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maybe mom (another original)
on: July 30, 2017, 21:49:38
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Hi everyone,

This is my eighth post! I've been working on this song for awhile. I was working on fitting the words right in their spot within the song and strumming. I just could never get a recording I liked, but I finally got one I like for the most part. This is a song I came up with for my mom, she's a recurring theme it seems. It was supposed to be for Mother's day. Oops
Honestly I can't see myself purchasing recording equipment. I just really like playing guitar and trying to get better at singing. I've been thinking of joining this type of guitar club at my University. It's called the Singer Songwriter society and it seems like just a bunch of students playing guitar which sounds awesome! I'm kinda nervous though/ kinda a loner. I haven't sung in front of anyone or played guitar with anyone due to social anxieties.
Thanks for any and all criticisms!

https://soundcloud.com/95luisb/maybe-mom

LYRICS

Slowly youíre closing your eyes now
I know that for the most part things were
Never as you wanted to be

Usually, I was wishing I could change things
I-Remember when you tried to explain to me
How things get too far gone

Black and blue skies and eyes
I never liked to see you cry
I know just why you stuck around and
How it broke you down

I wish you weren't so tough
And finally said you had enough
You could leave but, well you'd still be around
Truthfully Iíve been scared for so long
Truly Iíve been the one scared all along

And truly thereís no need because
Youíre always there for me
It makes me sad to see you leave, you say donít be
It makes me sad to see you leave, you say but Iím free

You flash a smile and then a tear
Forcing mine to reappear
Suddenly, Iím awake because I see whatís going on
Suddenly, Iím awake because I see whatís going on

Just called to see whatís going on




Re: maybe mom (another original)
Reply #1 on: July 30, 2017, 22:31:21
Haha this one is sweet  ::Note:: ::Note::  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ;D ;D ;D ;D Just keep it up  ::smiley:: ::Note:: the end is a little abrupt  ;)


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Re: maybe mom (another original)
Reply #2 on: July 31, 2017, 15:34:09
I love this style of yours, @95luisb .....the song and the performance is so very raw and real. You will do very well with other singer/songwriters if you just play this song....just like this.
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Re: maybe mom (another original)
Reply #3 on: July 31, 2017, 18:46:21
Good Work  ::thumb::

I agree with @Leonard Scaper, you will do fine in a guitar club at university @95luisb. You need to join to allow you to learn from others, make musical friends and have fun. ;-)
Music will act as a good release from the pressures of study and often when you start interacting with others musically all sort of things can happen.
Just look at the Kitchen itself for examples of this. Make sure you keep us informed of your progress and hopefully we can hear more of your songs soon.


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Re: maybe mom (another original)
Reply #4 on: August 02, 2017, 01:16:19
I love this style of yours, @95luisb .....the song and the performance is so very raw and real. You will do very well with other singer/songwriters if you just play this song....just like this.
Thank you guys for the positive feedback. it truly means a lot! I will join this club! thankyou



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