• Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
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Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
on: April 23, 2019, 14:56:21
Hi guys, here's my entry into the forum competition the Magic Words Challenge. I can't decided whether I think this is garbage or quite brilliant. I've gone for a grunge/Seattle type sound on this one. As ever my vocals aren't that great.

Lyrics
I feel so, so sublime
and I feel like this life ain't mine
It's so charming to see you
Disarm me like this
and it's alarming to see you charm me like this

Chorus
I feel so high when you sing that lullaby
and I'll swallow everything that you say
I'll make a pillow underneath
this weeping willow
and i'll swallow everything that you say





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Re: Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
Reply #1 on: April 23, 2019, 22:14:17
I have to say...quite brilliant. You have turned a bit of a corner with that electric guitar. Both the playing and the tone have some serious ATTITUDE!!!

and it's alarming to see you charm me like this

Great lyric.
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Re: Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
Reply #2 on: April 23, 2019, 23:10:15
@realkevm If this is a lullaby, then I wonder what a nightmare is  :D I must say it is a very authentic approach to the challenge. Daring. It made me smile. Nice!
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Re: Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
Reply #3 on: April 24, 2019, 09:04:23
Like it a lot.
I am really curious about how it will 'keep up' in the challenge. Audiences are fickle. And so is the Kitchen, I'm afraid.
It'll stand out no matter what.
Kind regards, Gus


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Re: Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
Reply #4 on: April 24, 2019, 09:27:48
@Leonard Scaper thank you Sir. It's brough a new lease of life into my songwriting now i've started dabbling with electric again. Although my vocals are far from great I do think that this style of music suits my voice better or my voice suits it better anyway. Thanks for checking it out :)

@Pleudoniem glad it made you smile :) thought I might as well go all out!

@LePlongeur  Thanks Gus, yeah it'll stand out for sure but I imagine it will pale in comparison to the other entries, we'll see :)


Re: Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
Reply #5 on: April 24, 2019, 19:56:48
@realkevm hello there!! Very cool lyrics!! I agree about the electric guitar...I think it adds strength to the emotion you sing with. You have great energy in your music. Personally, I think this is one of the best lyrics Ive read by you...well done!  :pompom:
Do what makes your heart sing :)


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Re: Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
Reply #6 on: April 24, 2019, 19:58:52
@realkevm hello there!! Very cool lyrics!! I agree about the electric guitar...I think it adds strength to the emotion you sing with. You have great energy in your music. Personally, I think this is one of the best lyrics Ive read by you...well done!  :pompom:
Oh wow thank you Kelly that's really kind of you to say!


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Re: Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
Reply #7 on: April 26, 2019, 19:29:37
@realkevm, I got a big kick out of @Pleudoniem's lullaby/nightmare comment.  :D

Your take on the challenge is indeed unique - even bizarrely hypnotic in its way.   8)

I enjoyed the lyric and its internal rhyming, and especially like the turnaround message in these lines:
It's so charming to see you
Disarm me like this
and it's alarming to see you charm me like this


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Re: Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
Reply #8 on: April 28, 2019, 23:13:02
@realkevm  - digging the wave / punk feel - and the different guitars in the mix. The Lo-fi feel still produces a clear song, possibly because there are no heavy drums on it.
Liking the lyrics a lot too - specially:
"make a pillow underneath
this weeping willow"
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


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Re: Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
Reply #9 on: April 29, 2019, 19:23:19
@DonMar Thank you, he song is a bit all over the place really and i'll be doing a tightened up and evolved version sometime but i'm glad you like the lyrics, i'm quite proud of them.

@oorlab That's high praise man, very much appreciated!


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Re: Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
Reply #10 on: June 18, 2019, 16:50:28
Cool @realkevm , your style reminds me of @man of simple pleasures ! Haha..
Love the pure and raw sound, not polished at all, but it makes sense. Very authentic, love it!
Well done!!

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Re: Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
Reply #11 on: June 20, 2019, 21:37:49
yeah man @realkevm digging this, i like the guitar work mister!
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Re: Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
Reply #12 on: June 22, 2019, 00:25:56
This surprised me when the chorus kicked in - but in a good way @realkevm

The guitars sound great - I really like that heavy tone.

The vocals could sit better in the mix (no idea how you do that!) but I think it would help the overall sound.

But the song is great and I like your approach and lyrics - very creative.

cheers


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Re: Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
Reply #13 on: June 25, 2019, 23:32:11
Thanks guys, it's quite a departure for me (though not from the music I listen to), having a listen and the encouraging words are really appreciated :)


Re: Lullaby (Magic Words Challenge)
Reply #14 on: July 01, 2019, 14:45:21
Nice job @realkevm ! I feel that in some way I'm responsible for you entering the kitchen challenge....and then I kinda quit... :yawnee: .
Anyway, I think it's a real solid entry. You used the words but it doesn't sound at all contrived. I like the grunge guitar in there as it makes for some nice energy. Good show!
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