• Love In The Month Of May (We Were Free)
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Love In The Month Of May (We Were Free)
on: April 30, 2014, 00:51:23
This is my new song for the season. It took me so long to arrange/record/mix that I don't think I ever want to hear it again. But i would appreciate if you would listen to it for me, and tell me if the contrast between the verse's and chorus are too jarring? and any other comments you have would be welcome also.

Good luck

"In the Spring a young man's fancy lightly turns to thoughts of love."
                                                                              Alfred, Lord Tennyson

https://soundcloud.com/brendanlawless/love-in-the-month-of-may-we-were-free

We were free / Love in the month of May


Young Love Treasured days
Young love, In so many ways
We were free then
We were free then

Soft lips, I wanted you so much
Soft lips, tingles when we touched
we were free then
we were free then

summer seemed to last the whole year through
and looking back I wonder if we knew
we were free
we were free

Young love, treasured days
Young love, never fades
Young love, treasured days
Young love in the month of May


Long talks, on the telephone
Long walks, just to be alone
We were free then
We were free then

I would hold you in a warm embrace
and kiss your lips as my hands held your face
we were free
we were free

Young love, treasured days
Young love, never fades
Young love, treasured days
Young love in the month of Ma
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Re: Love In The Month Of May (We Were Free)
Reply #1 on: April 30, 2014, 10:33:51

  I like this.....Is it just me, but your vocals sound remarkably like Fishs' to me....you two should get together ;D ;D
  Nice tone to your guitar playing....and great 'attack' (I've got a 'thing' about that ;D)

  Like the BV's....work very well.  Good delivery, nice 'clean' production, all round good stuff ;D ;D really enjoyed
  listening to this
 
  Thanks ;D ;D


Re: Love In The Month Of May (We Were Free)
Reply #2 on: April 30, 2014, 17:31:12
The first line your voice sounded like Matt Behringer from The National. Nice!
Vocals sound very nice all over.

I'm not too fond of the classical guitar sound, but it works on this track.
Would be interested to hear it played on a dreadnought though. Well, that's just personal preference of course :)

Enjoyable song!

S
Journalist by day, singer-songwriter at night


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Re: Love In The Month Of May (We Were Free)
Reply #3 on: April 30, 2014, 22:01:26
Hi,

Your vocals do sound a lot like our very own Fisch. That same delivery. Good vocals.
Nice sounding tune, if a little "dry." I like a bit more atmosphere in the music.

May be you will like the song again in a few months. I've suffered the same with tracks when i've invested loads of time in them.

Nice one.

Digger


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Re: Love In The Month Of May (We Were Free)
Reply #4 on: May 01, 2014, 16:58:36
well, that is catchy! commercial feel to it, i can imagine this on a pumping dance beat. For me the verses are stronger than the chorus, the melody flows nicer, rolls on


but a cool song, i think!!!
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Re: Love In The Month Of May (We Were Free)
Reply #5 on: May 02, 2014, 06:42:24
« Last Edit: May 02, 2014, 06:45:48 by fischermans »
Hello
I heard you have stolen my voice. ;D ;D ;D
Great song.If it were my song I would try to force the chorus a bit more.
I like the song very much.Have you recorded guitar and voice together?
Alexander


Re: Love In The Month Of May (We Were Free)
Reply #6 on: May 02, 2014, 12:34:40
Nice track, very stark. I'm curious about the mix though, it sounds a bit "live but in a box room". If that's not deliberate, then I'm sure that's just a matter of EQ/reverb to bring out the nice vox and guitar. Even if it is deliberate, personally, I'd redo the reverb for a slightly more open, warmer sound and using compression to give it the edginess it has now but in a more subtle way...


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Re: Love In The Month Of May (We Were Free)
Reply #7 on: May 10, 2014, 01:07:28
Lovely song well performed.
You're voice really works on this one, I could feel the emotion flowing.

Now the Crit:-
Lovely chord progression through the verses and great expression in the first verse.
Chorus built... but was one dimensional compared to the verse and the dropping melody and chord progression may be the cause.
As a result the next verse was not as impact-full.
Obviously as this is a work in progress that fade our was not the ending. :-)

Now suggestions:-
Can't fault the verses. Beautiful dude!
Chorus. Double the length and have a rising vocal line against the falling guitar part?  Vocal following A D E only going to the A G# A on the last line against the A G# A guitar. Or a variation...??? Just a thought. :-)

Production Pah!  It's a demo.... and a very good one.


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Re: Love In The Month Of May (We Were Free)
Reply #8 on: May 10, 2014, 09:14:26
off topic, but: it is good to see Mihkay still reviews like a young musical god  ;D ;D
if you want a (no deadline) challenge, Mihkay, Onemanband, and others, please join the "write a song with 5 random chords"-challenge  ;D ;D ;D ;D


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Re: Love In The Month Of May (We Were Free)
Reply #9 on: June 22, 2014, 17:18:16


 ooh yeah lovin this just so goooooood
 nice set of lyrics here and really well put to music


                   lovely tune man



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