• "Double Whiskey Night"
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"Double Whiskey Night"
on: December 25, 2020, 01:20:20
« Last Edit: December 31, 2020, 20:37:07 by SteveAlton »
https://soundcloud.com/stevealtonian/double-whiskey-night

"Double Whiskey Night"


The beauty across the bar sends this Cuervo Gold
Phone number in lipstick, red, & bold
I wave the drink away push her number to the side
No tequila or beer today

A Double Whiskey Night
Chased with tears I cry
Drowning thoughts of love that's died
A Double Whiskey Night
A toast to love that's blind
Remembering' when her heart was mine
A Double Whiskey Night

Kaylee's with a new guy throwing' darts & shooting' pool
Slow dancing, swaying to the groove
So damn easy for her to leave this boy behind 
Trading Tennessee whiskey for California wine

A Double Whiskey Night
Chased with tears I cry
Drowning thoughts of love that's died
A Double Whiskey Night
A toast to love that's blind
Remembering' when her heart was mine
A Double Whiskey Night

I feel a hand in mine lead me down to the dance room floor
Kaylee's eyes meet mine while dancing with her guy
The beauty asks can I buy you another pour?

A Double Whiskey Night
Chased with tears I cry
Drowning thoughts of love that's died
A Double Whiskey Night
A toast to love that's blind
Remembering' when her heart was mine

A Double Whiskey Night
Chased with tears I cry
Drowning thoughts of love that's died
A Double Whiskey Night
A toast to love that's blind
Remembering' when her heart was mine
A Double Whiskey Night
A Double Whiskey Night
A Double Whiskey Night


Re: "Double Whiskey Night"
Reply #1 on: December 25, 2020, 18:01:14
Hola @SteveAlton

I would have liked to hear it here but the link is not valid, at least in my browser! The lyrics love me a lot, they describe the scene very well, the emotions, I like this

"A Double Whiskey Night
Chased with tears I cry
Drowning thoughts of love that's died"

Merry Christmas

Mora
I did not know that to live I had to die so many times
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Re: "Double Whiskey Night"
Reply #2 on: December 25, 2020, 19:02:15
Sorry link is fixed...I changed a line in the tune


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Re: "Double Whiskey Night"
Reply #3 on: December 25, 2020, 19:19:15
Hi @SteveAlton , the link didn't work via Soundcloud at the moment

i will be back to listen  ::headphone::

Merry Christmas!
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Re: "Double Whiskey Night"
Reply #4 on: December 25, 2020, 19:20:56
oh..Soundcloud works now

that sounds very good!  :thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup: very clear and nice  ::headphone:: :yes: :yes:


Re: "Double Whiskey Night"
Reply #5 on: December 26, 2020, 02:04:41
I could hear the song here. Great work on this. I like your upper vocal range. Mix is pristine as are all instruments. It's a solid tune.


Re: "Double Whiskey Night"
Reply #6 on: December 26, 2020, 20:37:08
Hi @SteveAlton    I like everything about the song.

Re - any lines to be improved

"What'll it be sir, for you today?

A Double Whiskey Night"

^^^^
That's the only part that bothers me slightly ... just slightly ... it goes by quick.
Why "today"? ... and then song about "night" ?
There must be reason for it I think .... like the guy starts in the bar and it is still the day ... and it all goes by ... into the night.
But could you consider "tonight" ? 

Just thinking out loud here.

Like I said it goes by quick and in some ways it makes sense.


Either way my friend good show! Really good.

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November Sound is based on the Mother, Father & Son musical trio of Melissa, Bill & Will. I'm the father so anything I post will have my wife singing and/or my son playing percussion.


Re: "Double Whiskey Night"
Reply #7 on: December 27, 2020, 04:08:31
 :ok: Very nice vocal performance.  Lyrics tell the story well. You got a winner!

I listened to your song First Love Last Love. It's GRRRRRRRRRRRRRREAT! 
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Re: "Double Whiskey Night"
Reply #8 on: December 27, 2020, 07:13:52
You ask for our ideas for song and lyrics @SteveAlton
Yet you give us no direction what your intentions are with this. My ideas would very much depend on a number of things that you keep hidden.

Is it a first try?
Is it a demo?
Is it autobiographical?
How would you rate the balance between writership and producer/maker of a shining product
You want to keep it small or do you want to conquer the world?
Etc etc etc.

If you have a problem and youíre set on getting really really drunk once? OK, if thatís what you want, do it!
But you donít address the problem, cause youíre too busy believing that the bar maid fancies you and alcohol has a very strange way to show its love. After some time it loves you right back and it wonít leave you.
So youíve got the broken heart problem, the bar maid problem and a problem with alcohol. And a problem paying the rent as a rule.

Personally I would think again if the words are anything to go by.
Kind regards, Gus


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Re: "Double Whiskey Night"
Reply #9 on: December 29, 2020, 22:59:16
Hi @SteveAlton    I like everything about the song.

Re - any lines to be improved

"What'll it be sir, for you today?

A Double Whiskey Night"

^^^^
That's the only part that bothers me slightly ... just slightly ... it goes by quick.
Why "today"? ... and then song about "night" ?
There must be reason for it I think .... like the guy starts in the bar and it is still the day ... and it all goes by ... into the night.
But could you consider "tonight" ? 

Just thinking out loud here.

Like I said it goes by quick and in some ways it makes sense.


Either way my friend good show! Really good.

-11 ::Note::


Thanks for all the input...I have a more recent rendition of this up now


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Re: "Double Whiskey Night"
Reply #10 on: December 29, 2020, 22:59:59
:ok: Very nice vocal performance.  Lyrics tell the story well. You got a winner!


Thanks for the listen & the good word GC Hound


Re: "Double Whiskey Night"
Reply #11 on: December 31, 2020, 11:26:41
very good song, smooth and catchy, and great performance too.

gr. Dan


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Re: "Double Whiskey Night"
Reply #12 on: January 02, 2021, 00:36:00
very good song, smooth and catchy, and great performance too.

gr. Dan

Thanks for the good word & taking the time to comment Dan


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Re: "Double Whiskey Night"
Reply #13 on: January 02, 2021, 01:14:23
Really good song, man.  I really enjoyed that listen!  The production is very good too.  The only thing I think it needs is a double track on the vocals in the chorus for some pop.  All else is on point :thumbsup:



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