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How good is this?
on: September 12, 2015, 18:31:04
So, I'm now collabing with a singer to add vocals into our song and i wrote some lyrics for the song, but i'm not sure about them and want to hear what do you guys think about it since i'm not really pretentious about it. :)

The song is here: https://soundcloud.com/knockofftheworld/velvele-voyage-to-sunset

The lyrics i wrote:

Stayed here too long, now we gotta run
I've been a good son, my task is done
Embrace the freedom, There is room for everyone
Follow the dream and go by the sun

Keep looking for me, soon you will know
While i read this i might be gone
Don't be upset, just don't forget
Following the dream, my voyage to sunset

Fly above the clouds, gaze below the ground
Sing this song but make no sound
Don't have a home, I'm always on the run
Don't stay in the dark, just go by the sun

Keep looking for me, soon you will know
While i read this i might be gone
Don't be upset, just don't forget
Following the dream, my voyage to sunset


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Re: How good is this?
Reply #1 on: September 12, 2015, 19:09:01
very cool lyrics

and they flow well in my opinion

and nice to see how you are developing this song....keep us posted.....

i think the lyrics are super
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Re: How good is this?
Reply #2 on: September 12, 2015, 20:04:29
Oh thank you DB :D i feel relaxed now, good to know that they don't sound silly as i thought.



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