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It Hurts
on: January 12, 2020, 21:43:57
Hi guys, this song is a song that I've been working on for some years now and now I've done the demo I am asking for some feedback.

https://soundcloud.com/irwin-abrigo/it-hurts


IT HURTS

Written & Produced by Irwin Abrigo
Vocals & All Vocals arrangement by Heather Rachael
©2020 Irwin Abrigo (Member Of BMI)

(VERSE 1)

I plan, to live , my whole life through
With me, and you, yes this is true
I remember you saying
Youíd wanted the same thing too
we met, I had wanted
Your love to be devoted

Snow is falling, Iím at home
It is cold, Iím alone
Against my window thereís a storm
And itís coming on strong

(CHORUS)
Outside, I can hear
Hear the sound of the wind, blowing
Wishing, Lying in my bed, Iím pretending
Pretending you were near
Just to think youíre not here it hurts
Just to think youíre not here it hurts
Just to think youíre not here it... hurts

(VERSE 2)
Never had, I ask, you for too much
So how can you make me feel sad?
I only ask for your touch
You know that youíre all that I had
I need your, hugs and kisses
I need you more than riches

I dim the lights, through the night
And this is, wishful thinking
Like the wind that blows through my door
I hope youíll come walking

(CHORUS)
Outside, I can hear
Hear the sound of the wind, blowing
Wishing, Lying in my bed, Iím pretending
Pretending you were near
Just to think youíre not here it hurts
Just to think youíre not here it hurts
Just to think youíre not here it, hurts

(BRIDGE)
Just to think, that youíd leave
Is what I canít believe
You left me with a broken heart
Pretending you were here

(Out)
Just to think youíre not here it hurts
Just to think youíre not here it hurts
Just to think youíre not h


Re: It Hurts
Reply #1 on: January 13, 2020, 17:09:30
@irwin
It's a very nice song! and the voice of @Heather Rachel fits good in!!! I only can say you that about 1'40 there is a change of rhythm that breaks the tempo?
Mora
I did not know that to live I had to die so many times
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Re: It Hurts
Reply #2 on: January 20, 2020, 14:48:24
@irwin
It's a very nice song! and the voice of @Heather Rachel fits good in!!! I only can say you that about 1'40 there is a change of rhythm that breaks the tempo?
Mora
Thank you Mora, for pointing out (1'40 there is a change of rhythm that breaks the tempo?) I didn't listen again and I got it.

I do appreciate having you leaving a comment about my song.

Irwin
 


Re: It Hurts
Reply #3 on: January 20, 2020, 17:06:55
Here are my suggestions as they come to me.  The beginning seems sparse for a pop song.   Synth bass and percussion feel very programmed.  Not human.  The bass line is a little fun.  The vocals are nice. but rather bland  The  instrumental section 1:37 to 1:52 seems quite long for a pop song.  My overall impression it needs something more in terms of instrumentation.   The beat is good.


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Reply #4 on: February 11, 2020, 15:45:24
Here are my suggestions as they come to me.  The beginning seems sparse for a pop song.   Synth bass and percussion feel very programmed.  Not human.  The bass line is a little fun.  The vocals are nice. but rather bland  The  instrumental section 1:37 to 1:52 seems quite long for a pop song.  My overall impression it needs something more in terms of instrumentation.   The beat is good.

Hi, Thanks very much for those suggestions I do appreciate then a lot. Synth bass and percussion yes, they had all been programmed. I am using FL Studio.

Irwin



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