• Make you Stay
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Re: Make you Stay
Reply #15 on: March 21, 2017, 11:47:45
Thank you @Mutrins! I am not on iTunes yet - still very new to it all, but hopefully one day! Do you have any idea how I would go about doing this? :)


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Re: Make you Stay
Reply #16 on: March 21, 2017, 23:28:35
Really nice song @Alex and I really like your vocals.

The recording has a nice lo-fi feel to it - almost like an old 4 track tape machine recording. Which I think suits this song.

And, welcome to the kitchen!

cheers


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Re: Make you Stay
Reply #17 on: March 22, 2017, 10:08:32
Thanks @Jurgen  ::thumb::


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Re: Make you Stay
Reply #18 on: March 23, 2017, 03:40:10
@Alex, you have a great voice and your vocal delivery is perfect.  I personally wouldnt change a thing on the recording or sound.  I love the noise, the slight lack of clarity, and all of it.  It compliments the story and song so well.  It vibes perfectly.

My only issues with this are structural.  I think that the second verse is the highlight of the song and I wanted to hear it again much sooner.  I love the subtle backing vocals and how they elevate the pretty much identical melody that's in the first verse.  That bit of elevation combined with that lyric set moved me and completely separated it from the first verse.  I had to listen to each verse 5 times to make sure they were the same.  You tricked my ear and I love it!  The "Am I wasting time" part felt like a bridge to me though and I wasnt expecting that.  Im not certain that you need it there.  It works wonderfully where it is towards the end of the song though.

If you do decide to cut that part, you can bring back that beautiful second verse again, but I think that you could use the original lyrics to suggest an ending, like they suggest beginnings in the first go round.

You have this:

Such a feeling such a rush
It started off as little more than a crush
and it's the way you look tonight with your sorry eyes and your goodbye smile
there's nothing I can do to change your mind

Im hearing this:

Same old you and same old me
Beginning to see things differently
and it's the way you look tonight with your sorry eyes and your goodbye smile
there's nothing I can do to change your mind


That moves me again.  Im sad as hell just reading it.  Awesome work.  I might have to go cry now  :o


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Re: Make you Stay
Reply #19 on: March 23, 2017, 10:01:34
Thanks @Knate! You are totally write about the structure and lyrics etc. Love the idea of having the idea of endings coming in at the close to compliment the beginning. I like the idea of moving the 'bridge' to later too, so will have a play with it!

Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment  ::thumb::


Re: Make you Stay
Reply #20 on: March 24, 2017, 17:34:41
It's taken me a long time to get to review this @Alex - it's just gorgeous.. You have a really lovely voice - really captivating.. Welcome to the kitchen!!


Re: Make you Stay
Reply #21 on: March 24, 2017, 19:57:42
Hi Alex,

like this song a lot... sometimes your voice is a bit lost in the mix... maybe you could put it a bit more to the front?

Otherwise I really like this one...

Best,

Fabian


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Re: Make you Stay
Reply #22 on: March 24, 2017, 21:36:56
Thanks @Zedd , that's very kind of you!

Thanks @junemay , I am not good at mixing/rpoducing, but I'm learning, thanks for identifying this and I will work on it  :) :)!

Thanks to you both for listening and taking time to comment  ::thumb::


Re: Make you Stay
Reply #23 on: March 25, 2017, 01:13:51
Great voice and it all works very well very genuine sounding.    I would brighten up those vocals a little bit in your mix so I can here more of your inflections.   


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Re: Make you Stay
Reply #24 on: March 25, 2017, 09:45:25
Thanks @eblossman , I am going to try and get someone to help me mix it better so will work on it! Thanks again for listening :)



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