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Innocent Son
on: May 09, 2020, 23:03:43
« Last Edit: May 10, 2020, 21:06:01 by Polestar »
I wrote this as a lullaby for my new born son (Now nearly five years old). Its about the wonder of being a father for the first time. I'm sure some of you dads can relate to this!


https://soundcloud.com/jameswalter-150761382/innocentson

Innocent Son

You came to this world in milk stained cloths
And your folds of joy I love the most
Your comical delight in places we ignore
Beauty in the bland and between the lines

Your midnight call
wakes our bones
but its ok, its ok, its ok

Spinning wheels of time
Deliver you in Rhyme
Whole and as one, my innocent son

White tone teeth
Pure unflinching grin
My whimsical machine
Consumes my life

Your midnight call
shakes our bones
But it ok, its ok, its ok

And you're mine and your near, and your mine, there's no fear, only love, only love, only love
And its ok, its ok, its ok, its ok,

And you're mine and your near, and your mine, there's no fear, only love, only love, only love
And its ok, its ok, its ok, its ok,
 




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Re: Innocent Son - a song for dads
Reply #1 on: May 10, 2020, 16:37:47
hi @Polestar , beautiful song  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone:: :yes: :yes: :yes: :yes:

fantastic!  :thumbsup: :thumbsup:
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Re: Innocent Son - a song for dads
Reply #2 on: May 10, 2020, 21:06:42
hi @Polestar , beautiful song  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone:: :yes: :yes: :yes: :yes:

fantastic!  :thumbsup: :thumbsup:

Thanks Dutchbeat, appreciated!


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Re: Innocent Son
Reply #3 on: May 11, 2020, 14:48:34
Fabulous production.
Consistently strong vocals.
Unusual song, I like that!


Re: Innocent Son
Reply #4 on: May 11, 2020, 21:12:50
I like the sound of that guitar....that's what makes this song unique to me as @Rightly mentioned. And man, those vocals are so....authentic.

Cool little interlude at around 2:20 and love how you build out of it with the bass.

Just a wonderful tune @Polestar .
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Re: Innocent Son
Reply #5 on: May 11, 2020, 22:12:22
Fabulous production.
Consistently strong vocals.
Unusual song, I like that!


@Rightly some very kind comments, thanks for taking the time to listen. Its amazing what you can do on a dodgy old laptop!


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Re: Innocent Son
Reply #6 on: May 11, 2020, 22:14:25
I like the sound of that guitar....that's what makes this song unique to me as @Rightly mentioned. And man, those vocals are so....authentic.

Cool little interlude at around 2:20 and love how you build out of it with the bass.

Just a wonderful tune @Polestar .

Thanks Leonard for your kind words and for taking the time to listen to my track  ::thumb::


Re: Innocent Son
Reply #7 on: May 12, 2020, 03:39:35
Nice work @Polestar  !  :ok:   Nice little details throughout, really. Very good!
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November Sound is based on the Mother, Father & Son musical trio of Melissa, Bill & Will. I'm the father so anything I post will have my wife singing and/or my son playing percussion.


Re: Innocent Son
Reply #8 on: May 13, 2020, 08:53:03
Love the atmosphere......very unusual, and original. Love the thought provoking lyric.
Interesting melody and vocal performance.
Good stuff.......Kudos!
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Re: Innocent Son
Reply #9 on: May 13, 2020, 09:17:01
All children's songs are built on repetition. I know that.
But this is a little too repetitive for my taste.
Having said that, we have all the critique behind us.

Love the song, love the rendition, let's see what he's got to say about it when he's 13 or so.
And by then you will grin unflinchingly. @Polestar 
Kind regards, Gus


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Re: Innocent Son
Reply #10 on: May 13, 2020, 10:03:01
I appreciate the feedback, thanks for listening.



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