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I Liked You Better in My Thoughts
on: May 31, 2017, 19:44:23
Hey guys

This is actually a revised version of the first song I ever wrote (years ago).
Would love to get some feedback!

https://soundcloud.com/andrew-frankel/prefrontal-nudity-i-liked-you-better-in-my-thoughts

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Re: I Liked You Better in My Thoughts
Reply #1 on: May 31, 2017, 21:22:51
I love it!

Love the old school feel with the vocal right out front like that and the muted brass behind. You definitely have some style!

Lyrics....please?  8)
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Re: I Liked You Better in My Thoughts
Reply #2 on: May 31, 2017, 23:09:47
Hey thanks! Definitely going for 'old school'

And since you asked so nicely--

I liked you better in my thoughts
Before we met, before we fought
Imagined you were smart and kind
Took my best shot and kept an open mind
You sure enjoyed the love you got
Meant for someone that youíre clearly not
Itís my mistake; I fired too soon
The starlight makes it tough to hit the moon
Reflecting over several shots
I like you better in my thoughts

I would have liked to like you more
Starred as the fool and girl next door
Clouds of pre-fontal nudity
Obscured the person right in front of me
When that night came, you just lay there
I guess Iím always making up your share
Bull charging past a matador (Toro!)
I might have liked to like you more


   The dream of loveís enough to get me out of bed
   When Iím greeted by another lonesome day
   Out on the street, before we meet
   Weíve already ended things in some cafť 
   And both go on our way

The memories return in swarms
Two misinformed and intertwining forms
But Iím not mad, Iím doing great
I'm sure Iíll find someone whoís worth the wait
Till she shows up Iíll think of you
Forget the faults and what you put me through
In daydreams where you canít stop me
Iíll always love the girl youíll never be
Just perfect days/daze and pleasant spots
I like you better in my thoughts


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Re: I Liked You Better in My Thoughts
Reply #3 on: June 01, 2017, 01:56:11
Thanks @Rewboat ....aha! Toro! is what you said there.

These are excellent lyrics and well delivered.


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Re: I Liked You Better in My Thoughts
Reply #4 on: June 01, 2017, 08:07:19
Appreciate you saying so- the delivery takes as much work as the writing does


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Re: I Liked You Better in My Thoughts
Reply #5 on: June 02, 2017, 08:50:44
Very nice jazz feel to this song @Rewboat.

I do like how the vocal comes across - it sounds like a live performance in a small club. I can almost hear the glasses clinking  :)

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Re: I Liked You Better in My Thoughts
Reply #6 on: June 02, 2017, 19:17:04
Thanks @Jurgen  I like that

I'm usually guilty of over-treating my voice and that tends to give the songs a very "heady" feel. For this one, I wanted to reflect the lyrics by having the vocals sound natural as though spoken and not just thought.



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