Killer

Hey guys

We have just made our first ever music video, which is to a song called ?Killer?.

The song is allegorical about lust, temptation and adultery, but the video treats it more literally. We made it out of no financial budget whatsoever and it was filmed at a few locations around Leeds in England.

Hope you enjoy!



Lyrics

She licks her lips and moves in for the kill
My blood boils alright and it?s about to spill
She can really move those snake hips, she points them right at me
Her look is real intent and that?s plain to see

She?s got trouble written over her and I can?t resist
But I?m just her prey, a tick off her list

She locks me in
And throws away the key
It?s just a matter of time
Before she murders?

Her cherry red lipstick, the smell of leather boots
I?m a dead man now, I bite the forbidden fruit
I stare into her eyes, her call draws me in
She bites on my lip, this is the original sin

And it?s over now and I can?t turn back
My head explodes and my spirit cracks

Her cherry red lipstick
I?m a dead man now

This is Awesome  !!!!!

the song, the vocals, the mix and the video are all perfect!!!!! Amazing this, i am very impressed

sounds and look like you guys are an established top act, video also seems to be of extreme good quality

amazing how much talent has gathered at our kitchen already 


watch out......

Incoming......Karma points!!!!!!!
i will give this a thumps up on youtube

Thanks DB. Much appreciated!

You're right - there's loads of talent on here.

Fenton!! Guys I'm a fan! What a wonderful production! I already heard this one on SoundCloud before.
I like the energy in the song. Beautiful voice, great drumming, bassing and guitarring.
Fantastic videoclip, unbelievable you did that without budget.
I'm impressed!!! Thanks for sharing! MM

Nice guys, I like the guitar picking in the chorus, nice ambient fell, gives the chorus it's own identity. Congrats on the vid 

Yeah...nice guitar sound and good energy.....

My 2 cents: I could be wrong but if it were me I would change all the pronouns in  the song, from she and her to YOU

You lick your lips and move in for the kill
My blood boils alright and it?s about to spill
You can really move those snake hips, You point them right at me
Your look is real intent and that?s plain to see

The more I listen to songs posted on this forum, the more I realise how far I have to go in terms of musicianship and production!  But, I do have opinions still - mostly about lyrics, since I find that it's the lyrics that can really create the feel of a song.  On that note, I agree with Jrogan about maybe experimenting with the pronoun shift to give it more immediacy and make it personal - I think that would even create that clausterphobic discomfort of being too close and about to make that fatal mistake.

I think for that purposes, I'd suggest a couple of really small changes to the lyrics - punches them to the point, adds to the urgency, and compliments the funky beat.

Here goes:

She licks her lips and moves in for the kill
My blood boils alright and it?s about to spill
She can really move those snake hips.  Points them right at me
Her look: pure intent.  That?s plain to see

She?s got trouble written all over.
I can?t resist

Starting to feel like prey, a tick off her list

(p.s.: love the cliffhanger on that first chorus!)