• Leave - new song
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Leave - new song
on: December 01, 2019, 12:21:37
Hi! This is a song I wrote and recorded a few days ago in my bedroom, would love some feedback :)

https://soundcloud.com/sarahlawrencemusic/leave

Lyrics:

i was born underwater
i am made of the sea
iím a highway manís daughter
and he taught me how to speak

iím a hard pill to swallow
iím cold and i am cruel
and as sure as my sorrow
i have waited for you

lover, donít leave
lover, donít put this down
not now, when you were just learning to read
let me show you how
to draw me out

i was born in the winter
and it stayed all my life
and i learned how to whisper
the same way i learned to fly
learned iím scared to try

lover, donít leave
lover, donít put this down
not now, when you were just learning to read
let me show you how
to draw me out
lover, donít leave
lover, donít let this go
you donít know the half of what i can be
let me show you how
to draw me out

i want you more than i show
i want you more than you could know

lover, donít leave
lover, donít put this down
not now, when you were just learning to read
let me show you how
to draw me out
lover, donít leave
lover, iím so alone
you donít know the half of what i can be
let me show you how
to draw me out


Re: Leave - new song
Reply #1 on: December 01, 2019, 17:35:21
Hi @sarahlawrence17

All I can say is "delicacy"!!!

Welcome to this site  ::heart::
I did not know that to live I had to die so many times
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Re: Leave - new song
Reply #2 on: December 01, 2019, 17:54:56
wow, what a beautiful song @sarahlawrence17  :thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup:
very beautiful music, great voices  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::

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Re: Leave - new song
Reply #3 on: December 02, 2019, 12:18:39
Thank you so much for listening and being so kind!! Glad you liked it :)


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Re: Leave - new song
Reply #4 on: December 02, 2019, 12:43:35
Sounds beautiful! :)


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Re: Leave - new song
Reply #5 on: December 02, 2019, 17:24:18
Beautiful song and performance @sarahlawrence17 . Very nice recording and mix as well.

There is just so much to like about this production from the sound of that acoustic guitar to your wonderfully emotive vocals. I really like how you throw that stripped down first verse back in at the end to take the song out.

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Re: Leave - new song
Reply #6 on: December 03, 2019, 09:54:59
@Leonard Scaper , whose English is far better than mine, as usual angled up the essence (for me):
'I really like how you throw that stripped down first verse back in at the end to take the song out.'

We can never have enough kind voiced young people like you here in the Kitchen.
And I hope you will tell us how you do your magic.
Apart from repeating the first verse of course.

Tonight, I'll be on my grand dad bar stool in the Amsterdam musicians cafť with younger people asking all kind of things about song writing. Little do they know you are going to teach us.

Welcome, and I hope you like it here.
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Re: Leave - new song
Reply #7 on: December 05, 2019, 11:37:10
Jesus Christ you're really talented. Your voice is phenomenal, the tone and the way you hit those higher notes...lovely sounding acoustic guitar. It's your vocal delivery that really carries this song, It's real, authentic and emotional.


Re: Leave - new song
Reply #8 on: December 06, 2019, 12:37:24
 ::thumb::wow love it, so well written and delivered. Beautiful voice and beutifully well sung.
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