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good morning this morning
on: March 16, 2019, 15:58:17
I intentionally put this one together to get over a break up.
So please excuse the bitterness.
It's a bit unnerving to exhibit myself this way, I suppose it's what some might call a personal what y' call it, thing.

Feedback most welcome

The link:

https://soundcloud.com/rightly/good-morning-this-morning

The lyrics:


Good Morning This Morning


good morning, this morning
with your hair pressed into your back
your sleepy eyes do kill me with
a blood stained heart attack
could have saw it coming‚
I chose to look the other way
never one for running from
the drama of delay

good morning, this morning

you say wrong, I do right on some
pointless rising curve
incapable of flight yet there‘s no
 finer feathered bird
n‘ I‘ll persuade on all fours
then decline your bold request
it‘s really far too early, ‘got no love
for puppy breath

good morning, this morning
move on, my regards to your sponsor
if he still wants you, move on

open window yawning
there, behind your lovely face
where a gentle snow is falling
as fine as wedding lace
fuss n‘ fight through the night
n‘ we‘re torn apart all day
neither of us winning, let this
be our last embrace

good morning, this morning
move on, take it with you, my love song,
it‘s not a bad one, move on

we could be imaginary friends…
good morning, this morning


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Re: good morning this morning
Reply #1 on: March 17, 2019, 01:23:48
Yeah....you are putting your feelings right out there with this one.  That's what we do as songwriters sometimes, right?

These vocals, btw, sound fantastic. Your use of reverb is just right for this one.
"The main thing is to have a gutsy approach....but use your head." Julia Child

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Re: good morning this morning
Reply #2 on: March 20, 2019, 10:32:06
Yeah....you are putting your feelings right out there with this one.  That's what we do as songwriters sometimes, right?

These vocals, btw, sound fantastic. Your use of reverb is just right for this one.

Thanks Leonard.
I think the music is a bit too quiet here.
Vocals are too loud.
I think, being tired of working on the song I wanted to have done with it. 
Oh well, another lesson learned.


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Re: good morning this morning
Reply #3 on: March 20, 2019, 15:46:35
Vocals are too loud.

I'm not so sure about that. I guess it depends on your intent. I like how the vocals are absolutely up front for this particular production....and how the music flows along behind them This has your unique vocal style standing out nicely and also highlights your vocal treatment, which I really like in this one.

This song gives me an image of a dark night club with you spotlighted on the stage and the musicians in the semi-darkness behind you.


Re: good morning this morning
Reply #4 on: March 21, 2019, 11:44:12
Hello @Rightly...just wanted to say I think your lyrics are so clever, vivid, and raw. I love them. And like @Leonard Scaper stated, I like your vocals up front like that too. Great writing.
Do what makes your heart sing :)



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