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Fall Back Together
on: October 09, 2019, 22:45:58
Hi all, Happy October!

Struggling a bit with the verses of this one (vocally, melodically etc) so would love any suggestions - might be best to start at 0:33 as that's when the pre-chorus starts if you want to skip the dodgy verses!

Also looking for thoughts on the pre-chorus and chorus please in terms of melody, lyrics, structure and catch-ness.

As always, production quality is not great, although I tried experimenting with a midi beat and adding vocals.

https://soundcloud.com/alexxxiii/fall-back-together

Verses:
It was a Tuesday, when you caught my eye
I smiled all the way back home
we were reckless and I fell for you so fast
I just couldn't help myself

(0:33)
I wish I didn't like you like I do
Wish I could be like you play it cool
Wish you weren't so damn hard to leave
and maybe I should say alright that's it
going to draw a line under all this
you can watch me go find somebody new
they won't be you

Oh I wish I didn't crave your lips
I didn't miss your kiss when it's late and I feel like missing you
and oh my god how did the even start
it's like we fall apart just so we can go back and fall back together again

The storm clears and I can see it now
you're saying we're through the worst
and it was a blue day when we said goodbye
I've never felt pain like it

I wish I didn't like you like I do
Wish I could be like you play it cool
Wish you weren't so damn hard to leave
and maybe I should say alright that's it
going to draw a line under all this
so you can go and find somebody new
I hope you

Oh I wish I didn't crave your lips
(I didn't) miss your kiss when it's late and I feel like missing you
and oh my gosh how did it even start
(it's like we) fall apart just so we can go back and fall back together again


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Re: Fall Back Together
Reply #1 on: October 10, 2019, 21:48:36
@Alex  :thumbsup: nothing wrong at all
a great song  :ok: :yes: :yes: :yes:
it sounds good to me, the vocals and vocal melody are cool  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::

awesome songwriting  ::thumb::
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Re: Fall Back Together
Reply #2 on: October 10, 2019, 22:16:24
I honestly think that this song could be a mass market hit exactly as it is structured. Seriously. Everything about it catches my ear just right and has me wanting to play it again......in fact I think I will....

I absolutely love how you deliver the pre-chorus and the chorus. And the verses work perfectly to set all that up. I really love what you do.....I think I have said that before.

Take this song to a real studio.....or pitch it to somebody who can. This tune is that good. I'll be looking for you when you go out on your first tour.  :)
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Re: Fall Back Together
Reply #3 on: October 11, 2019, 00:42:48
I can only echo Lenny's commentary.  Sounds great, and you need to record it properly.  It's better songwriting than so much of what one hears these days !


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Re: Fall Back Together
Reply #4 on: October 11, 2019, 09:11:46
Hi @Alex ,
                   the real strength of this is the lyric, story-telling. harmonies and vocal delivery. The musical backing is almost immaterial. It engages with the listener and draws them in.

As others have said, find somebody to have a listen. In the old days an A&R man would have snapped this up for a potential single. Now you have to do it yourself. Get it out there and get people to listen to the potential.

Great track

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Re: Fall Back Together
Reply #5 on: October 11, 2019, 11:19:34
THIS IS A GREAT SONG. As I said over on soundcloud: Get this into a studio , record it, and wow!!!
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Re: Fall Back Together
Reply #6 on: October 11, 2019, 22:50:38
Jesus Christ this is amazing @Alex . Do you play live at all? Do you have a youtube?


Re: Fall Back Together
Reply #7 on: October 12, 2019, 02:48:04
Love it . So raw and personal. In my head this is crying out for some violin/fiddle work to uplift it in certain parts of the song although I wouldn't add to many instruments to this as i think it would kill the intimate feeling of your heart felt vocals.


Re: Fall Back Together
Reply #8 on: October 12, 2019, 15:40:35
« Last Edit: October 12, 2019, 15:45:19 by Mora Amaro La Loba »
@Alex

It is a fine song and I like how it begins... although I would sing the melody with more decision, making the syllables that mark a tempo more defined, remember, it is the part that has to make people want to hear the whole song

and when rhythm appears, some desynchronization with guitar and the melody??

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Re: Fall Back Together
Reply #9 on: Yesterday at 03:12:27
Hi @Alex  ..... so Friday night after my gig I get a phone call, okay not really a phone call .... a text ..... a message .....all the way from England ..... telling me to listen to your new song! It's awesome.  :) It has great potential. :)
Point being - people around the world are talking about your song and they want to talk to you about your song. That's really cool! You're doing very well and you should consider joining in on the conversations here.

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Songwriter, Keyboards, Arranger, Producer & Engineer for November Sound

November Sound is based on the Mother, Father & Son musical trio of Melissa, Bill & Will. I'm the father so anything I post will have my wife singing and/or my son playing percussion.


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Re: Fall Back Together
Reply #10 on: Yesterday at 18:27:16

Thank you @Leonard Scaper, @Dutchbeat , @scojada91 for your kind words - really appreciate you listening to it!

Thank you for listening @MrBouzouki - how does this work? I don't really know anyone in music at the moment as I am a law student! Obviously would love any advice about how to approach/get in contact with A&R people?

Thank you @Chris Spruit!

@realkevm -thank you for you words! I do sometimes busk in London and am thinking about doing open mics but currently a full-time masters student so it's a little tricky! I don't have a youtube, only upload on Soundcloud.

@Modestmouse1965/ interesting that you hear strings on this, will think about how I could do this - adding instruments is always my weakness as I like the songwriting process and creating the bare bones of a song. Thank you for listening.

Thank you @Mora Amaro La Loba for your suggestion on clarity of melody and syllables. I am working on this and am aware that I sometimes mumble my words and shy away from the melody as I record my songs at a very early stage often before I have gained complete certainty of the melody and lyrics! There is definite desynchronisation too as I record it without a metronome so it does not perfectly sync when I add rhythm.

Hi @Bill from November Sound , thank you for listening! Amazing that you got a message all the way from England - wow!



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