatively soft in the verses which is fine.

But if you lean into the lyric at 0:43 with "No Way Back", more staccato perhaps, and harden up the whole chorus it will give a real dynamic lift to the song. you often here this light and shade thing going on with a soft verse ... then building  ... then explode in the chorus then drop back again to a softer verse and this technique makes the chorus shine.

Emotionally the lift will add real dynamics and make the chorus more memorable as a hook. Even double tracking the chorus might be another idea to add some weight.

Good work but it's in 3rd gear in the chorus when it should be in 4th or fifth.

Nice bridge by the way

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Re: Don't Kiss Me
Reply #3 on: February 22, 2019, 20:29:28
Hi @jbfalken!

You have made a song that already works when you listen to it, I easily guess the melody that comes and the chorus

"Do not kiss me if you
Do not feel dizzy when
You see me walk into the room
Do not kiss me if you
Have a fever and
I'm not medicine to you"

stays in my tongue.

I think like @Leonard Scaper and that @MrBouzouki, this part doubling the voice is gold!

The instrumental part is also very easy to listen to, very pleasant so if you manage to reinforce the voice in the parts that have to have more emotional punch, you will have success.  ::thumb::


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Re: Don't Kiss Me
Reply #4 on: February 23, 2019, 14:14:51
« Last Edit: February 23, 2019, 14:19:53 by Marcus Nalgaber »
A very happy song that transmits positive energy and that is always necessary
Very good work  ::thumb::


Re: Don't Kiss Me
Reply #5 on: February 23, 2019, 17:11:32
Love the 80's summer vibe on this.


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Re: Don't Kiss Me
Reply #6 on: March 06, 2019, 15:45:32
Thanks  @Leonard Scaper  @MrBouzouki  @Mora Amaro La Loba  @marcus_jb  and @realkevm  for all your comments! When I went back into the studio to track vocals, I did double them in the chorus, added vocal pads , did harmonies on the pre-chorus, so hopefully things will work even better now.


Re: Don't Kiss Me
Reply #7 on: March 07, 2019, 13:08:49
Beautiful song  ::heart::
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Re: Don't Kiss Me
Reply #8 on: March 07, 2019, 17:00:00
Don’t worry, I won’t.
But I like the song!
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