• "Give or take" - quickly done demo
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"Give or take" - quickly done demo
on: February 24, 2019, 11:30:16
https://soundcloud.com/oorlab/give-or-take

Quickly done demo. Was toying around with some guitar distortion settings - and this one sort of wrote itself.

Sooner or later,
Give or take.
I'll give it up
Real or fake
I'll shed a tear
wanting you near
but you had to follow
that seductive Apollo.

Here at my end
I was the receiver
of bad bad news
How could I  believe her
the war that was cold
turning hot
I had to pray
to whatever god.

Bombs were falling
the sky was black
there must be a way to get you back


I concluded my busines,
we went separate ways,
lonely nights,
and lonely days.
I still remember
the lock in your eyes,
the only way
to tell truth from lies.

Love was the franchise
and I followed its rules
now I am left here
with cynics and fools.
How could you do that?
Was it your pride?
Where I am now,
there is no place to hide.

Bombs were falling
the sky was black
there must be a way to get you back
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


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Re: "Give or take" - quickly done demo
Reply #1 on: February 24, 2019, 13:47:32
Very good rocker feeling  ::thumb::
But it's a pity that the voice is so loose in volume in the mix  :no:
Congratulations  ::thumb::


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Re: "Give or take" - quickly done demo
Reply #2 on: February 24, 2019, 14:22:09
« Last Edit: February 24, 2019, 14:24:03 by Dutchbeat »
rocking song @oorlab  8) 8) 8) 8)

a bit like the Stones...

great ending too...how you " take the song home"  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::
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Re: "Give or take" - quickly done demo
Reply #3 on: February 24, 2019, 14:49:59
I like this one a lot! That guitar tone has serious authority and that chorus is a real hook.

I really like how the song slips into that instrumental...very nice transition.....love how the bass gets the lead a bit there. Yeah, as @Dutchbeat
,mentioned there great ending, particularly the way the keys take it out.

@Marcus Nalgaber mentioned the vocals.....that is pretty much your signature vocal treatment and I think it stamps all of your songs with a definitive character.
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Re: "Give or take" - quickly done demo
Reply #4 on: February 24, 2019, 15:37:29
Nice tune.  Goes down easy.  Like the instrumentals,  the piano work supports the tune beautifully. Not exactly sure what Marcus is complaining about with the vocal. I like the lead vocal performance, and I have no problem with where it sits in the mix, though every once in a while it punches through too much at the beginning of a phrase.  Maybe that's what he's talking about.   Nothing that a little automation, or clip gain couldn't easily take care of.

I also like the background vocals, but I don't like the way they are mixed.  I think they need a bit of processing, not just to get them to play nice in the mix, but also to make them sound like BVs, and not like the lead singer adding tracks.

Congrats. This is an enjoyable listen.


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Re: "Give or take" - quickly done demo
Reply #5 on: February 24, 2019, 18:48:42
Thanks @Dutchbeat  @M57  @Marcus Nalgaber  @Leonard Scaper  - indeed I was aiming for a Stones / Keith Richards sound. The vocals are nowhere mixed, and that goes for the backing vocals too. So I will rerecord and or automate or limit the vocals.


Re: "Give or take" - quickly done demo
Reply #6 on: February 24, 2019, 20:50:23
Hi @oorlab
I love your lyrics and this "
I still remember
the lock in your eyes,
the only way to tell truth from lies.! Wow, I like it a lot.

The mix could be better, sure, or not, the main thing is that your style is your`s and this is your unmistakable style but maybe the voice could reach another color of presence, why not or why yes? hahaha

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Re: "Give or take" - quickly done demo
Reply #7 on: March 02, 2019, 11:33:46
« Last Edit: March 02, 2019, 11:52:47 by Vera-alx »
Hi, oorlab! I like this song. It's so easy to understand and ....translate into Russian, ( I know, you like В. Высоцкого). God has heard your pray and said       Расслабься [ RAS SLAB SJA ] - relax,
Our boys say these words in such moments.
Smile and sing!   ::e-guitar:: :praise:

Quickly done demo. Was toying around with some guitar distortion settings - and this one sort of wrote itself.

Sooner or later,
Give or take.
Позже иль раньше,¬ Возьмешь иль отдашь,

I'll give it up
Real or fake
Я откажусь, врешь или нет.

I'll shed a tear
wanting you near
Спрячу слезы…хочу быть  с тобой….

but you had to follow
that seductive Apollo.
А. ты идешь ….за  красавцем Апполо.

Here at my end
I was the receiver
of bad bad.
 Все. Это - конец,… Мне больно…..От тяжелых, плохих новостей.

How could I  believe her
the war that was cold
turning hot
Можно ль, верить тебе?  Война, из холодной……стала горячей

I had to pray
to whatever god.
Господи, за что? Научи меня

Bombs were falling
the sky was black
there must be a way to get you back
Падали бомбы….Черно было небо…  Как я верну тебя….


I concluded my busines,
we went separate ways,
lonely nights,
and lonely days.
Все закончилось.,.мы расстались.,….одинокая ночь,
……одинокие дни


I still remember
the lock in your eyes,
the only way
to tell truth from lies.
Я помню……Ты опустила глаза…..И,      этим, ….правду сказала…..

Love was the franchise
and I followed its rules
now I am left here
with cynics and fools.

Как ты могла?
Любовь выбирает ….да, знаю……теперь я – здесь,
с циниками и дураками.


 How could you do that?
Was it your pride?
Где твоя гордость?

Where I am now,
there is no place to hide.
Кто я теперь?  Спрятаться негде.

Bombs were falling
the sky was black
there must be a way to get you back
Падают бомбы…..Чернеет небо … Приходи, я всегда с тобой.( Будем вместе с тобой)

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Sorry, I just translated lyric. Words to sing .... more work together.


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Re: "Give or take" - quickly done demo
Reply #8 on: March 02, 2019, 16:54:52
Hi @oorlab
Suggestion for a change of title?
Nicely done demo.
Kind regards, Gus


Re: "Give or take" - quickly done demo
Reply #9 on: March 03, 2019, 15:41:50

Some lovely lines in this @oorlab


I particularly liked:


"Love was the franchise,
I followed the rules
Now I am left here
With cynics and fools..."


I really like the arrangement - instrumentation and playing.. instrumental break works well.


Great song!


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Re: "Give or take" - quickly done demo
Reply #10 on: March 08, 2019, 12:45:14
Beautiful!   ::heart:: ::heart:: ::heart::
Je hebt zo'n prettig eigen geluid.
I would like to have a cd with your music, I can hear it for hours.
By the way: had ik je al gezegd dat ik dat cd-tje wat ik van jou heb gekregen met veel plezier heb beluisterd, en vast nog vaker zal beluisteren. Het geeft me zo'n heerlijk nostalgisch gevoel. Aan hoe het vroeger bij mij thuis en bij mijn intellectuele familie  was.


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Re: "Give or take" - quickly done demo
Reply #11 on: March 14, 2019, 02:55:35
@oorlab i really like this! Love the music, love the groove. Your chorus is unique and ear-catching and pulls it together. Really cool!!
Do what makes your heart sing :)



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