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Five Days
on: December 18, 2018, 21:59:02
A bit of a detour for me I guess, been a royal pita to get right and I will probably go back and do some adjustments to the mix once I get some distance to it. @Zedd has (as always) been a great sounding board (I do hope that is the right saying so that I did not accidentally called her an ugly piece of furniture or something. That would be most, eh, unfortunate  ;D )

https://soundcloud.com/jambrains/five-days

FIVE DAYS
I've been up
I've been down
I've been hard to live with
And a joy to have around
I've been good
I've been bad
You could have abandoned me
Thrown away all that we had

But each time you say
You need to get away
I give you a reason to stay

Five days of heaven
Five days of hell
I know that my darkness
Masks my light so well
Five days of reason
Five days of dread
Take my word for it
I meant what I said

I canít drag
myself from my bed
Itís where I hide from my demons
When they get inside my head
But you need to see
And I need to feel
Itís a cycle I go through
But in the end I always heal

But each time I say
I need to get away
You give me a reason to stay

Five days of heaven
Five days of hell
I know that my darkness
Masks my light so well
Five days of reason
Five days of dread
Take my word for it
I meant what I said
Let man's petty nations tear themselves apart
My land's only borders lie around my heart


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Re: Five Days
Reply #1 on: December 19, 2018, 13:35:57
I like this....it is a bit of a departure from things for you, though.

You have a very dense sound going on this one....that's not a bad thing at all. You establish that up front with that piano.
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Re: Five Days
Reply #2 on: December 19, 2018, 16:01:51
Sounds awesome @Jambrains ...  the song, vocals and mix!

I got a  "Lighters up" vibe from it, a stadium kind of feel...  ::thumb::

Liked the mix, very clear, balanced and smooth, and your vocals are splendid... ( Was a little surprised though, in a good way, of the choice of style, but it works for you  :) )


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Re: Five Days
Reply #3 on: December 21, 2018, 18:30:33
@Jambrains Good song - I like the contrast between the  reflective verses and almost anthemic chorus.
Excellent vocals and the big sound works -  ( you didn`t bury the piano  in the mix  :ok:).


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Re: Five Days
Reply #4 on: December 23, 2018, 02:44:23
Hi @Jambrains ,

You've pretty much described my whole life... the split between being able to engage with the world and the days of depression. Even at 65 years old I'm trying to find the balance.  Long ago I came up with the phrase "honor the ebb as much as the flow". Life is like the lungs of the ocean... if we never breath out we'll never breath in. Time must be made for not doing anything.

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Re: Five Days
Reply #5 on: December 23, 2018, 07:27:06
 Itís not my favorite thing to write lyrics about. But it seems like my kind of minority is so small, and getting smaller everyday, that I become an endangered species.

Iím not above it, mind you. Itís just that if I donít want to get out of bed, itís all because of Ella.
And I get the impression, that what keeps you in bed is called something else.
But apart from this, fellow Kitcheners, if you want to write about all this @Jambrains thing, write it like Jambrains.
I like the song as a whole very much though.
Thanks for posting it.
Kind regards, Gus


Re: Five Days
Reply #6 on: December 28, 2018, 19:41:54
I like your song and lyrics describing the world of love of a couple with their angels and devils very well. I like a lot the chorus.

You say that you will surely re-touch the mix ... In my speakers sometimes the piano sounds very strong to me, something that in my opinion does not allow to listen clearly to the other harmonic instruments. Sorry if it is not like that. Anyway, good work.
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Re: Five Days
Reply #7 on: December 28, 2018, 20:18:35
@Jambrains Your song sounds to me a bit like it was taken from a musical, albeit that the lyrics would be a little unusual. The tune sounds happy, but of course the lyric is not quite so. I suspect that you were looking for such awkward duality. A remarkable song, indeed, and I enjoyed listening to it.
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