• Down to the ground
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Down to the ground
on: May 27, 2020, 18:55:52
I get notes from my girls..this is what I call a POSTCARD SONG. very short and simple I take what they send and write it..see what you think.   all comments are welcome...Thanks Lane
its still n the works so there are some lyric that doesn`t track with the  music,  p.s  its pretty rough...lol

https://soundcloud.com/user-745253707/down-to-the-ground-rough-mix

v1
Do you think of me... when your far away
can you almost hear me calling..out your name.
does love always win the battles,
or are you far to far from home...

chorus:
I will love you...until the Sun will not shine,
until the moon forgets to rise..
until this world stops truning round, and round.
I love you right down to the ground..
v2
Are you ever coming home....or are the wars raging on...
I will leave the light on the mantle...come on in the door.
 I will be here for you
and to make sure that you know....
chorus;
I will love you...until the Sun will not shine,
until the moon forgets to rise..
until this world stops truning round, and round.
I love you right down to the ground..

bridge:
Love is a constant thing that will never die,
count those blessing each day..

chorus;
I will love you...until the Sun will not shine,
until the moon forgets to rise..
until this world stops truning round, and round.
I love you right down to the ground..
tag:
I love you right down to the ground..

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Re: Down to the ground
Reply #1 on: May 27, 2020, 20:29:01
Hey @Lane  !!! I've been thinking about you, man. I love this concept and I love the honest delivery in this simple demo.

Nice modulation there at 2:15....that really works.
"The main thing is to have a gutsy approach....but use your head." Julia Child

 "In a world of robotic conformity, the only originality left in music is the imperfections" Eric Craptone

"Special thanks to Steve Gleason for making me who I am today." Leonard Scaper

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Re: Down to the ground
Reply #2 on: May 28, 2020, 13:53:03
Hi @Lane, good morning, you have made a very beautiful ballad, full of love, of course. Lyrics are very poetic.
I did not know that to live I had to die so many times
https://vimeo.com/onacarom


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Re: Down to the ground
Reply #3 on: May 28, 2020, 18:49:33
Aw @Lane,  totally agree! Full of honest heart, that for sure will melt every woman's heart to the ground, too!  :D Nice, nice.


Re: Down to the ground
Reply #4 on: May 28, 2020, 23:26:18
Lovely piano .. great vocal... great sentiment and words..

 I would love to hear it without the drums... I think it would stand well alone with just piano and vocal...

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Re: Down to the ground
Reply #5 on: May 29, 2020, 03:14:13
That`s a good demo of a warmly delivered postcard song @Lane
I like the way the "I will love you right down to the ground" makes an original thought from the world turning around image.
Only thing I thought needed some work was the bridge- the lyrics seem too familiar to sound like the personal message you are sending out in the rest of the song.
I hope your girls enjoyed this ::heart::

Robert


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Re: Down to the ground
Reply #6 on: May 29, 2020, 03:42:26
Hi all,  @Leonard Scaper  I`m like a bad penny lol..thank you my friend for listening and commenting..Lane

Hello @Mora Amaro La Loba ...hope all is good in your world, and thank you for giving this a listen...I`m a sucker for that
emotional stuff...lol...Lane

Hey  @Mo ,  I just took a few of the words my girls said, Im giving them most of the credit for this  I kept 30%...lol  thanks for your comment.   Lane

Hey @Zedd   I was running along those lines too, I have just the piano, listening to it too, and it sound pretty good..but I`m not singing it. I don`t sing well anymore..if you want to hear the track for piano, let me know I`ll post it.   thanks for stopping and listening...Lane

Hi @robertkc ,  No excuses for that Robert, I`m a terrible  bridge writer...lol I don`t know why it gives me such trouble, its "open range! say what ever you feel..I think I`ve gotten in the habit of just trying to get by that part..thanks for coming by  and commenting.     Lane



Re: Down to the ground
Reply #7 on: May 29, 2020, 13:53:40
@Lane Beautiful and Deep Song  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::


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Re: Down to the ground
Reply #8 on: May 31, 2020, 08:58:23
only half mockingly, I tell aspiring writers that the way to go is to try and write the first 4 sentences in a way that make the reader/listener want to go on.
In short, it must cause curiosity.
And you first 4 do that.
I like this song a lot.
Next one please! @Lane
Kind regards, Gus


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Re: Down to the ground
Reply #9 on: May 31, 2020, 21:45:00
only half mockingly, I tell aspiring writers that the way to go is to try and write the first 4 sentences in a way that make the reader/listener want to go on.
In short, it must cause curiosity.
And you first 4 do that.
I like this song a lot.
Next one please! @Lane
Kind regards, Gus

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there is truth in that statement, Always heard, get right to the heart of it...don`t bore people..sometimes I think people create
Video, add-on`s to help with that, and to help with the story. I know I do. add-on`s for emotion, political, humanity.
But I never did think straight..thats just me.  Thanks for giving it a listen.    Lane








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Re: Down to the ground
Reply #10 on: June 20, 2020, 22:21:47
Awesome  lyrics man.  Very poetic. My kind of stuff :)



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