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Mother Nature ( FAWM #3 )
on: February 03, 2015, 21:42:15
« Last Edit: February 08, 2015, 00:30:44 by seriousfun »
I am part of FAWM this year and this is a song I wrote yesterday to fulfill part of my FAWM commitment for the month. It is a song about New Zealand and the clean, green beauty it is known for. I do hope ya'll enjoy it.

https://soundcloud.com/allan-kilgour/mother-nature

Mother Nature
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 When it rains in the Mamaku
 Its 100 years till the water flows
 in the Redwood trees
 And the spring is crystal clear
 As the water runs away
 the trees wave farewell in the breeze
 20000 litres a second, to the sea

 When the water falls in Fiordland
 It hits the sea with
 The force of an open dam
 water floats upon the sea
 like a lake in a valley
 resting on solid land
 a billion plus litres of water, on the sea

 Bridge
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 Mother Nature, ooohh ohhh
 Ahhh Mother Nature
 She?s Looking after me
 She?s Looking after you

 The water gives way to an ocean of green
 Grasses and leaves adorn the dunes and the dales
 Birds walk around the forest floor
 The trees bend over like a sloop, under sail
Mother natures creatures living as one

 Mountain peaks catch the winter snow
 as it falls from the sky and
 waits for the summer sun
 Mother nature has a storage plan
 For the water she needs when
 The summer drought has begun
 Mother nature is looking after her land
Part time musician, photographer, astronomer, computer pragramer and husband.


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Re: Mother Nature
Reply #1 on: February 03, 2015, 22:42:01
Hi  Allan
               Lovely song about New Zealand  Its a good song,nicely recorded,well sung  excellent strumming on the guitar.

 Just a minor thing but when you  go from the  C  chord to the F  it kind of  distracts  & I think if you had that  happening less frequently
It might  be  a good thing.  The song itself is  very pleasant   & I like your stuff  :)  :)
                                                                                                     
                                                                                         R'gardz     Stylus :)


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Re: Mother Nature
Reply #2 on: February 03, 2015, 22:42:59
Okay, I'm a bit confused here...
You said you wrote this just yesterday. I was expecting 'just' a rough demo - this is fantastic :o You did all this in a day?!
If you end up with 14 songs like this one in February, I'd call that a winner album!

Right away I love the guitars, more specifically the combination of two slightly different strumming patterns left and right. That's a cool and very energetic way to start this song!
The drums sound crisp and cut through the mix nicely.
Oh, and I suppose I don't have to mention that the vocal performance is pretty damn perfect, too. (I'll still do so, because it is!)

One tiny flaw I thought I heard was at 1:52 when the guitars seemed to suddenly get quieter and move to the background for a second just before the snare comes in. Might just be at my end though.

Seriously, I think you've done a fantastic job on this, really good :)
Good luck for FAWM, seems like you caught a good start into the challenge.

How I'd love to visit NZ one day!


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Re: Mother Nature
Reply #3 on: February 03, 2015, 23:10:12
eh yeay, hello! that is pretty nice to listen too, very , very nice

wow, and yes i agree with Michael

that among others the drums sounds so nice and crisp, and all of it does
NICE

oh and this is supossed to be a forum about songwriting....
the song is excellent!!!

this doesn't sound like there was any hurry to make many songs in a short time, like FAWM

well, very impressed once again, Allan! Do us / me the pleasure to keep posting all your FAWM work and progress and proccesses here...from day to day

and

keep doing the impossible!!!!
me, myself, and Pie


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Re: Mother Nature
Reply #4 on: February 04, 2015, 04:58:15
I dare not post all my FAWM songs here, I would overload the forum :)

Ill put up 1 a week if that's ok, not expecting critiques, just a listen and I will be  happy chappy.


Allan.


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Re: Mother Nature
Reply #5 on: February 04, 2015, 05:45:00
Just googled FAWM - wow, that's some undertaking.. Respect!!

Really like this song and as others have said, great arrangement and production in a very short timeframe..

I'd also love to hear more..

Z


Re: Mother Nature
Reply #6 on: February 04, 2015, 15:01:11
Hi Alan, What an awesome tribute song to 'Mother Nature'  :) She deserves it :) It's a wonderful song and I can't believe you put this together so quickly  :o
I love the lyrics and the mandolin is a nice touch, as well as the double guitars :)  Your vocals are exceptional as always  :)
The production sounds really good too  :)
I also googled FAWN...I'd never heard of it before...you certainly are ambitious...good for you :) :)


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Re: Mother Nature
Reply #7 on: February 04, 2015, 16:21:10
yes i also respect the challenge FAWM presents, but it would not work for me, i like to tweak around on one song a while before going to the next one...but respect!

and if it produces songs like this, not much need to tweak anything!!!!

but pleas post what you want to share, Allan, everything you do sounds good to me.......and perhaps (if you dare  ;D ;D ;D ;D) the whole album at the end of FAWM also released on the kitchen????


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Re: Mother Nature
Reply #8 on: February 06, 2015, 20:12:58
Allan,
Really, really like this.
The verse sound really fresh and flows nicely to complement the words which are cool and a bit different.
And you nailed the mandolin too.
Perhaps tone down the snare a tad and bring the bass up a bit
Organic
 :)
Neil



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Re: Mother Nature
Reply #9 on: February 07, 2015, 12:54:41
[off topic], but...Hi Neil, nice to see you around  :) :) :)

how are you doing?



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Re: Mother Nature ( FAWM #3 )
Reply #10 on: February 15, 2022, 19:28:06
Hey @seriousfun  :)

for the  current Forum project  of curating an album with the Theme “Nature – Green” your song is nominated. ::thumb::

For more details check this thread   =>> https://www.songwriter-forum-kitchen.com/forum/seo/3/curating-an-album-of-works-by-kitchen-members/7381/   ::Rachel::

We think it  is a great opportunity to share (outside of the forum) some your excellent work.
Please confirm in that thread that you give permission for your piece to be published in this context.

Thank you very much :)
Mo


Re: Mother Nature ( FAWM #3 )
Reply #11 on: February 19, 2022, 23:32:52
Excellent song @seriousfun well produced and with well thought out lyrics and chord progression.  :praise:

Another great nomination by @Mo  ::thumb::



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