• Forsaken Love
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Forsaken Love
on: September 17, 2019, 22:34:05
« Last Edit: October 31, 2019, 18:31:10 by Kolohe »
Here's a song about transgression of the heart and family, but with a western setting.
All critiques are welcome........and yes, it needs more verses.
Thanks in advance for listening.

Here's an update.....sound cloud link and lyrics
Thank you @Leonard Scaper  and @SteveAlton
@Mora Amaro La Loba hola! hope you can have a listen now


Forsaken Love

Wild woman rides, six bullets strapped to her side
The children, they don't know
mama's gone to lay daddy in a hole

Forsaken love
Forsaken love

Six years hunting him down
no luck to come until now
Pain and heartache he left behind
mama says at last revenge is mine

Forsaken love
Forsaken love

Mama, mama, when you gonna leave poor daddy alone
Mama, mama, when you gonna leave poor daddy alone
When the pain subsides
When I can't see red in my eyes
Ask forgiveness from God above

And the ground swallows him up
And the ground swallows him up
And the ground swallows him up

https://soundcloud.com/user-32130215/forsaken-love/s-DkO56


Re: Forsaken Love
Reply #1 on: September 18, 2019, 14:10:36
Here's a song about transgression of the heart and family, but with a western setting.
All critiques are welcome........and yes, it needs more verses.
Thanks in advance for listening.

Hi @Kolohe

Sorry but I do not reach to listen to your track...
I did not know that to live I had to die so many times
https://vimeo.com/onacarom


Re: Forsaken Love
Reply #2 on: September 18, 2019, 15:24:24
I did download it, although most folks prefer to listen to a streamed song. Consider a Soundcloud account for more responses.

But I am glad I downloaded. The guitar work is excellent and the vocals are wonderfully emotive.....really the whole song flows beautifully. This is a good listen and a very good song.

I really like the live sound of the room.
"The main thing is to have a gutsy approach....but use your head." Julia Child

 "In a world of robotic conformity, the only originality left in music is the imperfections" Eric Craptone

"Special thanks to Steve Gleason for making me who I am today." Leonard Scaper

Lenny's Tunes: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_music.cfm?bandID=540680

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Re: Forsaken Love
Reply #3 on: September 18, 2019, 23:20:32
@Kolohe - wonderful! Sounding perfect in the room mix. Liking the song as a whole, bits of Fleetwood Mac feel. Didn't know one could upload mp3's directly to the forum. After downloading I could listen to it easily with Audacity.
Cheers!
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Re: Forsaken Love
Reply #4 on: September 19, 2019, 04:29:28
@Mora Amaro La Loba  sorry about the problem downloading, I will get a sound cloud account as @Leonard Scaper  suggested.

 Thank you @Leonard Scaper  for the listen and kind words as well.

@oorlab mp3 file is what I had, still trying to figure out my way around here. Thank you for the listen and response also.


Re: Forsaken Love
Reply #5 on: September 20, 2019, 01:32:52
41 second intro?  Maybe 8-10 seconds....

I would prefer a lyric sheet....Harmonies on this would kill.....

The musical part sounds cool, but I think it is way too early in tune for that...

Just random thoughts....You can do more with this I believe....Guitar sounds great...Vocal timbre fits perfectly


Re: Forsaken Love
Reply #6 on: September 20, 2019, 05:15:50
Here's a song about transgression of the heart and family, but with a western setting.
All critiques are welcome........and yes, it needs more verses.
Thanks in advance for listening.
Hey @Kolohe ... where’ve you been hiding that recording?

Nice work! Guitar and voice well balanced and clean mix...

Yeah... needs another verse 😎



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