• Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
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I had ended up in a Kafka-esque situation there that needed resolving, so that is what I did today. Some of you, and especially @oorlab, will know what the idea behind it must be. I hope you like what I did with it.

https://soundcloud.com/pleudoniem/keep-off-the-grass
Keep off the Grass

I’d been mowing the lawn
Pushing pain, toil and traffic
To a stubborn device
Gently topping the blades
In a desperate try
To shear a track in the field
That could offer a way
And drop them a line

I must have been working too long
For I just had to learn
That the grass would return
When all left to itself

Shall I keep off the grass
Like a common deserter
What do I care
If it never gets cut?
Shall I keep off the grass
Leave the flowers undone
But I don’t think they’ll bud
Unattended

I went back for the point
Where I’d started my lane
Ignited the tool
And I started again
When a man standing by
Cast a rock in the blades
Made it stop with a bang
And smiled profusely

I must have been working too long
For I just had to learn
That the man would return
For as long as I worked
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Re: Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
Reply #1 on: October 18, 2019, 22:28:57
This is really fantastic stuff @Pleudoniem !!!! I absolutley love the way this tune moves....the interplay between the drums and the guitar is perfect. I'll ask you the same question you asked me.......about that bass.  ;)

Very cool when those keys come in then there is suddenly those tom hits off to the side.

Great song, man! Great production.
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Re: Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
Reply #2 on: October 18, 2019, 22:33:09
That base line! I love hearing people who do something completely different to my style as it is just so inspiring to me. Really impressive piece - really like your voice at 0:43 and particularly the vibrato at 0:46 :)


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Re: Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
Reply #3 on: October 18, 2019, 22:41:09
@Leonard Scaper @Alex  Thank you :) That bass is a Fender P-Bass, so an actual bass guitar and played by my willing fingertips. The bass amplifier you hear is a replica of Jaco Pastorius' Big Bottom 360, which is quite punchy and round. I didn't use the fuzz that he liked to use a lot though.


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Re: Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
Reply #4 on: October 19, 2019, 10:45:45
So....not only a real bass but amped as well. THAT'S why that bass line is so punchy and sweet sounding.

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Re: Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
Reply #5 on: October 19, 2019, 17:41:20
@Leonard Scaper Suffice to say that - but I don't suppose I'd be telling you anything new here - that the bass itself can also have a different character. My Rickenbacker 4003, for instance, sounds quite different from the P-Bass and the J-Bass. If I'd used one of the others, the 'feel' on the song would have been different. I tend to disagree with people who say that a bass is a bass is a bass.


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Re: Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
Reply #6 on: October 19, 2019, 18:56:25
Wow @Pleudoniem .....that is a serious collection of bass guitars. In the mid 60's I was playing a Silvertone bass through a Silvertone bass amp with six 10" speakers. Yeah. Imagine how that sounded in my father's garage on the bass line of "We Gotta Get Outta This Place" by The Animals.

Then in the 70's I played a jazz bass in a three piece cover band when I wasn't blowing on a harmonica with the blues/rock band. My Gibson tone is just right for what I'm doing now.

We better be careful with all this gear talk, man.....the mods will banish us to The Gear Page....or worse yet.......Gearslutz.  ;D


Re: Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
Reply #7 on: October 20, 2019, 10:28:26
Well sounding new @Pleudoniem track -has the vintage anger-vibe - which reminds me of an earlier track like
https://soundcloud.com/pleudoniem/dead-like-the-moon.
Music-mix wise, as a personal note, I found the movement of certain sounds in the stereo field after 1.010 somewhat distracting, on headphones.

How did you start the writing process for this song?
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Re: Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
Reply #8 on: October 20, 2019, 14:15:18
@oorlab Ok, I have removed the panning from one of the filters. Any better now?

How did I start the writing? Well, by trying out a pattern on the drumkit, actually. I had always held the sticks with a so called American grip, but I am developing a grip that looks more like the traditional grip. I find riffing a different experience when I do this, and if it is often used in jazz, why shouldn't I try to adopt it? So that is the right hand with the American grip, and the left one with the handpalm kissing the sky.

I just don't place the stick too far inbetween my ring and middle finger, because that causes blisters. I rest it on the fingertips of these two fingers, so that it won't slip. That works quite nicely.

But I think you were wondering about the lyric? Well, I was looking for a situation in which endless work yields little return, and which is being obstructed. I think you know what I am hinting at here. Anyway, that idea reminded me of Kafka. I don't know why exactly, but then the title 'Leaves of Grass' (Walt Whitman) just sprang up like a fly amanita, and I decided to use that.


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Re: Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
Reply #9 on: October 20, 2019, 14:38:56
Don’t know if you are familiar with the ESP’ records catalogue.
They released quite a lot of very eccentric material and I still have a lot of their vinyl.
Don’t step on the grass, Sam, but more than that your gem wouldn’t be out of place in the ESP’ tradition.
Love it my friend.
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Re: Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
Reply #10 on: October 20, 2019, 22:29:58
Hola @Pleudoniem

What a show! What a picture !!! Kafka would be very proud if he heard this song ... I love the idea, that drummer with his insistence for being there giving the bass and guitar replica ... I loved the change that appears after 2'30 approx. ... Congratulations!!!
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Re: Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
Reply #11 on: October 20, 2019, 22:39:56
@Mora Amaro La Loba I think that Kafka would change me into a beetle if he heard this, then I could eat up the grass  ;D


Re: Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
Reply #12 on: October 20, 2019, 23:02:30
@oorlab Ok, I have removed the panning from one of the filters. Any better now?
@Pleudoniem   - yes!

by trying out a pattern on the drumkit, actually. I had always held the sticks with a so called American grip
Interesting - The American Grip - will read more about that - here https://creativedrumming.wordpress.com/tag/american-grip/.

@oorlab But I think you were wondering about the lyric?

Well yes, but also the moment when you decided that this pattern would have this lyric, did you then make the music around the lyrics, ar did you write the lyrics following the music, or do you have other strategies?


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Re: Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
Reply #13 on: October 21, 2019, 01:40:08
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@oorlab I usually compose the music first, and when the atmosphere is there, I write a lyric to it. Sometimes I have a broad idea of the subject, but a ready-to-use lyric before the music is rare.

The original pattern was in midi, so I could try out different drum kits and give it a more whip-like snare, which I though might work well. I found a nicely suitable one for it in BFD Drummer, so the original pattern, which was composed in Superior Drummer, changed to a BFD drumset.


Re: Keep off the Grass, song about a Kafka-esque situation.
Reply #14 on: October 21, 2019, 14:58:59
 Oh I see you don't like this job  ;D Not my favorite chore either. If I could use one word for this it would be creative. You can take something mundane like mowing the lawn and infuse another dimension into it!

I'll never look at cutting the grass the same way again.



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