• Feedback for new song please
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Feedback for new song please
on: January 30, 2017, 10:14:18
Hello everyone! I've just posted a new song to my soundcloud page and would love some feedback  ::heart::

https://soundcloud.com/songwriterlouisem/somethingaboutyou

Thank you!
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Re: Feedback for new song please
Reply #1 on: January 30, 2017, 17:11:08
Hi Louise ( @songwriterlouisem )

wow  :o :o :o :o :o, great vocal !!! (as always)

and very nice songwriting....sounds good
I was expecting some string / violin / cello to come in, and perhaps even some beats kick in towards the end, some more build?

but great this!!!!
me, myself, and Pie


Re: Feedback for new song please
Reply #2 on: January 30, 2017, 17:17:22
Great thank you for that. Yes I have whole produced version in my head for when I have the time! Definitely some drums in there for me too!


Re: Feedback for new song please
Reply #3 on: January 30, 2017, 23:58:28
@songwriterlouisem  I wish your song could get more listens, I think it's a sweet song - piano & vocal, not many songs can stand up to just that.

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Re: Feedback for new song please
Reply #4 on: January 31, 2017, 00:49:29
Ow yes @songwriterlouisem this sound like a promising song when I listen to the demo!
You're a fantastic singer, and the few minor things I noticed about the singing will surely be corrected when you sing the final version. But what a voice.. hello!
I think, just like @Dutchbeat , this song will have more impact when an arrangement builds up tension from somewhere starting in the middle, I think strings, cello, contrabass and even a rhythm section will sound fantastic and dramatic. Keep us posted about the progression!
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Re: Feedback for new song please
Reply #5 on: January 31, 2017, 07:59:39
Thank you so much for your comments I really appreciate it. And apologies for not being more involved in the forum the last month or so, life should go back to normal next month (hopefully!)  :)


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Re: Feedback for new song please
Reply #6 on: January 31, 2017, 08:28:38
 ::heart::
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Re: Feedback for new song please
Reply #7 on: February 02, 2017, 00:11:47
@songwriterlouisem You know, as @vincent_stewart mentions above, it is quite something to hold a song together for 4:15 with just a piano and your voice. You don't even build with backing vocals, or change the register of your voice. Quite something. Kind of like Carole King. Anyways, you clearly have the songwriting licks.



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Re: Feedback for new song please
Reply #8 on: February 02, 2017, 02:09:45
Very nice @songwriterlouisem - I'm in agreement with @Olbigead and @vincent_stewart it really is a captivating song with just you and vocals.

I'm interested in seeing how this develops if you do add other instruments etc. but this version is also pretty special as it is.

cheers


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Re: Feedback for new song please
Reply #9 on: February 02, 2017, 17:08:00
Your voice and the piano makes for a very pleasurable listen. I don't think you need to add a lot more to this.

I'm hearing a subtly sizzling ride cymbal behind this, delicately played as a counterpoint to the piano......maybe some brushes. And cello......

Don't lose this wonderful open feeling that you have now.
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Re: Feedback for new song please
Reply #10 on: February 02, 2017, 17:09:17
Hi @songwriterlouisem,

Works for me  :)  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::

Obviously more instruments will fill out the sound, but the essence of the song is there.

Keep doin' what you're doin'  ::phone::

Later,
Stan
I'm a lyricist seeking music writers to work with.


Re: Feedback for new song please
Reply #11 on: February 02, 2017, 18:39:56
The vocal is clearly the star here. You are a fine singer. Your phrasing and the quality of your voice does a great job of keeping us captivated, but only for so long.  Everything else about the tune is nice - the lyrics are well-structured and the chords and melody are fine - but there's nothing going on that I haven't heard before. The changes and melodies are very standard and the piano playing is simple and accessible (nothing wrong with that), but not particularly memorable.  It's certainly serviceable as a rough draft, but as a demo, the song lacks much of anything to differentiate it from thousands of other songs written in Am on the piano.  This is the kind of song that, at least for me, cries out for an arrangement to make it pop.


Re: Feedback for new song please
Reply #12 on: February 07, 2017, 09:06:09
Hello everyone thank you so much for your constructive feedback it's really appreciated  ::heart::


Re: Feedback for new song please
Reply #13 on: February 07, 2017, 18:30:46
Hi @songwriterlouisem

With just the piano and vocals the sound is very intimate, feels like you're in the room beside me.  Would be cool to have two versions if you're looking to build a bigger arrangement of instruments.  This one, and the other :)


Re: Feedback for new song please
Reply #14 on: February 08, 2017, 13:52:05
Thank you @Dara and thanks for taking the time to listen!



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