• Mural, a tryout ballad making use of my new standup bass.
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« Last Edit: December 28, 2018, 19:48:32 by Pleudoniem »
Hi guys,

Here is a song that I recorded with my recently acquired electric standup-bass. Obviously I still have to learn to master the instrument like Stanley Clarke does, but you'll forgive me if I am not that good yet. Nevertheless, I think the song has just worked out ok. Would you agree with me? And have a little mercy on my inexperience.

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Pleudoniem: composer; bass guitarist; guitarist; singer; drummer; tap-guitarist - o, and yes... erm- a bit of keys. Open for collabs.
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Re: Mural, a tryout balled on my new standup bass.
Reply #1 on: December 27, 2018, 01:58:01
I really, REALLY like this piece. I have had a long day and at its end this song is just perfect. I love the delicate vocals and all of the instrumentation....including that bass.

I'm listening on my best headphones and they are telling me that you should not be be afraid to EQ  and compress a bit more low end sustain into that bass, though.

I had to listen again right way. Just closing my eyes and listening now........

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Reply #2 on: December 27, 2018, 02:12:15
@Leonard Scaper Thanks! That is why the review section is so valuable :) I'll take a listen again and see if compression may do any good. I have already lowered the bass volume a slight bit though, as it was quite pressing indeed. I hardly ever listen on headphones though, so the sound I get may be different altogether.

Done. Could you see if it is any better now?


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Re: Mural, a tryout balled on my new standup bass.
Reply #3 on: December 27, 2018, 10:36:02
Nice job. Whatever you did has placed that bass perfectly in the mix now to my ears. I love hearing it.....had to strain to hear it before.

Love this song......another enjoyable listen.


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Reply #4 on: December 27, 2018, 12:21:38
@Pleudoniem bass and drums sound outstanding - very delicate and crystal clear separation. For the vocals I notice the s sound s - may be that can be helped somehow.
In the lyrics I wonder what it all means. I understand the 'Mural'  but what is a "meroles feet"? And who or what is the She in "As the current she brings"...
Sounds mystical, pleasingly so - may be better left unexplained.
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


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Reply #5 on: December 27, 2018, 12:31:43
« Last Edit: December 27, 2018, 13:20:35 by Pleudoniem »
@oorlab I could try de-essing. Unfortunately that also usually kills other frequencies. I'll be downtown shortly, so I'll give it a try later tonight.

Some of the words you might want to look up. Possibly that will help you get deeper into the lyric, but I am as reluctant as Bob Dylan in that I am not going to explain anything. I am not going to add any fake footnotes to the text such as TS Eliot did in The Waste Land. Let the words speak for themselves.



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Reply #6 on: December 28, 2018, 20:18:18
Hi, Pleudonien. I loved the style and the sound of your song. The harmonic set is totally my taste and ... I love the different parts/styles/ambients..... The lyrics have left me a little perplexed...  Great work.

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Reply #7 on: December 29, 2018, 01:06:40
@Pleudoniem   Very good bass and drum tracks with interesting layers from ambient sounds to horns. The lyrics I just let flow by... repetition of "talk to me ghosts"  sums up the mood, which has time to build.
I hear some later King Crimson, which is a good thing.

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Reply #8 on: December 29, 2018, 02:13:18
@robertkc @oorlab @Mora Amaro La Loba The lyrics erm? Well, possibly you could read them with a little touch of how Billy Collins looks at poems? I absolutely love the one below, I take an admiring bow to how he makes it all clear.

Introduction to Poetry - Billy Collins

I ask them to take a poem
and hold it up to the light
like a color slide

or press an ear against its hive.

I say drop a mouse into a poem
and watch him probe his way out,

or walk inside the poem's room
and feel the walls for a light switch.

I want them to waterski
across the surface of a poem
waving at the author's name on the shore.

But all they want to do
is tie the poem to a chair with rope
and torture a confession out of it.

They begin beating it with a hose
to find out what it really means.


Re: Mural, a tryout ballad making use of my new standup bass.
Reply #9 on: December 29, 2018, 02:39:59
 This song was a mind expansion of sorts for me. I am fairly picky about what I  will listen to for pure enjoyment and this would be on my play list.

 I have always been intrigued by those who write  in ways that open me up to new ideas. Yes it is repetitive but in an interesting way.  The upright bass sound wonderful as does the drums. I'm giving myself away that the drums sound real too. If they aren't you totally fooled me.

I plan to hang around these  parts. Maybe some of the  poetry will rub off on me.


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Reply #10 on: December 29, 2018, 03:11:38
« Last Edit: December 29, 2018, 03:14:41 by Pleudoniem »
@Timothy Smith Well, I half fooled you then :) I played the drums myself alright, they are not from a machine or a prefab midi-clip. The sound is from Superior Drummer though, but played through an electronic drum kit. The thing is that I have neighbours, and a real kit... well, you get the idea.

I am happy that you like the song :)



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Reply #11 on: December 29, 2018, 09:36:36
You are so absolutely not going to believe this.
But I'll tell it anyway.

1
The interior of our house, is one mural. And it's a mural you can walk through.
The ground floor is done in accordance with Göthe's colouring rules.

2
One of my friends makes a lot of murals. The most extreme one was only visible during the exhibition. And after the exhibition it was blotted out/painted over with white paint to make room for another exhibition.
A mural you could walk through.....

The making of is still there, not painted over like the mural.
Gijs (Frieling) is really famous for his two dimensional Paradise paintings.
I hope you don't mind me posting a 10 minute video about 'ŕ Mon seul désir', the name of the mural.

I'll give your song an extra spin....
Needless to say i like it very much.
Kind regards, Gus









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Re: Mural, a tryout ballad making use of my new standup bass.
Reply #12 on: December 29, 2018, 12:11:49
« Last Edit: December 29, 2018, 12:32:56 by MrBouzouki »
What a great track @Pleudoniem . I was a proper Stanley Clarke fan back in the day, in my 'jazz phase' and it certainly has the underlying vibe.
He has quite a toppy sound so I wonder if messing around with EQ more might give you a bit more presence to the bass going forward.

One technique I picked up this year was tweaking the higher EQ first for bass to make it stand out more before turning up the volume.  That extra edge to the bass sound just makes it punch through a bit more. Having said all that, I think for this one it sits just right, the mellow vibe sits just right to my ears.

I'm very impressed with the whispered lyrics, still very clear to the listener, and the harmonic minor lines add that air of mystery. Vocally, you are in the zone and the space in this track is as important as the instrumentation. Maybe a touch more top on the brass, but then again maybe not as it might spoil the mood.

As regards the lyrics, no explanation is needed, as I feel it is like "Whiter Shade of Pale" and their ilk and the listener will draw their own conclusions or always be a bit baffled.  Not understanding  the lyrics might get somebody to play it again so in a way it's a good thing. ;-)

Yes, now on my third play whilst typing this and it's one of your top drawer songs in my opinion.

Good Job

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