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Kingdom Come
on: June 30, 2016, 22:26:32
Hey guys,

This is a track I wrote with a mate of mine a few months ago from the audiobus forum called Marcel. (iOS based) He wrote and played all of the backing track except the strings and I did lyrics/melody/strings and sang.Its the second song we've done together and both times have been a blast.

Any thoughts whatsoever are appreciated.Thanks guys
Leo  ;D

https://soundcloud.com/leo-b-5/kingdom-come

Kingdom Come

She found me washed up on the shore
A stranger lost,a shipwrecked soul
The life I thought I'd built on stone
Was drowning in the sand

Her eyes were warm and lighthouse bright
Her lips gave me the kiss of life
The words she spoke so musical
I longed to understand

Babylon,I see no hell fire here?
My kingdom come is in her eyes

My sweet Amalie
If we only have this life your love is all I need
For so long I was just a skipping stone
Trying to stay afloat
But you gave land to me
And so I stay here
At your humble throne
My kingdom come

She took me home through city walls
And lit a fire to warm my bones
And when she smiled a truth was known
I'd never be the same

Babylon,a revelation true
My kingdom come
She put me back together


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Re: Kingdom Come
Reply #1 on: June 30, 2016, 22:40:51
Hi bro,

Really loved it! Love that"My sweet Amalie..." Those vocals are so cool!
Over liked the solo guitar ! I like them sweet like this...

Great  ::Hoss::
"Dreams can't happen if you don' do anything for"


Re: Kingdom Come
Reply #2 on: June 30, 2016, 23:14:32
very nice guitar sound! I like it alot.
Sounds pretty polished all round!


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Re: Kingdom Come
Reply #3 on: July 01, 2016, 00:03:47
Hi Leo @LostBoy ,

Thanks for sharing! Man, how you can sing... goosebumps/chicken skin here.
Did you record this all by yourself? Are you playing the guitar as well yourself?

What a beautiful song!
My only comments would be on the production, to me the different layers don't seem
to reside in the same 'space', and I'd choose another approach to the levels of the
individual tracks (the drums for example)  ;)
If you like I'd love to give it a mix-in-one-hour treatment, just to give you an
idea of how I 'hear' your song. Let me know if you'd appreciate that.
If so, my holidays just started so I can't be sure when I find a spare hour, but I
will in the end  ;)

Wel done, respect for this work!!
MM
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I'm proud of this track, check it out! https://soundcloud.com/martimedia/dreams


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Re: Kingdom Come
Reply #4 on: July 01, 2016, 00:25:17
« Last Edit: July 01, 2016, 00:40:27 by LostBoy »
Hi guys,

Thanks very much for your comments @Alann,@jameshargreaves and @MartiMedia haha! God no! That's not me on the guitar.Thats all Marcel! I can't play guitar man.I do mess around on the UKE but that's it.Thanks for your feedback and I agree with you actually about the mix.Thats very kind of you to offer mate and I would take you up on it but this song is three months old and I needed space on my iPad (that's a downside of working on a 32 gb device) so I deleted the project a few weeks ago!! :o Thanks again for the offer mate,I've still got lots to learn about mixing so any help I can get il take!  ::thumb::


Re: Kingdom Come
Reply #5 on: July 01, 2016, 07:54:33
Well like I said on SC Great singing and lovely song. Great feel in your singing. Good production as well.

Not much more to add actually. Just Great.

Very well done.

BdK

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Re: Kingdom Come
Reply #6 on: July 01, 2016, 08:53:38
hi @LostBoy

Not much to add other than your vocals are really good - you have a very pure voice and it has a nice tone to it.

The backing track is good but I'd like a bit more edge or crunch to it - it's almost to clean if that makes sense.

cheers

Jurgen


Re: Kingdom Come
Reply #7 on: July 01, 2016, 11:52:12
I listed to this on SC the other day LB  :) It actually came on after I'd listened to another song, and I was blown away  ::thumb::

It's a fantastic collab, and I love, love love your vocals :) Some brilliant lyrics in there ::) I love this one, "The life I thought I'd built on stone

Was drowning in the sand" 8)  I will listen to this many times over  ::Suzy::



Re: Kingdom Come
Reply #8 on: July 01, 2016, 12:26:13
I'm with @crystalsuzy on this one @LostBoy.. Gorgeous song, lovely lyrics, great collab and your vocals are really something else.. 

I too will be listening again.. Simply beautiful.....


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Re: Kingdom Come
Reply #9 on: July 01, 2016, 17:09:52
For a Lost Boy, you really seem to know what you are doing, Lostboy!

this sounds very good, your singing is very nice, and the singing melody develops very nicely
a very strong song in my opinion

very good, some more karma points from me incoming (watch out)
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Re: Kingdom Come
Reply #10 on: July 01, 2016, 17:49:02
Ah,thanks guys!  ;D (@bdk,@jurgen,@crystalsuzy,@Zedd and @IMBMdutchbeat) I'm glad you like the song so much.This was a very personal lyric for me and I'm glad it's gone down so well.

@MartiMedia hey man,I got a bit confused earlier in my reply to you.Normally I mix my own songs top to bottom,which I still have tonnes to learn.However on this track Marcel did 99% of the music and just gave me the completed mixed backing track in one stereo file.I just added my vocal and the strings and tried to mix those two tracks best I could with the other music.Personally I think I mixed the strings a little quiet,vocals a little loud in places and Marcels drums are buried in the mix...sigh,it's all good though,you live and learn.Thanks again for your offer though.  ;D



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Re: Kingdom Come
Reply #11 on: July 02, 2016, 00:49:52
Ow yes @LostBoy , it's all about trying and learning , that's the best thing in life imo. Great to hear you took this approach and if you need help just shout, we'll be there for you.
Cheers!
MM
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Re: Kingdom Come
Reply #12 on: July 02, 2016, 06:41:44
@LostBoy Vocals steal the show here. For some reason I hear a little Daryl Hall influence in your delivery. There is a smooth soulfulness to your sound. I mean, it's not like you are recording through million dollar gear, yet the quality of your voice is apparent.
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Re: Kingdom Come
Reply #13 on: July 03, 2016, 21:23:37
@cosignsessions Hey thanks man,that's a huge compliment regarding Daryl Hall! My mum in law is cousins with John Oates so that's quite funny that you should mention his wing man!  ;D I appreciate all the encouragement that I get on here mate so thanks a lot.

Leo   ;D


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Re: Kingdom Come
Reply #14 on: July 05, 2016, 04:24:30
awesome voice and good words, just found the background music a wee bit murky, I feel because your voice is so good on this the music needs to be way crispier if you know what i mean ::thumb::



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